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Engelsk Stil- Annie's story
10. december 2005 af
210887 (Slettet)
Hej..
Er der nogen der er interesseret i at hjælpe med at rette denne engelske stil for gramatiske og sætnings fejl. Ville ikke mene der var så mange, forhåbenlig. Det ville bare være super. På forhånd tak..
Annie’s Story
Nowadays it is harder being a child then formerly. Parents are very busy and more parents get divorced. The main problem is that many children do not get the attention that they cry for, and therefore they might go to great lengths to get the attention of their parents.
Elisabeth Russell Taylor writes “Annie’s story”. It was published in 1997 in the book “Present Fears”.
The narrator in this story is called Annie, and she is only a child and the story is told though her point of view. She lives together with her mother and farther. She has a very close relationship to her mother, and she look up to her, as a good role model. However, Annie’s relationship to her father seems less good. He is a very dominating man, and he makes her feel very trapped and controlled by him. I do not think she really likes him, as she says,” I would rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter” (page 1, line2-3). The father seems to ignore these words, as he goes straight to his office to write an ending on an article. He previously does not know how to react, as Annie in a way gives him a documentation of him being a bad farther. However Hugo, the brother of Roger, also sees Roger as a bad farther,” Roger’s Perverse. He hardly knows her! He doesn’t even like children” (Page 2, line, 63). Therefore, Roger has a very good reason of seeing himself as a bad farther. This might also be the reason why he wants the mother to take Annie with her all the time. However, I think she is even worse, as she is very selfish in her behaviour, “Can’t you find that information in books? Resarch it” ( page 3, line 106). This quote indicates her very egoistic way of thinking, and that she does not want to take responsible like a parent should do.
In the end, it seems as if Annie feels guilt towards her father, “I’m really sorry I said I’d rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter then father’s. I think I must have put ideas into Mother’s head” (page 3, line 116-118). This quote also shows her very dramatic way of telling.
Annie sees her mother and farther as opposite persons “When I needed her, I always looked first I’n the vegetable garden, second in the potting shed and third in the field with the horses and only fourth somewhere in the house, I think that if there’s an opposite to being researcher, mother is that. ( page 1, line 3-6).
With these words, she describes the mother, as being very liberated, in contact with nature, freedom minded, knows how to manage thinks on her own, and that she unlike that her farther has a social life.
Annie’s farther has a twin brother, called Hugo. Annie likes being at his place, and she describes Hugo and her mother as being similarly disposed, as they both like nature. Both Annie and her mother are much more comfortable at Hogu’s place than they are at home.
One day Annie is overhearing a conversation between Hugo and her mother, which says”Have you spoken to Annie? Have you told her? Are you really going to be able to be happy without her? (Page 2, line 61). I think this indicates that the mother is going to leave her family. Instead, she wants to move in with Hugo, whom she might have had an affair with. This also shows the selfish side of the mother, as she wants to leave her child.
Annie is extremely bright for her age, and she loves to make up stories. She make up stories about things she imagine could have happened and she describes them in a very dramatic way” It took my appetite away. Everything was crumbling. Inside me, I felt cold and empty. I look round the kitchen, at all things on the dresser and the vegetables in the crock. Everything looked death. (Page 3, line 93-95). We also see this sort of exaggerated describe in her way of characterizing the persons in the story. This might be a very childish way of describing people, as she is putting them into boxes. One can easily see who she considers as being bad or good, as she uses many adjectives in her description of people. Annie describes her father as being a bad person and her mother as being a good person. However, her mother leaves her in the end, she still sees her as a hero, because she has manage to break free from the father’s rules and control, and Annie admire that, as she which she could do the same.
Translation:
It can be quite challenge living in modern society. Everyday we are confronted with news about poverty and violation of human rights. Often this results in you feeling completely insignificant, because you cannot possibly change anything. Of cause the globalisation unites the countries, but it may as well imply that working conditions in another country aggravate. I wonder when we in the affluent countries obtain a lifestyle that considers poorer populations.
