rettelse af stil om fedme

Hejsa.
jeg håber at der er nogen der vil hjælpe mig med at rette lidt i min stil. ved godt at den er lidt lang, men kan ikke selv se de fejl jeg har lavet.
(den skal forresten afleveres fredag aften)
på forhånd tak



Obesity

Obesity has become one of the largest health problems in the western world. Especially in the USA. People stuff themselves with sugar and fast-food every day and they keep getting bigger and bigger. Globally, there are more than 1 billion overweight adults and at least 300 million of them are obese. Obesity and overweight pose a major risk for chronic diseases, including type 2 diabetes, hypertension, strokes and certain forms of cancer, but still people can’t stop eating the unhealthy food.
Obesity occurs when a person gets more calories from food than he or she burns. Our bodies need calories to sustain life and to be physically active, but to maintain weight we need to balance the energy we eat with the energy we use. When a person eats more calories than he or she burns, the energy balance is tipped toward weight gain and in some cases obesity. That is also why it is so important that people exercise.
Another reason is that people today do not have the same food traditions as they had earlier. People simply do not have the time to prepare a good and healthy dinner. They live in a world full of stress and therefore fast-food is an easy way to spare the time and the trouble in the kitchen.
Advertising is of course also a big reason why people have changed their eating habits. Companies like McDonalds and Burger King spend huge sums of money on advertising for their products. Reminding people that junk food easily and quickly can satisfy your immediate hunger and nutritional needs. Junk food ads are everywhere, for instance in supermarkets. Often displayed so nicely that you cannot miss them when you are shopping. That is not the case with healthy food. You don’t see any commercials on TV for fruit and vegetables.
Genetic, environment or other factors may also play a part.

I want to comment on text 4, which is about children, who are teased because of their lunch packs and their choice of healthy food. The children are linking certain food with gender and social class, and healthy food is considered as “posh”. Among the young people peer pressure is a big problem, because no one wants to eat healthy if they will be left out of the group.
The text is easy to read and understand. There are some difficult words, but even if you don’t understand them, you still get the meaning of the text. There are many places where the text is written italic, to accentuate some words. There are also many slangs, which supports that it is a text written about children.


If we want to change people’s unhealthy eating habits, it is very important to inform them about the consequences. I think that it is a very good idea to start banning junk food ads completely from TV during children’s programmes. That would spare the children from commercials they should not be exposed to, at such a young age. As a child you do not think of the consequences of eating too much junk food. It never crosses a child’s mind that too much unhealthy food can lead to cancer and diabetes. That is also why I think it is wrong that some firms exploit children’s ignorance. In my opinion it is not ethically correct to encourage children to buy junk food and therefore it shouldn’t be allowed.
Furthermore, it would help people, who eat too much junk food, not to be constantly tempted by the commercials. So even though it is not a complete solution, it is a start. I think that for every junk food commercial there is on TV, the government should make 2 commercials for exercise equipments and healthy food. I hope that that could prevent people in Britain and Denmark from becoming part of the obesity epidemic seen in the USA.
One thing is to inform people about the consequences, another thing is to persuade them to buy the healthy food instead of the fast-food. I think that the easiest way to do that would be to lower the prices on fruit, vegetables and water and to raise the prices on fast-food, soda and candy.
There should also be much more control with, what kind of food the children buys in the schools. After my opinion it would be a good idea to make common food solutions. In that way, there would be no bullying about “wrong” lunch packs.

To conclude we have to realise that today we live in a world, where fast-food becomes more and more normal as a solution on our busy everyday lives. We eat it because it is easy and because it is as cheap. We just forget which consequences that goes with it.

Take care of you health through you eating habits.
You have only one life