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rettelse af engelsk stil
30. april 2007 af
nadiapiien (Slettet)
The call of the wild.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school, and there are also a lot of kids who takes drugs and has become violent.
The Bacons family sends their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he has started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of him being wild and rebellious.
It could also just have been a phase, and all they had to do was to sit down all three of them and talked things over and if that did not help, they should have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year. So he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked with him every time he did something wrong, and then he could have been alive today.
If they had sent him to a doctor when the heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school, and there are also a lot of kids who takes drugs and has become violent.
The Bacons family sends their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he has started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of him being wild and rebellious.
It could also just have been a phase, and all they had to do was to sit down all three of them and talked things over and if that did not help, they should have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year. So he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked with him every time he did something wrong, and then he could have been alive today.
If they had sent him to a doctor when the heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
Svar #1
30. april 2007 af håhå (Slettet)
The call of the wild.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school. There are also a lot of kids who take drugs and have become violent.
The Bacons family send their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he have started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think that what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of the way he acted.
It could have been just a phase in Arons life, where the Solution could be to sit down, all three of them, and talke things over and if that would not help, they could have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year.
So that he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked with him every time he did something wrong, then he could have been alive today.
Or if they had sent him to a doctor when they heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school. There are also a lot of kids who take drugs and have become violent.
The Bacons family send their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he have started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy camp.
I think that what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of the way he acted.
It could have been just a phase in Arons life, where the Solution could be to sit down, all three of them, and talke things over and if that would not help, they could have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year.
So that he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked with him every time he did something wrong, then he could have been alive today.
Or if they had sent him to a doctor when they heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
Svar #2
30. april 2007 af Bruger slettet (Slettet)
DER VAR IKKE MANGE FEJL I HÅHÅS UDGAVE:
The call of the wild.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school. There are also a lot of kids who take drugs and have become violent.
The Bacons family send their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he HAD started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy (VIST NOK UDEN BINDESTREG) camp.
I think that what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of the way he acted.
It could have been just a phase in ARONS life, where the SOLUTION (MED LILLE BE.BOGSTAV) could be to sit down, all three of them, and TALK things over and if that would not help, they could have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year.
So that he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked TO him every time he did something wrong, then he could have been alive today.
Or if they had sent him to a doctor when they heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
The call of the wild.
Today a lot of kids are lazy and they do not work after school. There are also a lot of kids who take drugs and have become violent.
The Bacons family send their son Aaron to a wilderness camp because he has started to play truant, his poetry has taken on a violent tinge and he HAD started to smoke a lot of pot.
After being attacked by a gang in the school parking lot, Aaron’s parents remembered hearing about a child who had had a good experience at a wilderness-therapy (VIST NOK UDEN BINDESTREG) camp.
I think that what they did towards Aaron was the right thing to do because of the way he acted.
It could have been just a phase in ARONS life, where the SOLUTION (MED LILLE BE.BOGSTAV) could be to sit down, all three of them, and TALK things over and if that would not help, they could have showed him a brochure of the school and tell him that they think that it could be good for him to come away from everything in a month or a year.
So that he could change.
On March 31, Aaron collapsed on the trail and died in the cab of a truck, because of an ulcer.
I do not think that the staff treated Aaron with respect, if they had talked TO him every time he did something wrong, then he could have been alive today.
Or if they had sent him to a doctor when they heard about his stomach pain, they could have saved him.
It turned out to be tragically wrong.
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