En lille rettelse? 300 ord

Hii Universal Studios ;)

Thanks for the invitation, i really appreciate it, since its one of my biggist drean to be a famous actor. If you didn't knew i have taking a part in a test movie last summer, and i totally felt that acting was my thing. The instructure felt it too so they have sent me a confirmation that i can get a role in the movie. That letter made my day! I wanted this since i was a kid. I have already packed so im ready to take the next plane to Los Angeles. I will my best friend with me, so i wont get that lonely ;) I asked her, and luckily for me she said yes. And she was so happy on my behalf. I brought her because i know that i always count on her, no matte what.  She thinks that "The Golden Compass" is my type of a movie. And i agree with her. So that's the role i want.  I want to play the main character in "The Golden Compass", which is a girl named Lyra. I've read the book, and that role suits me! As I mentioned earlier this has always been my truly dream. And thanks to you my dream came true. Thanks again ;)

Warm Regards

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Håber jeg hjalp ;)

Saynab .- jeg er ked af at sige det, men din rettelse er fyldt med fejl. Er selvfølgelig beklageligt da jeg ved du tydeligvis har ville hjælpe.

Manja: jeg skal prøve og rette det igennem, men ellers vil jeg bede dig få din lærer til at hjælpe dig. Han/hun har måske nogle øvelser du kan prøve.

Jeg kan se du tog mit råd om at skrive hvad dig og din ven laver på flyet. Jeg havde tydeligvis ikke læst det ordentlig igennem, og det beklager jeg. I denne sammenhæng passer det nemlig ikke, da du endnu ikke sidder på flyet. I stedet har jeg i rettelsen ændret det så i snakker om det derhjemme.

Måske du skulle ændre det med "the next plane.." for ellers sidder du jo stort set i lufthavnen og venter på det. Kom i stedet på en dato og et klokkeslæt.

Du skriver lige pludselig at i snakker om hvorfor du har valgt hende.. Her gentager du egentlig bare dig selv. Du bør komme på noget andet.

Det sidste stykke bliver du også nødt til at skrive om. Du er endnu ikke landet i L.A, så du kan ikke allerede have snakket med skuespillerne. Du skal tænke fremad i tiden, og ikke hvad du laver lige nu. Hvad vil du gerne se når du kommer derover, ikke hvad du allerede har set. Håber det giver mening :)

et andet råd: pas på med at starte hver sætning med, "I"

Hello Universal Studios

First of all, I would like to thank you for the invitation. Last summer, I auditioned for a role in a movie, and now you have sent a comfirmation, saying that I can get a role in the movie. I want to participate. I am so happy that i've gotten the invitation since this is something I've wanted for so long. I will take the next airplane to Los Angeles with my best friend. I asked her if she wanted to come to America with me since I would be starring in a movie. She is really overwhelmed and happy on my behalf and she told me with joy that she would love to go. I chose my best friend because I feel like she understands me, and that she will be there for me when I need it. My friend and I have discussed which movie I should star in. She thinks that I should choose "The Golden Compass", so that is the one I have chosen.

Jeg skrev meget hurtigt uden at tænke over de gramatiske fejl. og nu da jeg har læst den igennem kan jeg også se at der er mange fejl, men hun skulle bare se den for at få nogle ideer ;D

Men så det godt du har hjulpet hende ;)