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>>du er velkommen til at tage et kig på min stil

Ih... Ja, men, tak for venligheden. Suk......

Hvad med i stedet at spørge hvorvidt en sagkyndig har tid og lyst til at gennemgå dit opus? Eller skal vi falde på knæ af glæde og lykke fordi vi må tage del af dine nedskrevne tanker?

Til dit forsvar skal siges at du imidlertid langt fra er alene med at bruge småkommanderende toner i spørgende indlæg. En betragtelig del af jer brugere tager SP (eller snarere dens volontører) alt, alt for givet. Lidt ydmyghed ville ikke være af vejen.

Undskyld, det var først og fremmest ikke sådan ment.  Jeg forstår dig ikke? Småkommanderende toner? Jeg spørg venligt at man er velkommen til at tage et kig på min stil, ikke at man skal. Vor herre bevares! 

'Spørger', hvis det endelig skal være. Der er imidlertid intet spørgende (interrogativt) over en deklarativ sætning som "du er velkommen til at tage et kig på min stil".

Hvad din smøre angår; hvornår skal den afleveres? Jeg gætter lidt på i morgen...

Hvorfor vil du vide det?? Jeg kan tydligt fornemme, at du ikke ønsker at rette min stil. Men blot ønsker at skabe konflikter. Men når du nu spørger så sødt, så har jeg efterårsferie som resten af Danmarks skoler... så nej, den skal ikke afleveres imorgen.

Der er en masse fejl. Men hvis det er kan jeg godt rette senere.

Det må du gerne. :)

Ingen gratis frokoster hér, Line darling, men jeg har understreget de steder du på det kraftigste bør se nærmere på. To ord med fed i træk hentyder til tegnsætningen mellem ordene, eller manglen på samme. Kommentarer/praj med kursiv.

Tuesday 27th  September
Dear diary,

Today was a day full of suspense and stress. First my father and I, started out with taking the car to the airport in Billund. A drive full of expectant conversations, about our coming trip to London. After checking in and a short visited around the small shops, we finally were on the plane at 07.30 pm. We were both extremely tired and quickly fell asleep (during our flight -- unødvendig detalje; vi ved allerede hvor I er...). It was the touchdown, which actually went smoothly that woke us both [der mangler en præposition].

At around 10.30 pm we arrived in the stunning London. Quickly we found a cab, which drove us to our hotel. We had booked two rooms at the Park Lane Mews Hotel, a hotel in the middle of the street called Park Lane, which is in the central London [alt dét her kan du sagtens koge ned]. .

After we had leaved our luggage, we went for a walk strolling down Oxford Street. Oxford Street is a major thoroughfare in the City of Westminster in the West End of London. It’s Europe's busiest shopping street, as well as its most dense, and currently has approximately 300 shops. After I dragged my father several times through the many shops at Oxford Street, he decided to go back to the hotel and sleep. It propped me fine going around and exploring on my own. Later we met up again and decided to find place, were we could get something for dinner. We found a nice French restaurant near Park Lane Street. And I swear to God, I never tasted something identical to that meal! After we ate, we went up at our rooms. All in all it was a good day, full of experiences and learning. The weather was also extremely warm and nice. Enough for today I’m so tired and I’m going to bed now. Sweet dreams!

I swear to God, I have never been that astionished by a city as London
 

Wednesday 28th September
Dear diary,

Today we started out with going to the fair called IAAPA. IAAPA stands for The International Association of Amusement Parks and Attractions. IAAPA is the largest international trade association for permanently situated amusement facilities worldwide. My father works with attractions and for that reason we were invited to the fair. After spending almost three hours going around looking at attractions and talked to dozens of people, I asked my father if it was fine him that I could leave him and go on my own again. Luckily it was totally fine, - he continued at the fair and I on my own. Quickly I found a cap, which drove me to the Tower of London. William the conqueror built the Tower of London at the beginning of the 11th century. The Tower's most popular attraction is its famous collection of Crown Jewels. Furthermore has a lots of celebrities from the English history been imprisoned in the Tower of London.  I always wanted to go to the Tower of London, since I read the books from Philippa Gregory. She writhes about the English list of kings, and the Tower of London is mentioned a lot and plays a prominent and major role in her books. After seen the Tower of London, I decided to make sure that I hadn’t forgotten any shops from yesterday so I kept shopping and strolling down Oxford Street. At the afternoon my father and I met up again and chose the same nice French restaurant. Right know I’m watching the British news, while I’m eating scones! I can’t wait for another day in London! Hugs and kisses!

Thursday 29th September
[Wha'? No 'dear diary'?] Today was unfortunately the last day in London. We spent the morning with a bus tour around London’s most famous attractions. The bus tour lasted two hours in the burning sun! We saw everything from Birmingham [what the f...?] Palace to Big Ben. After the bus tour we walked to Harrods to get something to eat. Harrods is an upmarket department store located in Brompton Road. We found a lovely and very English restaurant called The Georgian Restaurant at the fifth floor. I really think that Georgian Restaurant is as much of an institution as the store itself. They served the most delicious cupcakes and other beautiful and tasty cakes. After we ate, we found a cap, which drove us to the airport. After two hours at the flight and a drive to Århus I’m finally home. All in all it was a wonderful trip I had with my father. I swear to God, I have never been that astionished by a city as London [gentagelse?]. It’s definitely not the last time I visit London and it’s wonderful charm and atmosphere. Hugs and kisses!

Er du af den mere religiøse type siden du hele tiden trækker vagthavende gud ind i det hele? ;)

Hahaha! Mange tak du! Jeg foretrækker dog også selv måden, du har gjort det på da den er mere nyttig for mig. For din og ikke mindst min egen skyld, vil jeg fremover tænke over hvad jeg lægger ud. Fortsat god onsdag.

Det lyder da i øvrigt helt usandsynligt, at man først vågner op under flyvningen, når flyet er ved at smække hjulene i landingsbanen. Kabinepersonalet har da for længst været rundt og sørget for, at stolene er i lodret og betjeningsbakker er gemt væk, osv.