Er der nogen der er interesseret i at hjælpe med at rette denne engelske stil for gramatiske og sætnings fejl. Ville ikke mene der var så mange, forhåbenlig. Det ville bare være super. På forhånd tak..
Annie’s Story
Nowadays it is harder being a child then formerly. Parents are very busy and more parents get divorced. The main problem is that many children do not get the attention that they cry for, and therefore they might go to great lengths to get the attention of their parents.
Elisabeth Russell Taylor writes “Annie’s story”. It was published in 1997 in the book “Present Fears”.
The narrator in this story is called Annie, and she is only a child and the story is told though her point of view. She lives together with her mother and farther. She has a very close relationship to her mother, and she look up to her, as a good role model. However, Annie’s relationship to her father seems less good. He is a very dominating man, and he makes her feel very trapped and controlled by him. I do not think she really likes him, as she says,” I would rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter” (page 1, line2-3). The father seems to ignore these words, as he goes straight to his office to write an ending on an article. He previously does not know how to react, as Annie in a way gives him a documentation of him being a bad farther. However Hugo, the brother of Roger, also sees Roger as a bad farther,” Roger’s Perverse. He hardly knows her! He doesn’t even like children” (Page 2, line, 63). Therefore, Roger has a very good reason of seeing himself as a bad farther. This might also be the reason why he wants the mother to take Annie with her all the time. However, I think she is even worse, as she is very selfish in her behaviour, “Can’t you find that information in books? Resarch it” ( page 3, line 106). This quote indicates her very egoistic way of thinking, and that she does not want to take responsible like a parent should do.
In the end, it seems as if Annie feels guilt towards her father, “I’m really sorry I said I’d rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter then father’s. I think I must have put ideas into Mother’s head” (page 3, line 116-118). This quote also shows her very dramatic way of telling.
Annie sees her mother and farther as opposite persons “When I needed her, I always looked first I’n the vegetable garden, second in the potting shed and third in the field with the horses and only fourth somewhere in the house, I think that if there’s an opposite to being researcher, mother is that. ( page 1, line 3-6).
With these words, she describes the mother, as being very liberated, in contact with nature, freedom minded, knows how to manage thinks on her own, and that she unlike that her farther has a social life.
Annie’s farther has a twin brother, called Hugo. Annie likes being at his place, and she describes Hugo and her mother as being similarly disposed, as they both like nature. Both Annie and her mother are much more comfortable at Hogu’s place than they are at home.
One day Annie is overhearing a conversation between Hugo and her mother, which says”Have you spoken to Annie? Have you told her? Are you really going to be able to be happy without her? (Page 2, line 61). I think this indicates that the mother is going to leave her family. Instead, she wants to move in with Hugo, whom she might have had an affair with. This also shows the selfish side of the mother, as she wants to leave her child.
Annie is extremely bright for her age, and she loves to make up stories. She make up stories about things she imagine could have happened and she describes them in a very dramatic way” It took my appetite away. Everything was crumbling. Inside me, I felt cold and empty. I look round the kitchen, at all things on the dresser and the vegetables in the crock. Everything looked death. (Page 3, line 93-95). We also see this sort of exaggerated describe in her way of characterizing the persons in the story. This might be a very childish way of describing people, as she is putting them into boxes. One can easily see who she considers as being bad or good, as she uses many adjectives in her description of people. Annie describes her father as being a bad person and her mother as being a good person. However, her mother leaves her in the end, she still sees her as a hero, because she has manage to break free from the father’s rules and control, and Annie admire that, as she which she could do the same.
Translation:
It can be quite challenge living in modern society. Everyday we are confronted with news about poverty and violation of human rights. Often this results in you feeling completely insignificant, because you cannot possibly change anything. Of cause the globalisation unites the countries, but it may as well imply that working conditions in another country aggravate. I wonder when we in the affluent countries obtain a lifestyle that considers poorer populations.
