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Summary
From my first to my second draft I have improved the introduction, where I have asked another and more basic question that had more with the text to do. I also have improved the two main points so it was more correct and better. And at least I have improved my grammar mistakes, like comma.

Essay
In my essay about “Popcorn” I have improved a lot of things. First of all I clarify and develop some of the unclear points and I have improved my grammatical mistakes like, stay in the right tense and choosing the right words. I also tried to avoid subtitles but it does not work. It is very difficult to work on transitions from one paragraph to the next, but I have succeeded on doing this in my next essay “The Bats”. In this essay I included a conclusion, that I had forgotten and I have improved the analyse so it becomes better and more correct. Also in this essay I have improved my grammatical mistakes like choosing the right words and stay in the right tense.

Translation
My biggest problem in the translations is to stay in the right tense and choose the right words, like in the essays “Popcorn” and “The Bats”. I will work on not doing these mistakes again. Next time when we will write an essay or translate a text, I will focus on these problems and avoid doing them in the spring term.

Creative writing
I think that I succeed in re-writing the ending of “The Man Who Loved Flowers”. The first part is (I hvert fald) good, where I have use the same stile like the real text, but the ending becomes a little flat, because I do not write what has happened at the end.

Expectations for the spring term
My expectations for the spring term is to avoid doing the grammatical mistakes and write a better summary then I have write and also to write a better essay where my points are clear.