Hjælp/Rettelse af engelsk

Hey, jeg har skrevet en dagbog der skal afleveres imorgen, og vil meget gerne have rettet den igennem af nogle af jer kloge hoveder (:
Her kommer teksten:

Day 1/The 9th:
Dear Dairy.
When we arrived to Montego Bay, after the long trip, we were very tired.
In the airport, we rented a car for the whole week. We went for a few places, to search for a hotel. After about an hour, we founded a nice little hotel. It was a fine but very cheap hotel with breakfast included. We unpacked our stuff for about two hours. After that, we went down to the hotels restaurant, and had some food. It was a nice restaurant. We decided to go to bed early, to get the most out of the next day.
I felt a little dizzy and had headache after the trip, but it helped when I went to bed. I the middle of the night, maybe 3:30, I woke up cause of some noise from outside. I went to the window to see from what it came.
It was some drunk Jamaican who yelled through the streets.
After they were gone, and the silence was back, I went to bed again.

Day 2/The 10th:
Dear Diary.
Philips alarm clock woke us up at 8am.
We got dressed and went down, to get some breakfast.
After the breakfast, we went for our room, to get some stuff, like our mobile phone, wallet and camera.
After we had packed our backpacks, we went for the car.
We droved to the “Dr. Cave Beach” where we should spent a part of the day.
It was a very beautiful beach, with some caves you could swim.
We were bathing and sunbathing until we were hungry.
We went to a little local restaurant called “Town House Chicken Kebab” and had lunch. After the lunch, we went to “Fort Montego”. It was a stunning ruin of a fort. We looked at it for a long time, and went inside it. Suddenly Philip was gone. I couldn’t find him anywhere. Just at I’m started to get nervous, he jumped out in front of me, and freaked me out. It was just a prick, and we laughed about it. When we had, had enough of the fort, we went home to the hotel, to have some supper. After that, we went to the downtown to check out some nightclubs. They were pretty cool and we met some people we talked with and ended up as friends. When we started to get tired, we went home to the hotel, and went to bed.

Day 3/The 11th:
Dear Diary.
We woke up at 7am and got dressed and went down for breakfast.
After we had eaten, we went to the car and drove to the harbour.
We had ordered a boat trip to Negril, to dive. It was an expensive one-day trip with all-inclusive. We got on the boat and began sailing out to the open sea.
Including ourselves, there were about 20 passengers on the boat.
I was very excided to go and diving, and had never done it before.
After 20 minutes, the boat stopped, and we got the message that those who wanted to swim could jump in, and those who wanted to dive could get their equipment. I found a suit in my size, and a crewmember helped me with the rest of the equipment. I jumped in the water, and I felt like I was flying.
I swam around in the water for a few minutes, and then I dived deeper in the water. I sow a lot of small fish, and a turtle. I could swim very close to the turtle without it seemed like it cared, but when I tried to touch it, it tried to bit me. After one hour in the water, we got lunch. And then we got back in the water.
After the trip, we were very tired and drove home to the hotel, and saw some television, and then went to bed.

Day 4/The 12th:
Dear Diary.
We hadn’t set the alarm clock, so we woke up at 11am.
We went down for some breakfast, and after that, we draw to the “Bob Marley Performance Center” and were there until lunch. I found I very boring.
We sow some statures of Bob Marley, and a stage where he has performed.
At lunchtime, we walked down a street, and found a very great restaurant called “The House Grill” where we ate a very expensive and good boiled lobster. When we had finished our food, we went back to the hotel, packed and checked out. Then we drove to Kingston. When we came to Kingston, we founded a hotel, checked in and unpacked. Then we went to the hotels restaurant, and had some food, and went back to the room to sleep.

Day 5/The 13th:
Dear Diary.
We woke up at 8am, got dressed and went down to some quick breakfast.
After that we went to the car, and drove for a “Bob Marley Museum”, to get a guided tour. It was finish at half past ten. Then we went back to the hotel, and swam in the pool for a couple of hours. At lunchtime, we ate in the hotel. It was the plan that we should go and visit a school, but none of the Jamaican schools said yes. So instead of that, we visited “The National Galleri of Jamaica” and sow a lot of sculptures and arts. After the gallery visit, we went to a Chinese restaurant called “Jade Garden” and have dinner. Then we drove back to the hotel, and went to bed.

Day 6/The 14th:
Dear Diary.
Today we decided to do nothing special. Cause it was the last day, and we should up early the next day.
After we woke, got dressed and had breakfast, we walked to the beach.
We swam, sunbathed and had fun, until lunch, which we ate on a restaurant on the beach. Then we went home, and bathed in the pool, and had a couple of drink. After that, we ate evening dinner in the hotel, and went early to bed.

På forhånd, tusind tak (: