Hjælp til rettelse af engelsk manuskript??

Hej er der nogen der gider at hjælpe mig med at rette mit engelsk manuskript som jeg skal bruge til eksamen her på tirsdag det vil være en kæmpe hjælp for mig. I skal havde mange tak på forhånd.

Mvh. Karsten

1. Why did I choose this topic?

- I had taken this topic because I find it very interesting because we not had school shooting in Denmark but many in USA. 
- Also because it is a very known topic because we’re are coming many school shootings in USA inside few years.

2. Virginia Tech Massacre.

- On the 16 April 2007 a man go into the first school 7.15 am and shoot few people after what go he home and delete all on his computer and go to the nearly post office of writings and video recordings to NBC News it was 1 hours after the first school shooting. Now he goes to Norris Hall and school many before he shoot himself. There died 33 people and 23 people be injured. The murder was Seung-Hui Cho. He used a Glock 19 and Walther P22.
- The murder was Seung-Hui Cho he was born January 18, 1984 in South Korea. And he died 23 years old. He comes to USA when he was 8 years old. He has selectie-mutism so he was very bad with talk with people and very anxiety. Other students say he was a very quiet boy who would not respond if someone greeted him.
- West Ambler Johnson was the first place he attacks. He goes into the school 6.45 and kill the first 7.15. There are 894 people on the school and 2 of them be killed by Seung-Hui Cho.
- 2 hours after the first school shooting goes Seung-Hui Cho. Into Norris Hall here be killed 30 people and himself.

3. Reasons.

- There are many motives why people make a school shooting one of them could example there computer gaming because many of them there make a school shooting have play violent video games. And they play many hours every day.
- Other movies could were bullying, depression, jealousy, revenge. One motive was “hatred for mankind” and it was the man there makes Kauhajoki school shooting.

4. Bowling for columbine.

-  The movie bowling for Columbine are about school shooting and some other things and how easy it is to get weapons example one man make a bank account and so get he a gun some gift. The movie is also about a man there take out and speak with some of the victim from school shooting.
- I think the point in this movie is to tell us how bad it is they have weapons in USA and must stop it because how is there so many shooting in American it are because they have weapons and is scary for each other.
- In Bowling for columbine heart we about people is very scary for each other so they get guns so they can protect them but so thing other people they will protect them for them with guns so all people have guns they thing a guns is something man must have.
- Different between DK and USA is in USA can all buy weapons but in Denmark must we have weapons permission before we can get a gun. And in USA is people scary for each other and what are we not in DK.

5. Aarhus University shooting.

- We have only had one school shooting in Denmark it was April 5, 1994 on Aarhus university. There died 3 people and 2 people be injured. He used a sawed-off shotgun. And the man there do it was Flemming Nielsen. He had been student at the university since 1986. In a university cafeteria where he killed his first victim. He proceeded into another cafeteria and opened fire again, killing his second victim. Flemming Nielsen then retreated to a basement bathroom where he shoot himself.
- Flemming Nielsen had make a suicide note at his home stating how he couldn't handle life anymore, and that he wanted to kill some people before ending his own life. And what was his motive.

6. My opinion.

- One thing they could do better is drop sell of weapons. And help people there have it bad with theirs life. 
- My opinion about the school shooting is it a very bad thing, because I cannot understand how people can kill other people.
- I think people there shoot other people most were very sick because they can kill another people, so people there make a school shooting think I most do something great before they die so they make a school shooting so they can be reminded.