Rette en engelsk stiil

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Du skal skære mere ned på kommabrugen og  huske at bruge punktummer noget oftere.
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It was 7 o’clock when my bell rang. I normally have such a hard time waking up, but today it was really easy for me to wake up as the sun was shining right through the window and reached my bed. It was a really special day for me, something I had been waiting for almost a year now. I ran into the bathroom while I sang a song, took a quick shower and went back into my room. My mother and sister were still sleeping, because it was weekend. I would also wake up late, but today was a special day, as I was supposed to see my boyfriend after a long time. I am Ida, 16 years old, and I have not seen my boyfriend, Casper, for a long time because he was forced to move abroad with his family where his father had found a good job. It was really hard to say goodbye to him at the time, but it was something he needed to and I would not make him sad, so I did not show how upset I was. Now the day had finally arrived, he had come here with his family for a holiday and to visit all of us. I had planned something really special for him, a sailing trip on the lake, where the light is beautiful with red clouds and mountains. I honestly did not know what to wear. I had thought of it for a really long time, but could not decide for anything special despite looking for a long time. I dug into my closet and finally found what I should wear, the perfect blue silk dress which I had never used before, and had saved for a special day. He would take the plane at 13 so he would arrive here at 15, everything went so far as planned. I just had to go out and buy something and make a picnic basket, with a few fun things and perhaps a small gift. I had really missed him so incredibly much, he came in my dreams every single day. I really cannot believe I could be without him for so long, but now it was soon over and I had to see my only one, his shiny green eyes and his sweet dimples. I had missed him so much. Now the time had finally arrived and I waited at the airport. There was a whole lot of people, so I did not know how I would find him. I searched and searched, no, it was really him. I could recognize him from afar, his green shirt and white converse, he had not changed. I got tears in my eyes but they quickly dried, it was tears of joy. He came running towards me and we had the biggest hug of the world. I could not keep the tears inside and began to cry. I did not let him go for five minutes, and he enjoyed it too. I told his parents that he was mine for the day and I had planned everything. He gave his suitcase to his parents and we went together to the place I had planned. He knew nothing about the surprise as he just thought we would be together. When we reached near the place he knew where we were going, it was the place we always went to in the past, it was here we learned each other better. We reached it, and I had a jacket over my dress so he could not see it yet, when I took off my black jacket, he looked at me and gave me a lot of compliments. We sat in an old boat that was lying in the lake, and rowed a little to the middle, the sky was wonderfully beautiful, the mountains were big and brown, and we just sat down and enjoyed ourselves in the water and looked up at the clouds. He said he promised that he would never walk again, but I did not understand what he meant, for he had to go after the holidays, or did something change? He said "You have made a surprise for me, and I've made one for you. I have applied to university here, so I can study here" I shouted with joy and gave him the biggest hug ever. It was a really nice day, and from then on many more came.

"white converse"   ????

"it was here we learned each other better"   ??????

It was 7 o’clock when my bell rang. I normally have such a hard time waking up, but today it was really easy for me to wake up as the sun was shining right through the window and reached my bed. It was a really special day for me, something I had been waiting for almost a year now. I ran into the bathroom while I sang a song, took a quick shower and went back into my room. My mother and sister were still sleeping, because it was weekend. I would also wake up late, but today was a special day, as I was supposed to see my boyfriend after a long time. I am Ida, 16 years old, and I have not seen my boyfriend, Casper, for a long time because he was forced to move abroad with his family where his father had found a good job. It was really hard to say goodbye to him at the time, but it was something he needed to and I would not make him sad, so I did not show how upset I was. Now the day had finally arrived, he had come here with his family for a holiday and to visit all of us. I had planned something really special for him, a sailing trip on the lake, where the light is beautiful with red clouds and mountains. I honestly did not know what to wear. I had thought of it for a really long time, but could not decide for anything special despite looking for a long time. I dug into my closet and finally found what I should wear, the perfect blue silk dress which I had never used before, and had saved for a special day. He would take the plane at 13 so he would arrive here at 15, everything went so far as planned. I just had to go out and buy something and make a picnic basket, with a few fun things and perhaps a small gift. I had really missed him so incredibly much, he came in my dreams every single day. I really cannot believe I could be without him for so long, but now it was soon over and I had to see my only one, his shiny green eyes and his sweet dimples. I had missed him so much. Now the time had finally arrived and I waited at the airwas) port. There (was) were a whole lot of people, so I did not know how I would find him. I searched and searched, no, it was really him. I could recognize him from afar, his green shirt and white converse?????, he had not changed. I got tears in my eyes but they quickly dried, it was tears of joy. He came running towards me and we had the biggest hug of the world. I could not keep the tears inside and began to cry. I did not let him go for five minutes, and he enjoyed it too. I told his parents that he was mine for the day and I had planned everything. He gave his suitcase to his parents and we went together to the place I had planned. He knew nothing about the surprise as he just thought we would be together. When we (reached) came near the place, he knew where we were going, it was the place we always went to in the past, it was here we (learned)  got to know (each other) eachother better. We reached it, and I had a jacket over my dress so he could not see it yet, when I took off my black jacket, he looked at me and gave me a lot of compliments. We sat in an old boat that was lying in the lake, and rowed a little to the middle, the sky was wonderfully beautiful, the mountains were big and brown, and we just sat down and enjoyed ourselves in the water and looked up at the clouds. He said he promised that he would never walk again, but I did not understand what he meant, for he had to go after the holidays, or (did) had something changed? He said "You have made a surprise for me, and I've made one for you. I have applied to university here, so I can study here" I shouted with joy and gave him the biggest hug ever. It was a really nice day, and from then on many more came.
 

White converse = en slags sportssko, se, f.eks., http://www.nextag.com/all-white-converse/stores-html

sportsko?????????????

Du godeste.  Hvor i alverden skulle almindelige mennesker kende den slags private og eksotiske udtryk fra ??

Tak, imidlertid, for oplysningen.