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In the first paragraph Philip Zimbardo describes that almost everybody can be led to undesirable and self-destructive acts which are contrary to people’s personality. It is very clear that Phillip is not advocating cults or sects. To support his (position), he mentions terrible examples of cults which really have been a tragedy. It is though quite remarkable that only "negative" and extreme cults are mentioned. The question in the beginning reads (says): Are cults crazy and are they bearing critical messages? No one can ever defend the deeply tragic and morally reprehensible incidents that Mr. Zimbordo depicts, but to get a more nuanced approach to the fundamental question, it may be better to include other “neutral” cults, which not only have been negative and grotesque noted. Maybe this will give a more overall impression.
Philip Zimbardo has on basis of various studies some general allegations regarding cults. Among other things, he points out that cults claim that you will find instant friendship, happiness, love, have a respected position, improve your intelligence etc. Cults tell one thing, but what says former members of sundry cults.: Sources and narratives say on how cult-events degrade a person's defense mechanisms. A constant and monotonous action make people so tired that they interrupt their oppositions and criticisms. In this mode of rewarding, the people’s ideology might change, so that they without opposition and criticism accept new ideologies for themselves and maybe pre-engage them financially and personally. Cults fix in this way a new vision of life and future . These stories do not sound as traditional ways to make people happy.