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opgaven hedder Explain the importance of family

A family is everything for me, because I have a lot of fun with my family and I like when we chill together. My family is like my best friend, because when I’m sad they will be there and give me the help I need.

The importance of a family is, I can chill out with my family and we can have a little talk if there are problems. It is also important in my family and in other families they have to like each other, and I can talk with them when I’m sad and they are there, when I need them or need help to move on. The importance of my family is also the connection who are in the family and we believe in each other, because I’m together with my family almost all my life, when I was born to I grow up my family will take care of me.

I think about how the children who haven’t a family, where do they sleep, and how do the children get food, the children most be unhappy and maybe the children feel they are alone in the big world, who comforts them when the children are sad and who are beside them when the children need for helps. I think if I did not have a family, how would I have it, I think I feel I is alone in the big world and I would not have any I could talk with when I was sad, I would not have any beside me when I have need for helps, I would be unhappy and I would not have it fun with any, and nobody takes care of me, it is myself who care of me, therefore it is important everyone have a family.

A family is everything for me, but I know someone who think the family is not everything for them, they have no respect for their parents and they quarrel with them. I think about how they have no respect for their parents and how they can quarrel with them, because they would not be alive if their parents have not born them, they owe their parents their lives, but what do they for thank their parents, they shouts and quarrel with their parents, I did not think they think that it is their parents who have give them a life, because if they have think on it, they would have respect for their parents.