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Rettelse af stil på 255 ord
Hej! Jeg har skrevet en lille engelsk stil, som jeg håbede I ville hjælpe med at rette:
The window is half open and the sun is shining through the house. A girl named Katie is sitting in her favorite chair reading a book se bought yesterday. Suddenly the phone rings. It is her boyfriend, James. He is very happy because it is his birthday and he wants to spend it with her at the beach. Kate says that she would love to spend a day with him. In a hurry she packs her swimsuit. When she gets outside, he is already there waiting at her in his new car, he got from hits parents.
“Wow! It looks amazing, James!” she says and gets in the car to give him a hug. “I’m glad you like it, my dear. It can take us anywhere we want to go. But for now, let’s just go to the beach,” he says starting the car.
“James, where is the towels?” “It is in the luggage compartment. Remember the sun crème dear,” he answers. Katie opens the luggage compartment to get the towels and the sun crème.
“Do you want to go for a walk?” James asks. “I would love to. It is, after all, your birthday,” Katie replies. So they went down the beach, near the water holding hands. “It is so romantic, James. I really love it!” Katie says. “I’m truly glad you like it. I wondered if you rather go to a restaurant?” he asks. Katie shocks her head and just then little raindrops start falling.
In a hurry they run back to the car. “Why come your stupid car not have a roof?” Katie asks mad while packing the towels together. “It is a gift from my parents, and if you don’t like it, you can feel free to go home alone and getting even more wet!” James starts the car and Katie quickly gets in it. “Don’t you dare ever to take me to the beach again!”
Svar #1
09. januar 2012 af 123434 (Slettet)
reading a book she bought yesterday
Det tror jeg også du vidste. Det var nok bare en tastefejl
Svar #3
10. januar 2012 af turboweekend (Slettet)
Jeg vil mene at det hedder "waiting for her" i stedet for "waiting at her" - jeg er ikke 100% sikker, men du kan da kigge på det... og så ville jeg vælge "sun lotion" i stedet for "sun creme"
Men overordnet er det jo en næsten fejlfri tekst :-)
Svar #4
11. januar 2012 af OnceUponATime (Slettet)
Har fundet nogen til dig. Håber ik jeg går for meget i detaljer ;)
1. Mine lærer fortrækker altid at der står "it's his birthday" i stedet for "it is his birthday" - fordi det lyder mere flydende engelsk. Selvfølgelig kun hvis du foretrækker det. Det er jo rigtigt, men jeg får tit fejl, når jeg skriver "it is" :(
2. samme her: "he's" i stedet for "he is already there"
3. "he got from his parents"...lyder forkert, fordi du mangler ordet "som".. SOM han fik fra sine forældre "THAT he got from.."
4. Er enig i #3. Sun lotion lyder mere engelsk :)
5. Tro der skal stå "they went down TO the beach" Er ikke sikker, hehe :D
6. Her er så en vigtig en: Du kan enten vælge at skrive "You'd rather.." eller "you would rather" i stedet for "you rather go"
7. Tror det her er en stavefejl, men bare for ordens skyld :D "shooks" og ikke "shocks"
8. Altså selve denne sætning, ville jeg personligt ændre til "How does it come, that your stupid car doesn't have a roof?" i stedet for "Why come your stupid car not have a roof" fordi du har oversat en dansk sætning ordret til engelsk, hvilket man ikke må! Ikke ordret! :D hehe. Eller du kan selvfølgelig blot ændre "stupid car not have..." til "stupid car DOESN'T have". :D
9. "Katy asks madly" ikke "Katy asks mad"
10. Tror også denne sætning skal ændres, fra: "dont you dare ever to take me" til "dont you dare to ever take me"
Svar #5
15. januar 2012 af DenGenialeProfessor (Slettet)
Lige en kommentar til #4
8.
Det er mere normalt at skrive "How come", hvilket min engelsk lærer på det kraftigste opfordrer vi bruger når, "Hvordan kan det være" sætningerne optræder.
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