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eneglsk stil; haster rettelse

04. september 2009 af Nazey (Slettet)

var der nogen der var så venlig at rette min engelsk stil 

og kom egentlig med nogle kommentarer

tak på forhånd :-)


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Svar #1
04. september 2009 af JKaram (Slettet)

Hvornår skal den afleveres?


Svar #2
04. september 2009 af Nazey (Slettet)

den skal afl. til på mandag d. 7. sep.


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Svar #3
04. september 2009 af JKaram (Slettet)

Skal nok lige kigge på den når jeg kommer hjem fra arbejde.


Svar #4
04. september 2009 af Nazey (Slettet)

tak ska' du have :-)


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Svar #5
05. september 2009 af juleman (Slettet)

Her jeg har gjort mit bedste, men jeg nåede ikke lige gøre det så perfekt som muligt , jeg håber at det er fint??

The article “the cyber-bullies are always with you” is telling; that it’s really easy for the bullies, to ruin the lives of teenagers in the internet, when they are anonymous. There are many examples in the article, how bullies taunted teenagers through the internet. One of them is; that there was a boy, who was taunted for months of his classmates, where they had spread rumors; that the thirteen years old boy was a gay, and there was a popular female classmate pretended to like him, and she chatted with him online only to copy his personal exchanges and share them with her friends, and when the boy felt it, he had killed himself.
John Carr of the Children’s Charities’ Coalition for Internet Safety in London means; that reason to cyber-bullying is so harmful is that, its relentlessness.
The internet doesn’t just increase the effect of bullying, however. The many options to remain anonymous when they’re online, is by using pseudonyms for instant messaging, say, and means people can write things, where they would not dare to, if their was known.
And they tell that anonymity can also amplify the bullies’ negative effect on the victim.

B. Commentary and discussion:
I agree with the quotation, I also have this attitude. There are so many people, who change themselves, when they use the internet or chat with a stranger through the internet. They do anything, which they never will do or try in the real life.
When some bullies victimize their victims (as a teenager), they don’t have feelings, they only think of themselves, and they don’t care, how the other person (“victim”) fell, when they victimized the victim for example; that they had spread rumors.
The quotation tells; that when people have a communication with a stranger who is anonymous through the internet, and when the anonymous sent any bad message, that lead to the victims acting really wrong, to do anything the victims would not dare to try in the real life.
Here is an example of a movie, I had watched; a guy who always dreamt about getting married with a girl who was so sweet and so friendly and the most important, that she was really thoughtful about her husband. One day his friend had told him, that there are website, where single person could find a friend, where there could get a date. And the guy he tried the website, and he after all got some friends, but there were only one friend that gave him a really nice feeling. And he focused only on her and he began to massage with her. Now they were beginning massaging each other. Each time they massaged with together he did get a really weird feeling, and this feeling was called LOVE.
The girl, the guy had massaging with was bully, but of course the guy didn’t knew, but if he knew it, he would refuse her, at once.
The guy had told everything about himself to the girl, he also told that he is so lonely and he had never had had a girlfriend, and he is really embarrassed to tell her about this, but he felt something really nice, where his feelings told him, that he could believe in her and trust her. The girl had also told about himself to the guy, but everything the girl had told to the guy was insincere, and the girl’s purpose was to make him fool of. As I said she was a bully, and as we know the bullies love to make fool of innocent people. The girl had always told the guy; that she loved him so much, they had not seen each other, but they didn’t have to, so she called this for “real love”. And when the girl told all this, the boy believed in her.
There were a day, where the guy asked the girl about having a date, but the girls answer was, that she never would have a date with a guy, who never had had a date. She told him that all that she had told him was insincere, and that he was a really stupid guy, who believed in everybody.
The guy couldn’t believe the things that happened, he felled himself so unworthy, that he decided to commit suicide, and he did it too.

I concluded that I thought communication in the internet were nice and easier, like the old days when you write a letter, it was maybe more enjoyable, but it was not so fast like communication through the internet.
As long as we use the internet sensible I find the internet communication usable, unless you know which website you use and who you communicate with.
Like the example I had given; if the guy had known, the person he had communicated with and had tested the other person, and then I think that he wouldn’t dare to commit suicide.
When you communicate through the interne, the most important thing is; that you never tell about your identity. Unless you think that there is a requirement to it.


Svar #6
05. september 2009 af Nazey (Slettet)

tak "Julaman", har set de steder du har rettet, men du kunne havde været meget bedre hvis du ikke havde lavet sammentrkninger, for min lærer trækker ned i karakteren hvis man laver sammentrækninger :S men jeg har selv ordnet sammentrækningerne :-) men tak alligevel ;-)


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Svar #7
06. september 2009 af JKaram (Slettet)

Skal den kigges igennem igen?


