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Skal bruge akut HJÆLP, til engelsk grammatik i stil.

20. oktober 2009 af AnnelineNielsen (Slettet) - Niveau: B-niveau

Håber der er en der kan hjælpe mig så hurtigt som muligt har virkelig brug for hjælp skal aflevere denne stil i morgen tidlig og har brug for hjælp til at rette grammatik fejl.

Vedhæftet fil: Anneline Nielsen engelsk White man's burden 21. okt. 09.doc

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Svar #1
20. oktober 2009 af Stygotius

Dit engelske er bestemt ikke godt, men du har også lavet det hele utroligt sjusket.

Her er det så:

Anneline Nielsen 2.u Engelsk Kalundborg Gymnasium 20-10-2009</o:p>

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Essay About</o:p> White Man’s Burden</o:p> By Jan Needle </o:p>

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I Think that in the text White Man’s Burden there are some places where the focus is most(e) of all (at) on Tony’s body’s behaviour and Tony’s own behaviour, and the behaviour is described with a lot of metaphor. (Eksempels) Examples could be (at) on page 40. the first line “ As if his feet had springs on them”, line 4. “ The stars were sparkling, too just like they were meant to, and he giggled. Twinkle twinkle little star, he sang. Or (mumbeled) mumbled. Half sang – half mumbled, He was a bit piddled”. </o:p>

Also on first page, (is there a place where) the environment (are) is described (pretty much) very well, “the cold, biting air. There wasn’t a lot of wind, even (off) on the moors, so he wasn’t cold in himself”.</o:p>

At (some place int) a certain point in the text (i think the text) it seems (like) as if it (is) was written (a bit) almost (like it is) as if a child (there has) had written it. (the text). “ The Giant-Hunter and his dog. He giggled again. Pretty daft name for a dog, though-Sirius. Here, boy, he shouted, under his breath”. And “Back towards the Cat’s Pyjamas”. </o:p>

Some lines in the text (do) also tell(s) us a bit about the persons like these lines “Tony ran his fingers up and down an imaginary guitar, leaning against a lamp-post”. “ The old man had virtually promised it”. And “And he could give up running the disco in Manchester”. </o:p>

(At some points it is not only a desckriptio) Sometimes we have not only a picture of the personality, but also a metaphor of it. their personality, “The police weren’t stupid, even if they were pigs”. “His old man hated him going on about the pigs”.</o:p>

Anneline Nielsen 2.u Engelsk Kalundborg Gymnasium 20-10-2009</o:p>

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I think that the (writer) author sometimes (do) writes a lot about a little(el) things (there) which do not really mean(s nothing) anything (to) in the sto(r)ry, like “He pressed the b(o)utton on his digtal watc(t)h, then waited, swaying, till his eyes slowly focused. Ten to twelve”.

The writer (do) also mentions a bit about racial discrimination, or maybe not discrimination but “Didn’t matter about colour, that wasn’t the point. You could get robbed and kicked up by a white gang just as easy as black”. “Tony Robterson, the black man’s friend” (negative).</o:p>

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Finally (i) I think that the text tells us a great sto(r)ry because(es) it gives a picture of the fact that even if you try to break the system(, then) it is not always a solution (to) of the immigrant problem(s) (with immigrats). </o:p>

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Svar #2
21. oktober 2009 af Stygotius

"body language" er bedre end "body's behaviour "

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Svar #3
21. oktober 2009 af Stygotius

I sætningen "but also a metaphor of it. their personality" skal ordene "their personality" selvfølgelig fjernes.

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