Hjælp til at rette min dansk stil før 25.10.10 23.

 Hej jeg har lige skrevet et engelsk stil.. Håber naturligvis nogen af jer ville hjælpe mig med at rette mine stavefejl, sprogfejl, komma, punkter og hvad i ellers kan finde

When I was three years old I lived in a big house with my dad and half sister. My parents were divorced and my half sister and I have the same mother, but my sister doesn’t want to live with our mother so she chose to stay with my father. I was playing with my dad. When the time was around five he went to the fridge to check if there was enough food for dinner. After a while he went out to buy food. I wanted to go with him, but he didn't let me, because it would take too long. I just didn't wanted to get babysit by my sister and my sister didn't wanted to babysit me, but he didn't care so I got a little mad at him, but forgot all about it after five minutes. My sister took a shower shortly after my father was gone and said to me that I shouldn’t do anything stupid, but of course I didn’t listen to her. I began to get bored after a few minutes. I didn’t want to watch TV or play with my toys, so I ran around in the house. I went to the dinner table which was a tablecloth a couple of towels, candle holders, glass, matchbox and some other things. I took the matchbox and played with it, opened and closed and different things. I got curious about what would happen if I set fire to something. I knew there would be fire, but I never knew that fire was dangerous at the time. I was sitting under the table close to the corner, so I could set fire to the tablecloth. After a moment I went to the coffee table and hide there with my ass up in the air and head down on the floor. The fire got bigger and bigger my sister was still in the bathroom and had not discovered anything. My dad came home and went on the way to the kitchen, and noticed the big fire on the table. He dropped the shopping bags immediately called my name several times, tried to turn off the wild fire and find me. My sister was on the way out of the bathroom and started complain about the noise, immediately she saw the fire and started screaming a lot. She panic and called my name too. I didn’t respond when they called after me. The fire was still on, but they turned off the fire before anything serious damage happened. There was water all over the place and they still didn’t know where I was. Some few minutes later they found me under the coffee table with my ass up in the air and head on floor.

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