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HJÆLP MIG! ENGESKL RETTELSE

08. marts 2011 af jepp12 (Slettet) - Niveau: 8. klasse

He is watching me, right? Yes he is... He is standing just behind me and watching me, and he has been doing it for hours. Just standing there and looking at me. It’s beginning to freak me out. Is it something I have done? Is he from the police? Or maybe the CIA? Am I accused for something I didn’t do? Or have done?.. “anything else mister?” a waiter was standing just beside me and looking nervously at the window, okay it wasn’t me who is going crazy, “yes, a coke please”, the waiter walked away but was still looking discreet behind her back.? He was still standing in the same place and looked like he was waiting for me. I walked out of the café, and I looked behind my back, to see if I being followed by the man. And I did. So I started to run and I and I could see out of my corner of the eye that he ran after me, so I ran as fast as I could. I ran from him, I thought. then I looked back, he stood there, he hit me so hard he could. I fainted. I woke up I saw that I was tied to a beam over a church. The man who had done it was not there. I looked at the rope, and I could see it was starting to crack. I tried to do something to get me free from the robe, but it fails. Now I could see, there wasn’t a big chance to survive this. I started to see back of my life, and all the good things in it. The robe was cracking in the middle. I fell down. It took 10 seconds, but it was my longest 10 seconds in my life. I was near the ground. BANG!. I woke up and realize that is was a dream.

KAN I RETTE  STAVE FEJL,KOMMA OG PUNKTUMER FOR MIG. DET HAVDE VÆRET DEJLIGT!


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Svar #1
08. marts 2011 af Abauuz

En ting du skal kigge på - De bruger ikke stort set ikke kommaer! Fjern dem. fjern også sammentrækninger, det giver dårligt engelsk.


Svar #2
08. marts 2011 af jepp12 (Slettet)

 tak men kan du ikk rette den for mig så er du sød :)


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