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27. september 2005 af
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Hej Kan nogen hjælpe mig med at rette de evt. der skulle være i dette? På forhånd tak.
Tea with the Birds:
Joanne Harris presents to us a very interesting story. It contains some interesting subjects, such as; lack of sociability and isolation.
One of the subjects is the lack of sociability. The narrator comes from a different culture than Mr. Tamaoki. It is very obvious to see that since Mr. Tamaoki moves in next door, the narrator changes a lot.
The narrator is obviously a loner and probably doesn’t have any real friends. He/she actually receives an amazing gift from Mr. Tamaoki, the gift to be kind to others. Mr. Tamaoki is like a gift send from above to help our narrow-minded narrator to get on with her/his life, and to be more open to the world.
The narrator does also suffer of a lack of self –esteem it is like he/she pushes people away when they are getting to close. He/she doesn’t see her/him – self as good as everybody else. The narrator clearly feels like an outsider: “-and the worst crime of all is to be an outsider. I should know; I’m one myself. Wrong face, wrong clothes, wrong voice.” The narrator is among strangers, and are just assuming that people doesn’t like her/him. It is like he/she can’t relate to anybody among her/him.
In the beginning when Mr. Tamaoki moves in, the narrator just hopes that he is quiet, but after a while he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is like her/him – self. It irritates the narrator very much in the beginning, “Anything would have been better than this secret man and his vegetables” , but later he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is giving her a great gift.
When the narrator lives notes on Mr. Tamaoki’s door and he doesn’t answer them it makes her/his anger grow and all the other stuff which irritates the narrator helps her/him filling a bobble of anger and uvidenhed. But when the bobble explodes he/she finds out that it is like her cages gets opened, and he/she is free to fly out in the world.
Mr. Tamaoki is actually the narrator’s guardian angle, or maybe a part of the narrator’s mind which has been hidden for many years and is know ready to get out. The narrator gets his/her wings from Mr. Tamaoki after he has shown him/her the birds in the refrigerator and giving her/him the tea.
Tea with the Birds:
Joanne Harris presents to us a very interesting story. It contains some interesting subjects, such as; lack of sociability and isolation.
One of the subjects is the lack of sociability. The narrator comes from a different culture than Mr. Tamaoki. It is very obvious to see that since Mr. Tamaoki moves in next door, the narrator changes a lot.
The narrator is obviously a loner and probably doesn’t have any real friends. He/she actually receives an amazing gift from Mr. Tamaoki, the gift to be kind to others. Mr. Tamaoki is like a gift send from above to help our narrow-minded narrator to get on with her/his life, and to be more open to the world.
The narrator does also suffer of a lack of self –esteem it is like he/she pushes people away when they are getting to close. He/she doesn’t see her/him – self as good as everybody else. The narrator clearly feels like an outsider: “-and the worst crime of all is to be an outsider. I should know; I’m one myself. Wrong face, wrong clothes, wrong voice.” The narrator is among strangers, and are just assuming that people doesn’t like her/him. It is like he/she can’t relate to anybody among her/him.
In the beginning when Mr. Tamaoki moves in, the narrator just hopes that he is quiet, but after a while he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is like her/him – self. It irritates the narrator very much in the beginning, “Anything would have been better than this secret man and his vegetables” , but later he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is giving her a great gift.
When the narrator lives notes on Mr. Tamaoki’s door and he doesn’t answer them it makes her/his anger grow and all the other stuff which irritates the narrator helps her/him filling a bobble of anger and uvidenhed. But when the bobble explodes he/she finds out that it is like her cages gets opened, and he/she is free to fly out in the world.
Mr. Tamaoki is actually the narrator’s guardian angle, or maybe a part of the narrator’s mind which has been hidden for many years and is know ready to get out. The narrator gets his/her wings from Mr. Tamaoki after he has shown him/her the birds in the refrigerator and giving her/him the tea.
Svar #3
28. september 2005 af Mac3 (Slettet)
Tea with the Birds:
Joanne Harris presents to us a very interesting story. It contains some interesting subjects, such as(;) lack of sociability and isolation.
One of the subjects is the lack of sociability. The narrator comes from a different culture than Mr. Tamaoki. It is very obvious to see that AFTER (since) Mr. Tamaoki moves in next door, the narrator changes a lot.
