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14. juni 2006 af
zjuliez (Slettet)
Bend it like Beckham
Jesminder Bhamra:
- Also called Jess. She is an Indian girl who lives in Hounslow in England. She is a second generation immigrant, and her passion is football. She is living for football! She is wearing very sporty clothes, (knickers and a top) and she has her hair in a ponytail. She has been playing football ever since she was a little girl, and is not planning to stop! But her mother is seeing it from another perspective. Jess lives with her mother and father, Mr. And Mrs. Bhamra, and her older sister Pinky. Jess has this dream, to become a professional footballer, but again – her parents has other plans for her. They want her to finish High School, go to Collage and then later become a lawyer. And definitely teach her how to become a good and traditional Indian wife, for the Indian boys in the little “society” they have in England. Jess’ biggest idol is David Beckham, he is like a god for her! There is posters hanging all over her room, and she is talking to him every day. One day, as usual, she is going to the park to play football with some friends. In all secret, a girl called Jules is watching her play. She turns to Jess, and tells her that she is playing for the local girl football team, and she would like to see Jess next time for training. And then suddenly her life turned around! But her parents do still not want her to play football, so she lies and is playing for the local girl team in a long time without her parents permission. Jules and Jess has become best friends, and is unfortunately falling in love with the same guy, their coach, Joe. There is happening a lot of things and Jess learns to trust herself, and take all the chances that you can get in life!
Jules:
If Jules want something she is definitely going to get it! She is also into football, in fact, she started Hounslow Girl Football Team. She is a leader! She is very sporty dressed, not much make-up, short hair and 100% English.
Comparing:
Jules and Jess is much like each other, and have a lot of things in common. They both wear sporty clothes, not so muck make-up and football means everything to both of them! The only thing is that they don’t have the same religion and family, but that doesn’t matter, cause they have the same passion for football!
My own opinion: A very good book, kind of reflects to a “normal teenager” life, about love, family and other teen “problems” . You learn about a different culture and how to trust yourself and take some chances, sometimes you get lucky!
Kan i finde nogle fejl ? :)
Den er lavet som opg. til filmen ( på dansk ) Bedre end Beckham
Håber der er nogele som kan hjælpe ? :)
Knus , .
Jesminder Bhamra:
- Also called Jess. She is an Indian girl who lives in Hounslow in England. She is a second generation immigrant, and her passion is football. She is living for football! She is wearing very sporty clothes, (knickers and a top) and she has her hair in a ponytail. She has been playing football ever since she was a little girl, and is not planning to stop! But her mother is seeing it from another perspective. Jess lives with her mother and father, Mr. And Mrs. Bhamra, and her older sister Pinky. Jess has this dream, to become a professional footballer, but again – her parents has other plans for her. They want her to finish High School, go to Collage and then later become a lawyer. And definitely teach her how to become a good and traditional Indian wife, for the Indian boys in the little “society” they have in England. Jess’ biggest idol is David Beckham, he is like a god for her! There is posters hanging all over her room, and she is talking to him every day. One day, as usual, she is going to the park to play football with some friends. In all secret, a girl called Jules is watching her play. She turns to Jess, and tells her that she is playing for the local girl football team, and she would like to see Jess next time for training. And then suddenly her life turned around! But her parents do still not want her to play football, so she lies and is playing for the local girl team in a long time without her parents permission. Jules and Jess has become best friends, and is unfortunately falling in love with the same guy, their coach, Joe. There is happening a lot of things and Jess learns to trust herself, and take all the chances that you can get in life!
Jules:
If Jules want something she is definitely going to get it! She is also into football, in fact, she started Hounslow Girl Football Team. She is a leader! She is very sporty dressed, not much make-up, short hair and 100% English.
Comparing:
Jules and Jess is much like each other, and have a lot of things in common. They both wear sporty clothes, not so muck make-up and football means everything to both of them! The only thing is that they don’t have the same religion and family, but that doesn’t matter, cause they have the same passion for football!
My own opinion: A very good book, kind of reflects to a “normal teenager” life, about love, family and other teen “problems” . You learn about a different culture and how to trust yourself and take some chances, sometimes you get lucky!
Kan i finde nogle fejl ? :)
Den er lavet som opg. til filmen ( på dansk ) Bedre end Beckham
Håber der er nogele som kan hjælpe ? :)
Knus , .
Svar #1
14. juni 2006 af cc89 (Slettet)
Hej (:
Jeg har fundet følgende fejl, og der er nok flere, som jeg har overset:
1) "But her mother is seeing it from another perspective."
