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rettelse af eksamens fremlæggelse

30. maj 2010 af spørg mig (Slettet)

jeg har oprettet samme spørgsmål 2 gange for har fået af vide at nogle ikke kunne komme ind på mit andet indlæg

hej alle sammen jeg skal til engelsk mundtlig afgangsprøve mandag og vil meget gerne få min fremlæggelse rettet, da jeg har planlagt at øve i morgen :) ... men her er så min fremlæggelse

South africa and sport

I will tell about sport in South Africa.
South Africans love almost all sport activities rugby, cricket and soccer being the most popular sports.
First I will start to tell a little about rugby and tennis.
After football, rugby is the most popular sport in South Africa. In rugby each team has 15 playser. The ball they play with is oval and you are allowed to carry the ball but you can only pass it on backwards. I think it’s a nice game, and it’s a game for boys and girls who are not afraid of losin a tooth or two.
the national rugby teams is called Springboks.
South Africans is also good in tennis they have good players like wayne Ferrari and Amanda coetzer

Now I will tell about cricket
Cricket is extremely popular in South Africa. Cricket is an English game, but it’s popular in those countries where the british Empire was once establishied such as Africa notably South Africa. Circket is a long game, Faktisk can the matches may last up to five days. The basicually rules are that the players have to avoid the ball hittinh their wicket, at the same time they have to hit the ball to score points or runs. You score points by running between the two sets of wicket until the other team gets the ball.

Now soccer
Soccer is extremely popular in South Africa, FAKTISK the most popular. The south Africans soccer league is called “the premier soccer league of South Africa”. The national team is called “bafana bafana” meaning boys, boys. Bafana bafana won the African nations cup in 1996 and they played in the world cup in 1998 and 2002. The two best teams in “the premier soccer league of South Africa” is The kaizer Chiefs and Orlando pirates. South African soccer players is mostly very athletic, and very good, and you can also find many South African players in big European teams. South Africa will also host the “the FIFA world cup 2010” as the first African country ever.

Sport in townships:
As many children loves South African children in the townships playing sport. They play cricket in the streets, and sometimes they use a board for a bat and anything for a ball. They also play soccer in townships, and they use two stones, shoes or a tyre to make the goals, and if they don’t have a ball they make one by using plastic bags wound together tightly. There are many ssport projects for poor children and young people like “SCORE”. They send volunteers to poor places to start sport clubs and to start sport classes in school. They want young people stay away form tings like crime and drug, and playing sports makes young people feel good and that way they stay away from crime and drugs. “Score” is building more than 50 new stadiums in poor places.
 

på forhånd tusind tak :)
 


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Svar #1
30. maj 2010 af Unistudeng (Slettet)

Jeg synes du skal tage et ekstra kig på din fremlæggelse, inden du kigger på grammatikken:

1) At du synes det er et godt spil er ikke relevant for din fremlæggelse og burde tages ud.

2) Synes lidt du mangler nogle kilder?

3) Der er meget fokus på det tekniske i spillet, hvorfor ikke fokusere på det sociale aspekt? Hvorfor kan afrikanerne lide sport? Er det fordi det fører dem sammen i hårde tider, osv.?

4) Fremlæggelsen er næsten kun redegørende, ikke analyserende. Analyse er det der scorer point til en eksamen, ikke redegørelse.

Håber det hjælper lidt.


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