Svar #1
10. december 2005 af Mac3 (Slettet)
Annie’s Story
Nowadays it is harder being a child then (formerly FORKERT BETYDNING) EARLIER/BEFORE. Parents are very busy and more parents get divorced. The main problem is that many children do not get the attention that they cry for, and therefore they might go to great lengths to get the attention of their parents.
Elisabeth Russell Taylor (writes DET ER EN OVERSTÅET HANDLING, SÅ BRUG DATID) WROTE THE SHORT STORY (?) “Annie’s story”. It was published in 1997 in the book “Present Fears”.
The narrator in this story is called Annie, and she is only a child and the story is told though (DU KAN GARANTERET GODT SELV SE, HVAD DER ER GALT MED DETTE ORD) her point of view. She lives together with her mother and (farther)FATHER. She has a very close relationship (to)WITH her mother, and she look (CONCORD)up to her, as a good role model. However, Annie’s relationship (to)WITH her father seems less good. He is a very dominating man, and he makes her feel very trapped and controlled by him. I do not think she really likes him, as she says,” I would rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter” (page 1, line2-3). The father seems to ignore these words, as he goes straight to his office to write an ending on an article. He (previously HVAD MENER DU MED DET? FØR HISTORIEN BEGYNDER? ORDET VIRKER OVERFLØDIGT OG MENINGSFORVIRRENDE) does not know how to react, as Annie in a way gives him a (documentation PRØV AT FINDE ET ANDET ORD) of him being a bad (farther)FATHER. However Hugo, the brother of Roger, also sees Roger as a bad (farther)FATHER,” Roger’s Perverse(LILLE BEGYNDELSESBOGSTAV). He hardly knows her! He doesn’t even like children” (Page 2, line, 63). Therefore, Roger has a very good reason (of)FOR seeing himself as a bad (farther)FATHER. This might also be the reason why he wants the mother to take Annie with her all the time. However, I think she is even worse, as she is very selfish in her behaviour, “Can’t you find that information in books? Resarch it” ( page 3, line 106). This quote indicates her very egoistic way of thinking, and that she does not want to take responsible like a parent should do.
In the end, it seems as if Annie feels guilt towards her father, “I’m really sorry I said I’d rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter then Father’s. I think I must have put ideas into Mother’s head” (page 3, line 116-118). This quote also shows her very dramatic way of telling.
Annie sees her mother and (farther)FATHER as opposite persons “When I needed her, I always looked first I’n(!!??) the vegetable garden, second in the potting shed and third in the field with the horses and only fourth somewhere in the house, I think that if there’s an opposite to being researcher, mother is that. (END QUOTE)( page 1, line 3-6).
With these words, she describes the mother, as being very liberated, in contact with nature, freedom minded, knows how to manage (thinks)THINGS on her own, and that she unlike (that) her (farther)FATHER has a social life.
Annie’s (farther)FATHER has a twin brother, called Hugo. Annie likes being at his place, and she describes Hugo and her mother as being similarly disposed, as they both like nature. Both Annie and her mother are much more comfortable at Hogu’s (!!) place than they are at home.
One day Annie (is overhearing DER ER IKKE BELÆG FOR AT BRUGE DET PROGRESSIVE ASPEKT HER)HEARS a conversation between Hugo and her mother, (which MOTHER ER EN PERSON, IKKE EN TING) WHO says ”Have you spoken to Annie? Have you told her? Are you really going to be able to be happy without her? (END QUOTE)(Page 2, line 61). (HVEM SIGER DET? HUGO ELLER MODEREN? SOM DU SKRIVER DET ER DET MODEREN)I think this indicates that the mother is going to leave her family. Instead, she wants to move in with Hugo, WITH whom she might have had an affair (with). This also shows the selfish side of the mother, as she wants to leave her child.
