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rettelse af engelsk
25. februar 2008 af
Sinz (Slettet)
Hej studier :)
Kan jeg få en af jer til at rette min lille engelsk stil, på forhånd mange tak ;b
Gun Clubs in Schools
There is almost one gun for every man, woman and child in the US. Each year more than ten thousand has been committed and dies in guns decade. An American has to be over 21 years to buy a handgun, and only 18 to buy a riffle. Every state is a little different in some things about the gun law, but the fact is that everybody is aloud to have a gun from the age of 21. Personally, I think that it is madness how easy you just can go to a store and by bullets, which in principle makes people able to make their own massacre if they want to.
It is completely madness and we don’t understand what really is happening, when we in Denmark hear about school shootings and so on. Those tragedies where it is just kids who become the murders. My experience is that the most of USA wants to find the reasons why in other things than reality. They are for example talking about that it is caused by all the violent TV shows, movies, video games and computers which supposes to inspire the kids to solve problems. They are talking about lack of parental involvement and a lot of other things. Maybe they are right that it has something to do with it, but I’m sure that this isn’t the main problem. It is hard for me to realize the whole gun debate. We do understand that each home wants to be able to protect them in case of burglary. Because everybody has guns and there are more crimes where guns are involved, which brings us back to more guns. I’m pretty sure that if the American government removed all guns it would solves many problems. I know that this will be a bigger process but look at the rest of the world. There are so many places around the world which deals with the same issues and the range of gun decades are not even close. I also don’t think that this problem has anything to do with the American history concerning the cowboys against the Indians and so on. If we must find another reason than the gun control then I think we must look at the social differences in USA.
I think that it is naturally that there is relationship between welfare state and most crimes in USA. The social differences play a certain role that’s clearly, but you still wouldn’t have as huge a problem regarding cause of deaths, if you didn’t have the same law of gun control. I’m sorry, but I just can’t follow you Americans why you think other than the police should be aloud to have guns. Because why should they really be here so?
To be more focused about the school shootings. Generally I would say that kids go crazy everywhere around the world. There will always be depressed children and lack from parental, but children can’t get things as guns in other countries. It happens, that kids go crazy and maybe wants to heart students but I never get to a point where other children dies and not as many are affected.
NRA’s slogan is “guns don’t kill people, people kill people” and it’s a fact, but my opinion on guns is still that I don’t think that anybody except the police and military should be able to have weapons. I believe very strongly in that if nobody in the US had guns but the police, then there would be more law and order. The police would have more respect and they would better could handle situations. So remove the guns, this can only get better!
Kan jeg få en af jer til at rette min lille engelsk stil, på forhånd mange tak ;b
Gun Clubs in Schools
There is almost one gun for every man, woman and child in the US. Each year more than ten thousand has been committed and dies in guns decade. An American has to be over 21 years to buy a handgun, and only 18 to buy a riffle. Every state is a little different in some things about the gun law, but the fact is that everybody is aloud to have a gun from the age of 21. Personally, I think that it is madness how easy you just can go to a store and by bullets, which in principle makes people able to make their own massacre if they want to.
It is completely madness and we don’t understand what really is happening, when we in Denmark hear about school shootings and so on. Those tragedies where it is just kids who become the murders. My experience is that the most of USA wants to find the reasons why in other things than reality. They are for example talking about that it is caused by all the violent TV shows, movies, video games and computers which supposes to inspire the kids to solve problems. They are talking about lack of parental involvement and a lot of other things. Maybe they are right that it has something to do with it, but I’m sure that this isn’t the main problem. It is hard for me to realize the whole gun debate. We do understand that each home wants to be able to protect them in case of burglary. Because everybody has guns and there are more crimes where guns are involved, which brings us back to more guns. I’m pretty sure that if the American government removed all guns it would solves many problems. I know that this will be a bigger process but look at the rest of the world. There are so many places around the world which deals with the same issues and the range of gun decades are not even close. I also don’t think that this problem has anything to do with the American history concerning the cowboys against the Indians and so on. If we must find another reason than the gun control then I think we must look at the social differences in USA.
