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Den dag hvor Fatima’s tante havde sagt til Fatima’s far Atila, at hun havde set Fatima med en dreng i byen, har hun haft mange hårde dage. Hendes far og tante bliver ved med at sige til Fatima at hun skulle mødes med Ali’s dreng. Hun siger altid nej, men hendes far ville snart finde en dag til dem, så de kan mødes. Imens alt det der sker mødes Fatima altid med Saret efter arbejdet, for hun må ellers ikke komme ud, for hendes far mere. Fatima og Saret er forelsket i hinanden, de har det sjovt sammen. Fatima bliver mere forelsket i ham, når han søde ting om hende, og når han smiler. Smilet gør hende glad, selvom hun har den tanke med at mødes med Ali’s dreng, når hun ikke gider. Hun var forelsket, og det var kun i Saret. De snakkede altid om fremtiden, med at være sammen for evigt, men det gjorde Fatima ked af det nogle gange. For hendes far vil aldrig give lov til at de kan blive gift, og være sammen for evigt. Udover det med Saret og Ali’s dreng, havde hun til at få humøret op med hendes nye job, som Saret havde fundet til hende. Hun er rigtig glad for sit nye job, hun er blevet 17 år, og gik ikke i skole, så hun arbejdede som sekretær i et firma, som de sagde OK i den alder. Men en dag sker der så noget. Saret og Fatima havde taget nogle billeder sammen, hvor de havde gemt det på deres telefon. Fatima skulle på arbejde, hun var sovet over, så hun skyndte sig at tag sit tøj på, tog sin taske med en fart, og styrtede mod døren. Hun troede hun havde sin mobil med, men det ligger hun mærke til at det ikke gør, da hun var på vej hjem. Hendes hjerte banker helt vildt, at det var som om det skulle komme ud. Hun var bange for at hendes far så billederne eller andre. Hun åbner døren til huset, de sad alle sammen i stuen, faren kiggede på hende da hun kom ind, han rejste sig op, og gik hen imod hende.
”Jeg skulle aldrig have set, de her billeder, jeg har bestilt flybilletter, vi rejser til Tyrkiet om 4 dage, du skal forloves med Ali’s dreng.”
Fatima’s tåre trillede ned af hendes kind, hun vidste ikke hvad hun skulle gøre eller sige. Hun gik ind på sit værelse, uden at sige et ord. Hendes telefon lå på bordet, hun tog telefonen og ringede til Saret, hun fortalte ham hvad der var sket, han blev ked af det, og sagde at han havde en plan, han sagde at de skulle gå herfra i morgen. De kunne bo hos hans moster, langt væk fra Fatima’s familie. Så kunne de giftes, når de blev 18 år. Fatima ville gerne, men det kunne hun ikke gøre mod sin forældre, men hun elskede Saret. Og sagde ja til det. De skulle mødes kl. 05.00 om morgen, så hendes forældre ikke lagde mærke til at hun gik. Hun havde ikke sovet hele natten, hun har prøvet at skrive et brev, men kunne ikke. Hun gjorde sine ting klar, og gik ud af døren.
Farvel, husk at jeg altid ville elske og savne jer...


På engelsk;

The day Fatima's aunt had said to Fatima's dad Atila, that se had seen Fatima with a boy in the town, has she had many hard days. Her dad and aunt keep saying to Fatima that se must meet with Ali's boy. She always says no, but her dad would soon find a day to them, so they can meet. Meanwhile all this happen meets Fatima always with Saret aftet work, cause she is not really allow to come out, for her dad anymore. Fatima and saret is in love with each other, they have fun together. Fatima gets more in love with him, when he says sweet things about her, and when he smiles. The smile make her happy although se has the thought about meeting with Ali's boy, when she doesn't want. She was in love, and it was only in Saret. They always talk about the future, about being together forever, but it made Fatima sad sometimes. Cause her dad will never allow them to get married, and be together forever. Besides that about Saret and Ali's boy, she got her humour up with her new job, which Saret had found to her.She is really happy about her new job, she has become 17 years, and didn't went to school, so she workt as a secretatry ind a company, which they said Ok to, in that ages. But one day some happent. Saret and Fatima had take some pictures together, which they had hide on their phones. Fatima should on work, she had sleept over, so she hurry up to take her clothes on, toke her bag fast, and rushed to the door. She thought she had her phone with her, but find out that it not is, when she is on way home. Her heart beat wild, like it was going to come out. She was afraid that her dad or somebody else saw the pictures. She opens the door to the house, they all sit in the livingroom, the dad lookt at her when she came in, he get up, and walk over to her. " I should nvever had seen, these pictures, I have order flytickets, we travel to Tyrkey around 4 days, you are going to get engaged with Ali's boy". Fatima's tear roll down on her cheek, she did'nt knew what to do or say. She went into her room, without saying a word. Her phone was on the tabel, she took the phone and callt to Saret, she told him about what had happen, he got sas, and said that he had a plan, he said that they should to away from here tomorrow. They could lived at his aunt, far away from Fatima's family. So could they get married, when they became 18 years. Fatima would, but she couldn't do that to her parents, but she loved Saret. And said yes to it. They should meet 5.00 in the moring, so her parents diden't notice that she went away. She hadn't sleept all the night, she tried ti write a letter, but couldn't. She did her things ready, and walk out of the door. Goodbye, remember that I always would love and miss you.