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I agree with what Maggie Jackson describes in the article. Maggie Jackson says: we are almost always within reach of something to fill our brains. Mobile phones, iPods, portable DVD players, televisions, emails, gaming consoles, Facebook, personal data assistants - the list goes on. I'm one of the people who has to check my Facebook profile, my mail inbox, my cell phone of course and different online newspapers every day.
I am also one who logs on Facebook too much. I do know that I'm very often on Facebook. But I do not think that it affects me that much, because I get everything done that I need to do. For instance, every day when I log on to Facebook I'm also getting my homework done.
What I use the most every day is my iPhone 4 and my computer. Without them I simply can't get by. I can use my iPhone for and as pretty much everything; iPod, Facebook, websites, games, chatting, writing and many other things. My computer, though, is capable of more than my iPhone. I love the phones that can do everything. I do not think that I'm the only one who loves the iPhone or computer - young people in Denmark and worldwide do as well.
As an example, my dad does not care about games, internet or Facebook. He just wants a phone where he can write and talk. We are the country in the world that has the biggest percentage of our population on Facebook.
When I go to school I always listen to music, because otherwise it's very boring - especially when you have to go alone. Listening to musich also clears my head and makes me focused on what I am doing.
Despite of that, I don't like to listen to music in my room or at home.
The only times when young people are really focused and aware is at the final exams in school, because then they’re forced to turn off their Internet and forced to leave their cell phone at home making them concentrate even better.

Det skulle gerne være meget tæt på fejlfrit nu :)
Der var er par steder, hvor jeg ikke var helt sikker på, hvad du mente, så du skal nok lige sikre dig, at meningen ikke er gået helt tabt undervejs.

/Jonas

I agree with what Maggie Jackson describes in ^her article. Maggie Jackson says: we are almost always within reach of something to fill our brains. Mobile phones, iPods, portable DVD players, televisions, emails, game consoles, Facebook, personal data assistants - the list goes on. _{^{I'm the type of person}} who has to check my Facebook profile, my email inbox, my cell phone of course  ^several online newspapers every day.
I ^{regularly log in to}  Facebook ^{and I realize that it may be too often}. But I do not think that it affects me  too much ^as I get everything done that ^{needs doing}. For instance, every day when I'm on  Facebook ^{I also get} my homework done.
  ^{I use my iPhone 4 and my computer every day}.  ^{I simply can't get by without them}. I can use my iPhone for ^{just about} everything; iPod, Facebook, websites, games, chatting, writing and many other things. My computer, though, is capable of more than my iPhone. I love the phones that can do everything. I do not think that I'm the only one who loves the iPhone or computer - young people in Denmark and ^{across the world} do as well.
As an example, ^{my father isn't too interested in gaming,} the internet or Facebook. ^{He simply needs a  cell phone that allows him to make phone calls and  send text messages. Denmark has the highest percentage of  Facebook users  in the world}.
When ^{I'm on my way  to} school I always listen to music  otherwise it ^get's very boring  - especially when I go alone. Listening to music also clears my head and ^{lets me focus} on what I am doing.
Despite  this, I don't like to listen to music in ^{when I'm in my room} at home.
The only time when young people are really focused and aware is ^during the final exams in school, because then they’re forced to turn off their Internet and  leave cell phones at home making ^{it easier to concentrate.}.

Just a few alternative words/phrases you may wish to consider using.