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28. april 2007 af
nadiapiien (Slettet)
Nogen der vil rette det engelsk jeg har skrevet ?
Formål: Strukturering, herunder Cohesion/Coherence
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The Bacons send their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he started to play truant, and his poetry took on a violent tinge, he smoked a lot of pot.
And after Aaron was attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, his parents remembered hearing about a child who has had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think that what they did was the right thing to do because Aaron was very wild and rebellious.
It could also just have been a phase, and all they had to do was to sit down all three of them and talked things over and if that did not help, they should have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year. So he could change.
They should have investigated the school a little more than they did, because then they could have prevented his death.
Formål: Strukturering, herunder Cohesion/Coherence
Følge en opgaveformulering korrekt anvendelse af gram.
The Bacons send their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he started to play truant, and his poetry took on a violent tinge, he smoked a lot of pot.
And after Aaron was attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, his parents remembered hearing about a child who has had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think that what they did was the right thing to do because Aaron was very wild and rebellious.
It could also just have been a phase, and all they had to do was to sit down all three of them and talked things over and if that did not help, they should have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year. So he could change.
They should have investigated the school a little more than they did, because then they could have prevented his death.
Svar #1
28. april 2007 af sille1 (Slettet)
The Bacons family send their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he has started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attaced by a gang in the school parking lot, Aarons parents remembered hearing about a child who has had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of him being wild and rebellious..
kunne skrives sådan det første.
After being attaced by a gang in the school parking lot, Aarons parents remembered hearing about a child who has had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of him being wild and rebellious..
kunne skrives sådan det første.
Svar #2
28. april 2007 af nadiapiien (Slettet)
attaced ? mener du ikke attacked? han blev jo overfaldet
Den sidste linie kan jeg ikk få til at passe.
Den sidste linie kan jeg ikk få til at passe.
Svar #3
30. april 2007 af nadiapiien (Slettet)
Her er så det færdie resultat. håber der er nogen der vil rette den?
The call of the wild.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school, and there are also a lot of kids who takes drugs and has become violent.
The Bacons family sends their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he has started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of him being wild and rebellious.
It could also just have been a phase, and all they had to do was to sit down all three of them and talked things over and if that did not help, they should have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year. So he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked with him every time he did something wrong, and then he could have been alive today.
If they had sent him to a doctor when the heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
The call of the wild.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school, and there are also a lot of kids who takes drugs and has become violent.
The Bacons family sends their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he has started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of him being wild and rebellious.
It could also just have been a phase, and all they had to do was to sit down all three of them and talked things over and if that did not help, they should have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year. So he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked with him every time he did something wrong, and then he could have been alive today.
If they had sent him to a doctor when the heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
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