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Svar #8
06. september 2009 af Stygotius (Slettet)

 du mener vel  "kom endelig......."


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Svar #9
06. september 2009 af Stygotius (Slettet)

juleman  HAR GJORT ET STORT STYKKE ARBEJDE, MEN SKULLE NOK TÆNKE OVER ET PAR TING HER: 

The article “the cyber-bullies are always with you” is telling; that it's  ???? really easy for the bullies, to ruin the lives of teenagers (in) on the (internet) Internet, when they are anonymous. There are many (examples) instances in the article(,) of how bullies have taunted teenagers through the internet). One of them is (; that there was) a boy, who was taunted for months (of) by his classmates, (where they) who had (spread rumors) let it be known; that the thirteen year(s) old boy was (a) gay, and that (there was) a popular female classmate pretended to like him, and that she chatted with him online only to copy his personal exchanges ??????  and share them with her friends, and when the boy (felt it) found out, he had killed himself.

John Carr of the Children’s Charities’ Coalition for Internet Safety in London (means) believes ; that the reason (to) behind cyber-bullying is so harmful is that, its relentlessness ????
The internet doesn’t just increase the effect of bullying, however. The (many  options to) possibility of remaining anonymous when (they’re) online, (is) consists in (by) using pseudonyms for instant messaging(, say,) and it means that people can write (things, where) what they would not dare to, if (their was) it (known) was visible to anyone. 
(And they tell) They also say that anonymity can (also) (amplify) enhance the bullies’ negative effect on the victim.                  NU GIDER JEG IKKE MERE !     -slet 9o % af kommaerne !

B. Commentary and discussion:
I agree with the quotation, I also have this attitude. There are so many people, who change themselves, when they use the internet or chat with a stranger through the internet. They do anything, which they never will do or try in the real life. 
When some bullies victimize their victims (as a teenager), they don’t have feelings, they only think of themselves, and they don’t care, how the other person (“victim”) fell, when they victimized the victim for example; that they had spread rumors. 
The quotation tells; that when people have a communication with a stranger who is anonymous through the internet, and when the anonymous sent any bad message, that lead to the victims acting really wrong, to do anything the victims would not dare to try in the real life.
Here is an example of a movie, I had watched; a guy who always dreamt about getting married with a girl who was so sweet and so friendly and the most important, that she was really thoughtful about her husband. One day his friend had told him, that there are website, where single person could find a friend, where there could get a date. And the guy he tried the website, and he after all got some friends, but there were only one friend that gave him a really nice feeling. And he focused only on her and he began to massage with her. Now they were beginning massaging each other. Each time they massaged with together he did get a really weird feeling, and this feeling was called LOVE. 
The girl, the guy had massaging with was bully, but of course the guy didn’t knew, but if he knew it, he would refuse her, at once. 
The guy had told everything about himself to the girl, he also told that he is so lonely and he had never had had a girlfriend, and he is really embarrassed to tell her about this, but he felt something really nice, where his feelings told him, that he could believe in her and trust her. The girl had also told about himself to the guy, but everything the girl had told to the guy was insincere, and the girl’s purpose was to make him fool of. As I said she was a bully, and as we know the bullies love to make fool of innocent people. The girl had always told the guy; that she loved him so much, they had not seen each other, but they didn’t have to, so she called this for “real love”. And when the girl told all this, the boy believed in her. 
There were a day, where the guy asked the girl about having a date, but the girls answer was, that she never would have a date with a guy, who never had had a date. She told him that all that she had told him was insincere, and that he was a really stupid guy, who believed in everybody. 
The guy couldn’t believe the things that happened, he felled himself so unworthy, that he decided to commit suicide, and he did it too.

I concluded that I thought communication in the internet were nice and easier, like the old days when you write a letter, it was maybe more enjoyable, but it was not so fast like communication through the internet.
As long as we use the internet sensible I find the internet communication usable, unless you know which website you use and who you communicate with. 
Like the example I had given; if the guy had known, the person he had communicated with and had tested the other person, and then I think that he wouldn’t dare to commit suicide. 
When you communicate through the interne, the most important thing is; that you never tell about your identity. Unless you think that there is a requirement to it.

 

Svar #10
06. september 2009 af Nazey (Slettet)

tak for din hjælp Stygotius


Svar #11
06. september 2009 af Nazey (Slettet)

det ville være rigtig godt hvis der ville være nogen der ville rette den anden del...


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