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Jeg har en lille opgave for, hvor det er jeg skal skrive et "letter to the editor". Vi har fået udleveret en artikel omkring spiseforestyrelser, og vores opgave er så, at skrive et læserbrev. Hvori, jeg først skal udspille i, at være en med en spiseforstyrrelse og enten en doctor eller en psykiatrist. En såkaldt dialog.
Her:
Letter to the Editor
Dear TeensHealth,
My name is Mariah Oldfield, I am 16 years old. After I’ve read your article “I Think My Friend Have An Eating Disorder. What Should I Do?” I am in doubt if I have a disease or not, your different points in your article about the eating disorders, is driving around in my mind. – “I think I have an eating disorder! The disease Bulimia, I did not even think about having eating disorder in the first place. But after our teachers told us to read this article, I have think a lot about this subject. I always check my weight before I sleep, to control myself if I my weight get just 100 grams higher than it is; I do not eat in like a day. My mom always yells at me, because I do not eat anything. She always asks me, what to cook. But I give her the same answer every day; I do not even know my favorite food. Because of food, my life is a depression. When my mom yells at me, I get a hard depression deep inside. In the free-quarters I prefer to stay in a toilette cell, I will go everywhere to just get rid of all their food dialogs. Water and bread is like what I am living for. In my school my friends always want to talk about my weight and so on. They think I am too underweight, but when I am checking myself in the mirror. I think that I am too fat. – “Strange? Yes, and odd!”
Dialog: Doctor and Mariah Oldfield
Doc. Henry Martin:
A curement of bulimia becomes a possibility, when people as bulimicher have acknowledged, that there has to be something else in order to get an inner balance, inner courage and inner desire on the right way in life again.
Mariah Oldfield:
I am very tired and depressed the unstoppable circle that I am running in, is hurting and killing me inside. I cannot keep having this disease, without talking to anybody. One problem has turned into several problems. I cannot go outside without people is looking at me, I cannot talk with my friends at school and my mom also is starting to get tired of my daily rations.
Doc. Henry Martin:
But are you tormented by bulimia and feel that it is, it and not you, who has the control of your life, you have reached the point, where you are ready to find new and better ways, to conceiving yourself, food and the world.
Svar #2
26. oktober 2008 af Brigitha (Slettet)
Letter to the Editor
Dear TeensHealth,
My name is Mariah Oldfield, I am 16 years old. After I’ve read your article “I Think My Friend Have An Eating Disorder. What Should I Do?” I am in doubt if whether I have a disease or not, your the different points (der mangler ligesom noget, fx points of views) in your article about the eating disorders, is driving around in running through my mind. – “(hvorfor har du gåseøjne der?) I think I have an eating disorder!
The disease Bulimia, det hører slet ikke sammen med noget af det, du skriver bagefter. Hvad er det, du vil sige omkring det?
In the first place I did not even think about having eating disorder in the first place, but after our teachers told us to read this article, I have think thought a lot about this the subject. I always check my weight before I go to sleep, to control controle myself my weight. If I my weight get just 100 grams higher than it is; gain just 100 grams, I do not eat in like a day. My mom always yells at me, because I do not eat anything. She always asks me, what to cook, but I give her the same answer every day (evt. hvad er det svar?). I do not even know my favorite food. Because of food, my life is a depression. When my mom yells at me, I get a hard depression deep inside. In the free-quarters breaks I prefer to stay in a toilette cell. I will go everywhere just to get rid of all their (hvis?) food dialogs. Water and bread is like what I am living for. In my school my friends always want to talk about my weight and so on. They think I am too underweight, but when I am checking check myself in the mirror, I think that I am too fat. – “Strange? Yes, and odd!” (igen, hvad prøver du at gøre med gåseøjnene?)
Dialog: Doctor and Mariah Oldfield
Doc. Henry Martin:
A curement (hvad?) of bulimia becomes a possibility, when people as bulimicher have acknowledged, that there has to be something else in order to get an inner balance, inner courage and inner desire on the right way in life again. (du mangler ligesom en pointe, "there has to be something else" andet end hvad?)
Mariah Oldfield:
I am very tired and depressed. The unstoppable circle that I am running in, is hurting and killing me inside. I cannot keep having this disease without talking to anybody. One problem has turned into several problems. I cannot go outside without people is looking at me. I cannot talk with my friends at school and my mom also is is also starting (evt. beginning) to get tired of my daily rations (dine daglige rationer?).
Doc. Henry Martin:
But are you tormented by bulimia and feel that it is it the bulimia and not you, who which has the control of your life? If that's the case, you have reached the point, where you are ready to find new and better ways to conceiving (hvad?!) yourself, food and the world.
Du skal rette noget mere i din tekst, nogle gange begynder du på sætninger, som så ikke rigtigt bliver gjort færdige. Det er ligesom om, du glemmer udgangspunktet halvvejs. Prøv at se, om du kan forstå mine rettelser.
Svar #3
26. oktober 2008 af Billal001 (Slettet)
Tak for det. Ye, jeg kan godt forstå dine rettelser.
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