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06. juni 2016 af hatice11 (Slettet) - Niveau: 10. klasse

I have chosen to tell about poverty in the uk because it was the only subject that intresseret me, and I think it is exciting that more know about the subject.  
 
I would start by telling what poverty is, there are several explanations. People who are affected by poverty when they have such low income that they cannot afford basic need 

In needs as housing, clothing, food and clean water. The low income makes to their health and very existence are being threatened. 5.8 million people in britain are struggling to provide essentials like food, 4 million uk children live in poverty in the uk. if a child grows up in poverty in britain today there is only one out of 6 chanser to achieve good grade in school. it affect the children the rest of their lives, if the parents cannot afford to send them to football,keep a birthday, or purchasing mobile phone, they are lonely will find it difficult to make friends.  

It is difficult to solve the poverty problem, but there are many organizations in the world that help the poor such as oxfam or the red cross. but we can also help with finding a job for those who can work,  
I think we are living in the unacceptable world anyone lives in extreme wealth while someone is starving, we are lucky in denmark we're almost all an income. I think we should not be thinking only of ourselves, we should more think of the poor people, and help them if everyone thought more on them and helped them, so the problem would be less.  
 
 

I have chosen to tell about poverty in the uk because it was the only subject that intresseret me, and I think it is exciting that more know about the subject.  
 
I would start by telling what poverty is, there are several explanations. People who are affected by poverty when they have such low income that they cannot afford basic need In needs as housing, clothing, food and clean water. The low income makes to their health and very existence are being threatened. 5.8 million people in britain are struggling to provide essentials like food, 4 million uk children live in poverty in the uk. if a child grows up in poverty in britain today there is only one out of 6 chanser to achieve good grade in school. it affect the children the rest of their lives, if the parents cannot afford to send them to football,keep a birthday, or purchasing mobile phone, they are lonely will find it difficult to make friends.  

It is difficult to solve the poverty problem, but there are many organizations in the world that help the poor such as oxfam or the red cross. but we can also help with finding a job for those who can work,  
I think we are living in the unacceptable world anyone lives in extreme wealth while someone is starving, we are lucky in denmark we're almost all an income. I think we should not be thinking only of ourselves, we should more think of the poor people, and help them if everyone thought more on them and helped them, so the problem would be less.  
 


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08. juni 2016 af Pyrros

For mange fejl, men jeg har rettet den første del ret overfladisk:

I have chosen to tell about poverty in the UK because it was the only subject that interests me, and I think it is exciting that more know about the subject.  
 
I would start by telling what poverty is, there are several explanations. People who are affected by poverty when they have such low income that they cannot afford basic need 

In needs as housing, clothing, food and clean water. The low income makes to their health and very existence are being threatened. 5.8 million people in Britain are struggling to provide essentials like food, four million UK children live in poverty in the UK. If a child grows up in poverty in Britain today there is only one out of six chances to achieve a good grade in school. it affects the children the rest of their lives, if the parents cannot afford to send them to football, keep a birthday, or purchasing a mobile phone, they are lonely will find it difficult to make friends.  

It is difficult to solve the poverty problem, but there are many organisations in the world that help the poor such as Oxfam or the red cross. but we can also help with finding a job for those who can work,  
I think we are living in the unacceptable world anyone lives in extreme wealth while someone is starving, we are lucky in Denmark we're almost all an income. I think we should not be thinking only of ourselves, we should more think of the poor people, and help them if everyone thought more of them and helped them, so the problem would be less.  
 


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