I think that it is naturally that there is relationship between welfare state and most crimes in USA. The social differences play a certain role that’s clearly, but you still wouldn’t have as huge a problem regarding cause of deaths, if you didn’t have the same law of gun control. I’m sorry, but I just can’t follow you Americans why you think other than the police should be aloud to have guns. Because why should they really be here so?
To be more focused about the school shootings. Generally I would say that kids go crazy everywhere around the world. There will always be depressed children and lack from parental, but children can’t get things as guns in other countries. It happens, that kids go crazy and maybe wants to heart students but I never get to a point where other children dies and not as many are affected.
NRA’s slogan is “guns don’t kill people, people kill people” and it’s a fact, but my opinion on guns is still that I don’t think that anybody except the police and military should be able to have weapons. I believe very strongly in that if nobody in the US had guns but the police, then there would be more law and order. The police would have more respect and they would better could handle situations. So remove the guns, this can only get better!
Svar #1
25. februar 2008 af bomelom (Slettet)
//Each year more than ten thousand has been committed and dies in guns decade.// (jeg forstår ikke sætningen, den giver ikke mening)
//Every state is a little different in some things about the gun law//
(det lyder ikke så godt, jeg vil foreslå) the gun law is a little different in every state.
but the fact is that everybody is //aloud// to have a gun from the age of
21. (aloud) bruges om eks høj lyd (Allowed)
My experience is that the most of USA wants to find the reasons //why// in other things than reality. (why) er overflødigt
I’m pretty sure that if the American government removed all guns it would solve/s/ many problems. (s) skal fjernes
I think that it is naturally that there is (a) relationship between (the) welfare state and most crimes in USA.
The social differences play a certain role that’s clear/ly/, but you still wouldn’t have as huge a problem regarding cause of deaths,
endelsen (ly) skal fjernes
I’m sorry, but I just can’t follow you Americans why you (do) think other than the police should be aloud to have guns.
/Because why should they really be here so/ sætningen giver ikke mening?
/To be more focused about the school shootings/ (to focuse more about the school shootings)
It happens, that kids go crazy and maybe wants to //heart// students but /I/ never get to a point where other children dies and not as many are affected. heart betyder hjerte, du skal bruge (hurt) eller (harm)
ved /I/ tror jeg du mener it
The police would have more respect and they //would better could handle situations//. So remove the guns, this can only get better!
(could handle situations better)
jeg har ikke rettet (.) og (,)fejl, men jeg vil foreslå dig at kigge den igennem for det, da der er en del af dem.
//Every state is a little different in some things about the gun law//
(det lyder ikke så godt, jeg vil foreslå) the gun law is a little different in every state.
but the fact is that everybody is //aloud// to have a gun from the age of
21. (aloud) bruges om eks høj lyd (Allowed)
My experience is that the most of USA wants to find the reasons //why// in other things than reality. (why) er overflødigt
I’m pretty sure that if the American government removed all guns it would solve/s/ many problems. (s) skal fjernes
I think that it is naturally that there is (a) relationship between (the) welfare state and most crimes in USA.
The social differences play a certain role that’s clear/ly/, but you still wouldn’t have as huge a problem regarding cause of deaths,
endelsen (ly) skal fjernes
I’m sorry, but I just can’t follow you Americans why you (do) think other than the police should be aloud to have guns.
/Because why should they really be here so/ sætningen giver ikke mening?
/To be more focused about the school shootings/ (to focuse more about the school shootings)
It happens, that kids go crazy and maybe wants to //heart// students but /I/ never get to a point where other children dies and not as many are affected. heart betyder hjerte, du skal bruge (hurt) eller (harm)
ved /I/ tror jeg du mener it
The police would have more respect and they //would better could handle situations//. So remove the guns, this can only get better!
(could handle situations better)
jeg har ikke rettet (.) og (,)fejl, men jeg vil foreslå dig at kigge den igennem for det, da der er en del af dem.
Svar #2
25. februar 2008 af OnlyMe07 (Slettet)
Gun clubs in schools
There is almost a weapon for every man, woman and child in the United States. Each year more than ten thousand has been committed and dies in weapons decade. An American has more than 21 years for the purchase of a handgun, and only 18 for the purchase of a riffle. Each state is a little different in a number of things about the gun law, but it is a fact that everyone aloud to a pistol from the age of 21 years. Personally, I think that it is madness how easily you can simply go to a store and by bullets, which generally makes people able to massacre their own if they wish.
