Rettelse af engelsk

Is it good or not to become a super star at an ealy age? Sometimes I wish that my life was like Charlottes and that I was a super star like her. On the other hand do I believe that she is losing a big part of her youth. She cannot go partying with her friends and do all the other stuff you do when you are young. I think Charlotte will encounter a lot of problems on her way when becoming a super star.
There can be many problems when you become a super star at an early age; that you grow up too fast and the fact that many compare and treat you as an adult. There will probably be many situations which will be difficult for her to sort out and deal with because of her young age, as well. It can destroy a lot of friendships and create a lot of false friendships too, because you are a super star and many just want to be your friend because of that. In a way I think, Charlotte is too young to be a professional singer. I do not believe, she is ready for it, because of her young age, and i am not sure that she is completely developed. I believe that she is too young to handle the pressure there is in the music industry, as well. If I should choose to live like Charlotte or like I do now I would definitely choose my own life. I do not think, I could handle the pressure.
Another thing I disagree about is that it is lawful to be a super star in such a young age, because you earn so much money and it is difficult to handle so much money when you are so young.
I think we can compare Charlotte with Britney Spears, because she was a famous super star too when she was very young.

Lige en hurtig korrigering. :-) Jeg har byttet lidt om i det nogle steder, så hvis ikke du kan lide det, kan du jo bare se, hvor jeg har rettet.

De faktorer du skal arbejde med er især din brug af "that". Der er lidt for mange - og nogle gange behøver de faktisk slet ikke være der (ligesom på dansk med der og som) og brugen af gentagelser. 

Eks:

"On a way I think that she is too young to be a professional singer, because I believe that she is not ready for it when she is so young [...]"

Rettet:
"In a way, I think, Charlotte is too young to be a professional singer. I do not believe, she is ready for it, because of her young age [...]"

Arbejd med at få nogle flere af de "svære" ord ind i teksten. (eks. encounter)
Ellers flot skrevet.

Vh. Ida :)