Annie is extremely bright for her age, and she loves to make up stories. She make (CONCORD)up stories about things she imagine (CONCORD)could have happened and she describes them in a very dramatic way” It took my appetite away. Everything was crumbling. Inside me, I felt cold and empty. I look round the kitchen, at all things on the dresser and the vegetables in the crock. Everything looked death. (END QUOTE)(Page 3, line 93-95). We also see this sort of exaggerated (describe ER ET VERBUM, MENER DU DESCRIPTION?) in her way of characterizing the persons in the story. This might be a very childish way of describing people, as she is putting them into boxes. One can easily see who she considers (as being) bad or good, as she uses many adjectives in her description of people. Annie describes her father as (being) a bad person and her mother as (being) a good person. However, her mother leaves her in the end, she still sees her as a hero, because she has manageD to break free from the father’s rules and control, and Annie admire (CONCORD) that, as she (which) WISH she could do the same.
Translation:
It can be quite A challenge (ELLER CHALLENGING)living in modern society. Everyday we are confronted with news about poverty and violation of human rights. (Often this results in you feeling completely insignificant HVORDAN LYDER DEN DANSKE VERSION? DETTE GIVER IKKE MEGET MENING), because you cannot possibly change anything. Of (cause)COURSE the globalisation unites the countries, but it may as well imply that working conditions in another country aggravate. I wonder when we in the affluent countries obtain a lifestyle that considers poorer populations.
Nowadays it is harder being a child then (formerly FORKERT BETYDNING) EARLIER/BEFORE. Parents are very busy and more parents get divorced. The main problem is that many children do not get the attention that they cry for, and therefore they might go to great lengths to get the attention of their parents.
Elisabeth Russell Taylor (writes DET ER EN OVERSTÅET HANDLING, SÅ BRUG DATID) WROTE THE SHORT STORY (?) “Annie’s story”. It was published in 1997 in the book “Present Fears”.
The narrator in this story is called Annie, and she is only a child and the story is told though (DU KAN GARANTERET GODT SELV SE, HVAD DER ER GALT MED DETTE ORD) her point of view. She lives together with her mother and (farther)FATHER. She has a very close relationship (to)WITH her mother, and she look (CONCORD)up to her, as a good role model. However, Annie’s relationship (to)WITH her father seems less good. He is a very dominating man, and he makes her feel very trapped and controlled by him. I do not think she really likes him, as she says,” I would rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter” (page 1, line2-3). The father seems to ignore these words, as he goes straight to his office to write an ending on an article. He (previously HVAD MENER DU MED DET? FØR HISTORIEN BEGYNDER? ORDET VIRKER OVERFLØDIGT OG MENINGSFORVIRRENDE) does not know how to react, as Annie in a way gives him a (documentation PRØV AT FINDE ET ANDET ORD) of him being a bad (farther)FATHER. However Hugo, the brother of Roger, also sees Roger as a bad (farther)FATHER,” Roger’s Perverse(LILLE BEGYNDELSESBOGSTAV). He hardly knows her! He doesn’t even like children” (Page 2, line, 63). Therefore, Roger has a very good reason (of)FOR seeing himself as a bad (farther)FATHER. This might also be the reason why he wants the mother to take Annie with her all the time. However, I think she is even worse, as she is very selfish in her behaviour, “Can’t you find that information in books? Resarch it” ( page 3, line 106). This quote indicates her very egoistic way of thinking, and that she does not want to take responsible like a parent should do.
In the end, it seems as if Annie feels guilt towards her father, “I’m really sorry I said I’d rather be Uncle Hugo’s daughter then Father’s. I think I must have put ideas into Mother’s head” (page 3, line 116-118). This quote also shows her very dramatic way of telling.
Annie sees her mother and (farther)FATHER as opposite persons “When I needed her, I always looked first I’n(!!??) the vegetable garden, second in the potting shed and third in the field with the horses and only fourth somewhere in the house, I think that if there’s an opposite to being researcher, mother is that. (END QUOTE)( page 1, line 3-6).
