Kort tekst - rettelser? Børnemordere

Hej

Jeg har oversat en tekst fra Chili (marts i år) til engelsk, der handler om børnemordere.

Det ville være rart med et tjeck før jeg afleverer :)

På dansk:
Alder: Begge ti år.
Offer: En toårig dreng.
Drabet: Jon og Robert havde brugt det meste af dagen den 12. februar 1993 på at rende rundt i shoppingcenteret Bootle Strand ved Liverpool, England. Her havde de stjålet småting som batterier, slik og maling fra forskellige forretninger. Men midt på dagen besluttede de at stjæle noget, som skulle få hele verden til at gå i chok. De to tiårige stjal en baby, toårige James Bulger. Overvågningskameraer fangede synet af de to tiårige forlade centeret med lille James ved hånden, mens James' mor stod tilbage uden at kunne finde sin søn. Jon og Robert gik ubesværede rundt med James i byen og endte ved nogle forladte togskinner. Her blev James tortureret på de værst tænkelige måder for efterfølgende at blive smidt på skinnerne med hovedet dækket af sten, som de havde kastet på ham. Han døde først helt, da toget ramte ham og delte ham i to.
Dom: James Bulger-mordet rykkede, ligesom nogle af de andre mordsager med børn i hovedrollen, vores grænser for, hvad vi troede var muligt. Psykologer eksperter og læger testede, undersøgte og analyserede de to drenge og måtte konstatere, at kun virkeligheden slår fantasien. Fælles for de to var dog, at de kom fra hjem med omsorgssvigt, vold, druk og misbrug.
Jon og Robert kom i myndighedernes varetægt og i lukket behandling i England. I 2001 blev de sat på fri fod og fik nye identiteter og beskyttelse, hvilket kostede staten over 40 millioner kroner. Det skabte kæmpe debat i medierne over hele verden. For har to drenge, som begik forrige årtis mest ondskabsfulde mord, fortjent en chance til?

På engelsk:
Age: both 10 years.
Victim: a two-year-old boy
The killing: Jon and Robert had spent most of the 12th of February 1993 running around in the shopping centre Bootle Strand near Liverpool, England. Here they had been stealing trivial matters like batteries, candy and paint from different shops. But at midday they decided to steal something that would make the whole world go into shock. The two 10-year-olds stole a baby, 2-year-old James Bulger. The surveillance camera caught the sight of the two 10-year-olds leaving the centre with little James by the hand, while James’ mother was left unable to find her son. Jon and Robert walked effortlessly around town with James and ended up by some abandoned rails. Here James was tortured by the worst thinkable ways and subsequently thrown onto the rails, his head covered with stones that they had been throwing at him. He first completely died when the train hit him and divided him into two.
Sentence: ¬T¬he James Bulger Murder changed, like some of the other murder cases with children in the leading part, our limits for what we thought possible. Psychologists, experts and doctors tested, examined and analysed the two boys and realized that only reality beats the fantasy. Shared by the two was however that they came from homes with neglect, violence, drinking and abuse.
Jon and Robert were transferred to the charge of the authorities and in a closed treatment in England. In 2001 they were set at liberty and got new identities and protection, which cost the state over 40 million Danish crowns. This created a huge debate in the media all over the world. Because has two boys, who committed the last decade’s most cruel murder, deserved another chance?


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