> Her skal du nok ikke bruge udvidet tid (is seeing), da det angiver en handling, som er fanget ét øjeblik og ikke en generel påstand.
-> I stedet ville jeg sige:
"But her mother sees it from another perspective/point of view".
2)".. her parents has other plans for her."
> Parents/forældre er flertal, derfor skal verbet 'has' i stedet være have.
-> ".. her parents have other plans for her."
3) "There is posters hanging all over her room, and she is talking to him every day."
> Fejl 1: posters/plakater er flertal, derfor skal 'is' i stedet være are.
> Fejl 2: Du skal nok ikke bruge udvidet tid, men i stedet for 'is talking' skal du nok skrive 'talks'.
-> "There are posters hanging all over her room, and she talks to him every day."
4)Gud staves med stort. (> God, ikke god).
5) "But her parents do still not want her to play football.."
> For mig lyder sætningen lidt kludret, så jeg ville nok i stedet sige:
"But her parents still don't want her to play football.."
6) "Jules and Jess has become best friends.."
> Jules og Jess er flertal, så verbet skal i stedet for 'has' være 'have'.
-> "Jules and Jess have become best friends.."
7) "There is happening a lot of things and Jess learns to trust herself, and take all the chances that you can get in life!
> Sætningen er lidt fordansket.
A lot of things er flertal,og forøvrigt skal du nok heller ikke her bruge udvidet tid. Så i stedet for verbet 'is happening',kan du måske skrive:
-> "A lot of things happen, and Jess learns to trust herself, and how to take all the chances that you get in life!"
8) "If Jules want something she is definitely going to get it!"
> Jules er ental 3. person, derfor skal 'want' skiftes ud med 'wants'.
9) "Jules and Jess is much like each other".
> Jules og Jess er flertal, 'is' skal derfor udskiftes med 'are'. "Much like each other" kan også udskiftes med "much alike".
-> "Jules and Jess are much alike".
Generelt skal du især passe på med:
- Simpel - og udvidet tid.
- Kongruensfejl (overensstemmelse mellem udsagnsled og grundled).
- Ènsformig sætningskonstruktion (størstedelen af sætningerne begynder med 'She').
Jeg håber, du kan bruge mine rettelser til noget (:
Jeg har fundet følgende fejl, og der er nok flere, som jeg har overset:
1) "But her mother is seeing it from another perspective."
> Her skal du nok ikke bruge udvidet tid (is seeing), da det angiver en handling, som er fanget ét øjeblik og ikke en generel påstand.
-> I stedet ville jeg sige:
"But her mother sees it from another perspective/point of view".
2)".. her parents has other plans for her."
> Parents/forældre er flertal, derfor skal verbet 'has' i stedet være have.
-> ".. her parents have other plans for her."
3) "There is posters hanging all over her room, and she is talking to him every day."
> Fejl 1: posters/plakater er flertal, derfor skal 'is' i stedet være are.
> Fejl 2: Du skal nok ikke bruge udvidet tid, men i stedet for 'is talking' skal du nok skrive 'talks'.
-> "There are posters hanging all over her room, and she talks to him every day."
4)Gud staves med stort. (> God, ikke god).
5) "But her parents do still not want her to play football.."
> For mig lyder sætningen lidt kludret, så jeg ville nok i stedet sige:
"But her parents still don't want her to play football.."
6) "Jules and Jess has become best friends.."
> Jules og Jess er flertal, så verbet skal i stedet for 'has' være 'have'.
-> "Jules and Jess have become best friends.."
7) "There is happening a lot of things and Jess learns to trust herself, and take all the chances that you can get in life!
> Sætningen er lidt fordansket.
A lot of things er flertal,og forøvrigt skal du nok heller ikke her bruge udvidet tid. Så i stedet for verbet 'is happening',kan du måske skrive:
-> "A lot of things happen, and Jess learns to trust herself, and how to take all the chances that you get in life!"
8) "If Jules want something she is definitely going to get it!"
> Jules er ental 3. person, derfor skal 'want' skiftes ud med 'wants'.
9) "Jules and Jess is much like each other".
> Jules og Jess er flertal, 'is' skal derfor udskiftes med 'are'. "Much like each other" kan også udskiftes med "much alike".
-> "Jules and Jess are much alike".
Generelt skal du især passe på med:
- Simpel - og udvidet tid.
- Kongruensfejl (overensstemmelse mellem udsagnsled og grundled).
- Ènsformig sætningskonstruktion (størstedelen af sætningerne begynder med 'She').
Jeg håber, du kan bruge mine rettelser til noget (:
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