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In the article ‘Information Overload’, the journalist Maggie Jackson says that technology has taken over our everyday lives. I agree with what she writes because I can recognize and understand what she's talking about. I use technology in my everyday life. I have a cell phone and a computer, which I often use to make my homework, to play, to text messenger, to call my family abroad via Viper, to call my friends and to find information on the net I have tried myself;t when sitting with my friends, you are only halfway there, because you're preoccupied with your mobile phone. Therefore you do not pay attention to your friends, and you are not really present in your life. You live much more in the computer and your phone.  I can do several things at once, such as watching TV while using my computer and I can us use my computer while I'm using my mobile. Sometimes I sit in a bus or a train and listen to music I play on it and when I take into my room I hear the music but not the whole time I listen to music it is only sometimes if I have quiet moments yes it has I I have silence when I sleep when I'm doing homework when I read and when I sit and relax because that is where I am most concentrated.