The narrator is obviously a loner and probably doesn’t have any real friends. He/she actually receives an amazing gift from Mr. Tamaoki, the gift to be kind to others. Mr. Tamaoki is like a gift SENT (send) from above to help our narrow-minded narrator (to) get on with her/his life, and to be more open to the world.
The narrator (does) also sufferS FROM (of) a lack of self –esteem it is like he/she pushes people away when they are getting to close. He/she doesn’t see her/him – self BEING as good as everybody else. The narrator clearly feels like an outsider: “-and the worst crime of all is to be an outsider. I should know; I’m one myself. Wrong face, wrong clothes, wrong voice.” The narrator is among strangers, and IS (are) just assuming that people DON'T (doesn’t) like her/him. It is like he/she can’t relate to anybody AROUND (among) her/him.
In the beginning when Mr. Tamaoki moves in, the narrator just hopes that he is quiet, but after a while he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is like her/him – self. It irritates the narrator very much in the beginning, “Anything would have been better than this secret man and his vegetables” , but later he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is giving her a great gift.
When the narrator LEAVES (lives) notes on Mr. Tamaoki’s door and he doesn’t answer them it makes her/his anger grow and all the other stuff which irritates the narrator helps her/him filling a bobble of anger and IGNORANCE (uvidenhed). But when the bobble BURSTS (explodes) he/she finds out that it is like her cages get(s) opened, and he/she is free to fly out in the world.
Mr. Tamaoki is actually the narrator’s guardian angle, or maybe a part of the narrator’s mind which has been hidden for many years and is NOW (know) ready to get out. The narrator gets his/her wings from Mr. Tamaoki after he has shown him/her the birds in the refrigerator and GIVEN (giving) her/him the tea.
Der er en del kommafejl, men dem har jeg ikke rettet. Du må have en grammatikbog, hvor du kan finde kommareglerne.
Måske skulle du indledningsvis antage et køn på fortælleren, hvis det ikke fremgår af historien, for det er lidt træls at læse he/she og him/her hele tiden.
Joanne Harris presents to us a very interesting story. It contains some interesting subjects, such as(;) lack of sociability and isolation.
One of the subjects is the lack of sociability. The narrator comes from a different culture than Mr. Tamaoki. It is very obvious to see that AFTER (since) Mr. Tamaoki moves in next door, the narrator changes a lot.
The narrator is obviously a loner and probably doesn’t have any real friends. He/she actually receives an amazing gift from Mr. Tamaoki, the gift to be kind to others. Mr. Tamaoki is like a gift SENT (send) from above to help our narrow-minded narrator (to) get on with her/his life, and to be more open to the world.
The narrator (does) also sufferS FROM (of) a lack of self –esteem it is like he/she pushes people away when they are getting to close. He/she doesn’t see her/him – self BEING as good as everybody else. The narrator clearly feels like an outsider: “-and the worst crime of all is to be an outsider. I should know; I’m one myself. Wrong face, wrong clothes, wrong voice.” The narrator is among strangers, and IS (are) just assuming that people DON'T (doesn’t) like her/him. It is like he/she can’t relate to anybody AROUND (among) her/him.
In the beginning when Mr. Tamaoki moves in, the narrator just hopes that he is quiet, but after a while he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is like her/him – self. It irritates the narrator very much in the beginning, “Anything would have been better than this secret man and his vegetables” , but later he/she finds out that Mr. Tamaoki is giving her a great gift.
When the narrator LEAVES (lives) notes on Mr. Tamaoki’s door and he doesn’t answer them it makes her/his anger grow and all the other stuff which irritates the narrator helps her/him filling a bobble of anger and IGNORANCE (uvidenhed). But when the bobble BURSTS (explodes) he/she finds out that it is like her cages get(s) opened, and he/she is free to fly out in the world.
Mr. Tamaoki is actually the narrator’s guardian angle, or maybe a part of the narrator’s mind which has been hidden for many years and is NOW (know) ready to get out. The narrator gets his/her wings from Mr. Tamaoki after he has shown him/her the birds in the refrigerator and GIVEN (giving) her/him the tea.
Der er en del kommafejl, men dem har jeg ikke rettet. Du må have en grammatikbog, hvor du kan finde kommareglerne.
Måske skulle du indledningsvis antage et køn på fortælleren, hvis det ikke fremgår af historien, for det er lidt træls at læse he/she og him/her hele tiden.
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