It is completely crazy and we do not understand what really has happened in Denmark when we hear about school shootings and so on. These tragedies where it is just children who are the murders. My experience is that most of the United States wants to find the reasons why in other things than the reality. They include talk about that was caused by all violent television shows, movies, video games and computers that supposes to inspire the children to solve problems. They are talking about the lack of parental involvement and a lot of other things. Maybe they are right that it has something to do with it, but I am sure that this is not the biggest problem. It is difficult for me to see the whole gun debate. We understand that each house is to be able to protect them in case of burglary. Because everybody has weapons, and there are more crimes where weapons are involved, and that brings us back to more weapons. I am sure that if the American government removed all weapons would solve many problems. I know that this will be a larger process, but look at the rest of the world. There are so many places in the world which deals with the same issues and the scope of pistol decades even close. I do not think that this problem has something to do with American history with regard to the cowboys against Indians, and so on. If we need any other reason than the gun control I think we need to look at the social disparities in the United States.
I think it is obvious that there is a relationship between welfare and most crimes in the United States. The social differences play a certain role that is clear, but you still would not have a huge problem as the cause of death, if you do not have the same law of gun control. I am sorry, but I can not understand why you Americans think that other than the police should be aloud to have guns. Why would they really be here so?
To be more focused on the school shootings. Normally, I would say that kids go crazy anywhere in the world. There will always be depressed children and the lack of parental, but children can not get things like weapons in other countries. It happens that children go crazy and maybe wants students heart, but I have never come to a point where other children died and not much has been taken.
NRA's slogan is "guns not kill, people kill people" and the fact is, but my opinion on weapons is still that I do not think anyone except the police and military should be able to have weapons. I believe very strongly that if anyone in the United States had guns, but the police, there would be more law and order. The police would be more respect and they better able to deal with situations. So remove the guns, it can only get better!
There is almost a weapon for every man, woman and child in the United States. Each year more than ten thousand has been committed and dies in weapons decade. An American has more than 21 years for the purchase of a handgun, and only 18 for the purchase of a riffle. Each state is a little different in a number of things about the gun law, but it is a fact that everyone aloud to a pistol from the age of 21 years. Personally, I think that it is madness how easily you can simply go to a store and by bullets, which generally makes people able to massacre their own if they wish.
It is completely crazy and we do not understand what really has happened in Denmark when we hear about school shootings and so on. These tragedies where it is just children who are the murders. My experience is that most of the United States wants to find the reasons why in other things than the reality. They include talk about that was caused by all violent television shows, movies, video games and computers that supposes to inspire the children to solve problems. They are talking about the lack of parental involvement and a lot of other things. Maybe they are right that it has something to do with it, but I am sure that this is not the biggest problem. It is difficult for me to see the whole gun debate. We understand that each house is to be able to protect them in case of burglary. Because everybody has weapons, and there are more crimes where weapons are involved, and that brings us back to more weapons. I am sure that if the American government removed all weapons would solve many problems. I know that this will be a larger process, but look at the rest of the world. There are so many places in the world which deals with the same issues and the scope of pistol decades even close. I do not think that this problem has something to do with American history with regard to the cowboys against Indians, and so on. If we need any other reason than the gun control I think we need to look at the social disparities in the United States.
I think it is obvious that there is a relationship between welfare and most crimes in the United States. The social differences play a certain role that is clear, but you still would not have a huge problem as the cause of death, if you do not have the same law of gun control. I am sorry, but I can not understand why you Americans think that other than the police should be aloud to have guns. Why would they really be here so?
To be more focused on the school shootings. Normally, I would say that kids go crazy anywhere in the world. There will always be depressed children and the lack of parental, but children can not get things like weapons in other countries. It happens that children go crazy and maybe wants students heart, but I have never come to a point where other children died and not much has been taken.
NRA's slogan is "guns not kill, people kill people" and the fact is, but my opinion on weapons is still that I do not think anyone except the police and military should be able to have weapons. I believe very strongly that if anyone in the United States had guns, but the police, there would be more law and order. The police would be more respect and they better able to deal with situations. So remove the guns, it can only get better!
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