Let engelsk opgave, som skal rettes.

Nogle der ka' hjælpe med at rette?

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My grandfather was born in 1956. He his name was Ahmed. When my grandfather was seven years old, he experienced he something very dangerous. He and his friend was in a forest.was with his friend in a wood. They should look searched for a watch as that his friend had lost in the wood forest. That day was a very cold and dark day, so they had brought a torch with them. When they came to the wood forest, could they see noticed a young man. The man ran after them and caught up with them. My grandfather tried to ran away and it succeeded, but my grandfather’s friend could not run away, so and he was got kidnapped. The police searched after for him and after a month they found him in a port. My grandfather was very shocked and cried almost constantly. It was a very hard episode for my grandfather. (du bliver nødt til at lave hele den sætning om. jeg ved godt hvad du mener, men på engelsk giver den ikke megen mening)

When my grandfather was a young man, he was in the military. He was about nineteen years old at that time. He loved the military very much because he liked weapons and tanks. He was in a war which took place in Brazil. When they got down there he did not like all the shootings and killings that happened. My grandfather was seriously ill with all the killings. He was therefore arranged to Denmark after a few days. When he was a little better again he came in psychiatry treatment. He got much better and was completely normal again.

( hele 2. afsnit bør du overveje om igen. og måske skrive om. Uddyb hvis der er en sætning som giver problemer. ex. my grandfather was seriously ill with all the killings..... du må forklare hvad du mener, hvilket jeg regner med er at han blev mentalt syg af hvad han oplevede. Post Traumatisk Stress syndrom måske?)

In my grandfather’s adult life, there was something very good occurred. When he was about forty-five years old. he won 250 thousand danish kroner in a competition. He was very happy because it was the first time he had won something/anything big. The money He spent the money on a trip to Dubai with his wife and three children. It was a very good nice gift for my grandfather and her his family.

Port: hvad mener du??

Råd: Husk at engelsk har anderledes ordstilling end dansk
Skriv ikke "so" efter et punktum. Det bliver en punkteret sætning som ikke kommer til at give mening

Både juszo og dealing diamond skulle nok se lidt på disse rettelser. 

My grandfather was born in 1956. He his name was Ahmed. When my grandfather was seven years old, he experienced he something very dangerous. He and his friend was  were in a forest.was with his friend in a wood. They should look searched for a watch as that his friend had lost (in the wood forest) there. That day was a very cold and dark day, so they had brought a torch with them. When they came to the wood forest, couldthey see noticed a young man. The man  He ran after them and caught up with them. My grandfather tried to ran run away and it succeeded, but my grandfather’s friend could not run away, so and he was got kidnapped. The police searched after for him and after a month they found him in a port ????????. My grandfather was very shocked and cried almost constantly. It was a very hard episode for my grandfather. (du bliver nødt til at lave hele den sætning om. jeg ved godt hvad du mener, men på engelsk giver den ikke megen mening)

jeg ved godt det sikkert ikke menes sådan, men jeg ser dit svar som meget uhøfligt.

for det første kopierede du min besvarelse, og det var ca 1 grammatisk fejl jeg ikke havde set. Afsnit 2 havde jeg netop ikke rettet da jeg mente det bør skrives om.

Tusind tak for hjælpen folkens i er fantastiske. PORT betyder havn. :D