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Engelsk rettelse??
Fandt selv nogle fejl i min stil som jeg satte ind før og har så rettet den. Er der andre som gider at læse min 300 ord engelske stil og se om der er fejl...?
It succeeded last night two Aboriginal men, the twenty one-year-old Billy Woodward and his brother, to break into a store in Australia and get away with a gold watch.
The twenty one-year-old Billy Woodward is an aboriginal, successful footballer who had worked hard since he was sixteen years old, until he was twenty one year old.
-When Billy came home after several years’ absence of, we celebrated his twenty-one- year-old birthday. His brother and cousin, Carlton and Rennie borrowed Billy’s car to buy something to drink. But they came home with a gold watch, as birthday present for Billy, said the sad mother.
Several witnesses were present when the police arrested Billy and Carlton.
- The police suspected Billy for the robbery as it happened at the store last night. He asked him if the car was his own. They discussed how he got the car and the watch from. The police talked humiliated to him and suddenly he was arrested for having a stolen watch, said a man who was testified.
Charge sounds very rough at the robbery. At the robbery, there were three employees of the store found kicked and got punched directly in the face of robbers and one of them is almost been killed. There were also charges for attempted murder.
Carlton states in questioning constitution guilty of both robbery and receiving the stolen goods.
Billy refuses guilty.
It is not yet determined whether Billy is innocent and may, according to police inspector take several days before the matter clarified.
The police investigate the matter by means of DNA investigation.
På forhånd tak :)
Svar #1
26. marts 2009 af Annikart (Slettet)
It succeeded last night "for" two Aboriginal men, the twenty one-year-old Billy Woodward and his brother, to break into a store in Australia and get away with a gold watch.
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Two Aboriginal men, the twenty one-year-old Billy Woodward and his brother,succeeded last night in breaking into a....... (jeg ved ikke hvad der er mest rigtigt)
The twenty-one-year-old Billy Woodward is an aboriginal and a successful footballer who had been hard working from he was sixteen-years-old, until he was twenty-one-year-old.
-When Billy came home after several years absence, we celebrated his twenty-one- year-old birthday. His brother and cousin, Carlton and Rennie borrowed Billy’s car to buy something to drink. But they came home/ came back with a gold watch, as a birthday present for Billy, said the sad mother.
Several witnesses were present when the police arrested Billy and Carlton.
- The police suspected Billy for the robbery as it happened at the store last night. He asked him if the car was his own. They discussed who he got the car and the watch from. The police talked down to him (eller: the police humilliated him....) and suddenly he was arrested for having a stolen watch, said a man who was testified (hmmmm "was testified"?? jeg ved ikke om man kan sige det "was testifing"?).
Charge sounds (jeg ved ikke hvad du mener?) very rough at the robbery. At the robbery, there were three employees of the store that was kicked and they got punched directly in the face of the robbers. One of the employees was almost killed. There were also charges for attempted murder.
Carlton states in questioning constitution guilty of both robbery and receiving the stolen goods.
Billy refuses pleeing guilty.
It is not yet determined whether Billy is innocent or not and it may, according to police inspector, take several days before the matter clarifies.
The police investigate the matter by means of DNA investigation.
Jeg har bare gået den hurtigt igennem så der kan muligvis findes fejl jeg har overset. =) Held og lykke
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