Engelsk rettelse

Hej,

Jeg har skrevet denne historie i engelsk 7. klasse. Har rettet den med de fejl, jeg nu kunne finde, men det ville være dejligt, hvis der var en der lige kunne få øje på nogle flere.

Håber der en, der vil hjælpe mig. :-) 

There has been a burglary in a jewellery shop. Detective Trapper is searching for clues at the crime scene. When he arrives at the jewellery shop, he remembers to put on his rubbergloves. If a detective does not use rubbergloves, he may leave his own fingerprint on the evidences. After he wore his rubbergloves, he is checking for stolen things.
The jewellery shop sells very expensive jewelleries, so it was an easy and profitable target for a thief to make money.

In the shop, detective Trapper discovers that almost all the decorations are empty. To note what is stolen, he finds his notebook and write down all the missing jewellery. After listing all the missing jewellery, detective Trapper starts to find evidences that can track him to the thief. On the window, the thief had written in big letters: ‘‘BETTER LUCK NEXT TIME’’. Detective Trapper can use this to calculate the height of the thief. The thief has also left a sandwich on the floor. Trapper can use the sandwich to calculate his DNA. DNA is a speciel code every human have. It is impossible to delete your DNA.
After searching the whole area, Trapper finds 3 places where the thief has left DNA.

In the lab

Detective Trapper has brought the evidence with him to the laboratory. At the laboratory, clever people works to find suspects. Trapper gives the DNA-evidence to a lady with black hair. She brings the evidence to a machine.
And after two weeks, she will hopefully be able to tell who is the thief.

After 14 days

2 weeks later, he goes to the laboratory again. There is a positive result, that matches the DNA, in the database. A man named Dick Johnson. He lives in downtown London.
Detective Trapper and a bunch of police officers goes to Dick Johnson’s address. When they arrive, Trapper knocks on the door.
‘’Is anobody home? It’s the police!’’ he yells.
No one opens the door.
Trapper yells again: ‘‘It’s the police, open the door!’’
‘‘You have 10 seconds to open the door, before we will storm the house’’
‘’1.. 2.. 3.. 4.. 5... 6.. 7.. 8.. Open the door!’’
‘’9.. 10.. Crush the door!
A police officer kicks the door three times, until it breaks. The police officers all storm in the house, with Trapper in front. In the bedroom, a man lies on the floor. ‘‘Stand up with your hands in the air!’’ Trapper yells.
The man stands up.
‘‘The time is 10.11 and you’re arrested for theft and burglary’’.