With these words, she describes the mother, as being very liberated, in contact with nature, freedom minded, knows how to manage (thinks)THINGS on her own, and that she unlike (that) her (farther)FATHER has a social life.
Annie’s (farther)FATHER has a twin brother, called Hugo. Annie likes being at his place, and she describes Hugo and her mother as being similarly disposed, as they both like nature. Both Annie and her mother are much more comfortable at Hogu’s (!!) place than they are at home.
One day Annie (is overhearing DER ER IKKE BELÆG FOR AT BRUGE DET PROGRESSIVE ASPEKT HER)HEARS a conversation between Hugo and her mother, (which MOTHER ER EN PERSON, IKKE EN TING) WHO says ”Have you spoken to Annie? Have you told her? Are you really going to be able to be happy without her? (END QUOTE)(Page 2, line 61). (HVEM SIGER DET? HUGO ELLER MODEREN? SOM DU SKRIVER DET ER DET MODEREN)I think this indicates that the mother is going to leave her family. Instead, she wants to move in with Hugo, WITH whom she might have had an affair (with). This also shows the selfish side of the mother, as she wants to leave her child.
Annie is extremely bright for her age, and she loves to make up stories. She make (CONCORD)up stories about things she imagine (CONCORD)could have happened and she describes them in a very dramatic way” It took my appetite away. Everything was crumbling. Inside me, I felt cold and empty. I look round the kitchen, at all things on the dresser and the vegetables in the crock. Everything looked death. (END QUOTE)(Page 3, line 93-95). We also see this sort of exaggerated (describe ER ET VERBUM, MENER DU DESCRIPTION?) in her way of characterizing the persons in the story. This might be a very childish way of describing people, as she is putting them into boxes. One can easily see who she considers (as being) bad or good, as she uses many adjectives in her description of people. Annie describes her father as (being) a bad person and her mother as (being) a good person. However, her mother leaves her in the end, she still sees her as a hero, because she has manageD to break free from the father’s rules and control, and Annie admire (CONCORD) that, as she (which) WISH she could do the same.
Translation:
It can be quite A challenge (ELLER CHALLENGING)living in modern society. Everyday we are confronted with news about poverty and violation of human rights. (Often this results in you feeling completely insignificant HVORDAN LYDER DEN DANSKE VERSION? DETTE GIVER IKKE MEGET MENING), because you cannot possibly change anything. Of (cause)COURSE the globalisation unites the countries, but it may as well imply that working conditions in another country aggravate. I wonder when we in the affluent countries obtain a lifestyle that considers poorer populations.
Svar #2
11. december 2005 af 210887 (Slettet)
Mange tak for hjælpen.. Hvad mener du når du skriver concord?- betyder det ikke enighed?..
Svar #3
11. december 2005 af Mac3 (Slettet)
tjoh, men jeg kender vist ikke det danske ord for det (hvis jeg kender det, så har jeg glemt det). Det betyder overensstemmelse, og det drejer sig om, at du skal have overensstemmelse mellem verbum og subjekt med hensyn til tal, ex.
he thinks (ikke he think)
I love (ikke I loves)
he thinks (ikke he think)
I love (ikke I loves)
Svar #5
11. december 2005 af Mac3 (Slettet)
Hvis det absolut skal oversættes, så har jeg nu slået det op, og ja, det hedder kongruens på dansk/latin.
Foregår jeres engelskundervisning ikke på engelsk???
Foregår jeres engelskundervisning ikke på engelsk???
Svar #6
11. december 2005 af JGH (Slettet)
Jeg har kun brugt begrebet i fransk. Vi har kun haft tre moduler, hvor vi rent faktisk har haft engelsk (eller er moduler afgået til almen sprogforståelse), og vi ender med at have fem moduler i hele grundforløbet, plus den ene uge, hvor vi havde AT (på skemaet figurerede det som engelsk, men reelt var det "arbejd selv"). Så vi har ikke rigtig haft chancen for særlig meget. Men nej, jeg har aldrig hørt det engelske begreb.
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