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Graffiti Writers Strike Again
Every day during the last six years, has been a hell to live in for Casper. Every day at school he became subjected to bullying, but one day at school a gang called ‘GB = the graffiti boys’ came to Casper and the group leader called Johnny asked Casper. “If you want to be one of the tough boys and be popular, you can meet me eleven o’clock on the train station and if you pass the test you can become a new member of the GB gang.” At first Casper got frightened, but inside deep down he knew that if he wanted to be a popular boy, he had to be present at train station at eleven o’clock.
When Casper came home the only thing he could concentrate on was the train station and the test, but there was one big problem. How could he sneak himself out at eleven o’clock without his parents hearing it? After a few minutes Casper ran out to his father’s shed and found a ladder. The plan was to put the ladder up to the window before he went to bet and climb out of the window, when the clock stroke half past eleven.
When half past eleven came on Casper climbed out of his window and ran as fast he could to the train station. When Casper arrived at the train station he could see that Johnny and the rest of the GB gang were waiting for him. For every step Casper came nearer Johnny the more nervous he became. Casper stopped two meters from Johnny. “Listen your stupid idiot, here is your test. You have to spray paint a coach with graffiti and make sure that the police don’t see you. If the police don’t see you and you have painted the coach, you have passed your test.” Johnny said.
After two hours Casper had finished and Johnny came over to him. Johnny walked around the coach four times and stopped in front of Casper and said. “Very good your idiot welcome to the group.” Casper looked up and smiled.
Every day since Casper became a member of the gang GB, they have been out every night painting graffiti on walls and trains, but one evening it went all wrong. The police discovered them and arrested the whole gang. Now there was nothing called the GB gang any more.
Casper did not think about the consequences there could be being a member of a gang, but now he knew that he never should be a member of a gang again, just to stay popular
 

jeg tænkte på din budskab med denne historie..

altså " han var ik med i en anden gang igen, bc he wats to stay populer"?