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Some words about “Family”:
A family is a complex of people who loves trusts and supports each other. In a family there are normally mother, father and children, it´s called a core family. The greater family consists of grandparents, aunts, uncles, cousins and grandchildren.
My parents loves, trusts, supports and help me, my brothers and my little sister with many thinks. I do the same for my parents, I shop groceries for all my family, I pick my sister from kindergarten and so forth.
A short description about the movie “About a boy”:
The movie is about a boy, he is about 11 years old. He lives alone with his mother. He is very worried and careful. At school he gets bullied, by some older boys. He has just two friends at the time, but so they failure him. When he learned Will more to know, be his life changed.
Will is a young man and lives alone in a house. He is a cool man with much money. He don’t like children, but get used to Marcus. Every day when Marcus gets time off from school, he goes home to Will. One day Marcus´ mother commits suicide. She comes on the hospital, and luckily she still lives. Marcus thinks about why she committed suicide, and think that maybe she needs a boyfriend.
Will thought Marcus is a little strange, but Will is a bit curious. So later he knows what’s going on for Marcus and helps him to be popular.
He gets a girlfriend and get friend. He will not be bullied more, thanks Will. Will sees Marcus as his own son. And Marcus likes him too.
My opinion about the matter:
I think the movie/ book is good because it’s about a boy who gets bullied. Now I’ve seen how it’s being bullied from a different angle. Will became a good young man. Marcus gets a good life and being popular.
Svar #1
17. oktober 2009 af Markov (Slettet)
A family is a complex of people who loves, trusts and supports each other. In a family there are normally a mother, a father and children, it´s called a core family. The greater family consists of grandparents, aunts, uncles, cousins and grandchildren.
My parents loves, trusts, supports and help me, my brothers and my little sister with many thinks. I do the same for my parents(punktum) I shop for groceries for all my family, I pick up my sister from kindergarten and so forth.
A short description about the movie: About a boy
The movie is about a boy who he is about 11 years old. He lives alone with his mother and he is very worried and careful. At school he gets bullied by some older boys. He has just two friends at the time, but so they failure him(overvej: but they let him down). When he learned Will more to know, be his life changed<- when he got to know Will better, his life changed.
Will is a young man and who lives alone in a house. He is a cool man with much money. He don’t like children (intet komma) but he gets used to get used to Marcus. Every day when Marcus gets time off from school, he goes home to Will. One day Marcus´ mother commits suicide. She comes on to the hospital and luckily she still lives. Marcus thinks about why she committed suicide, and think that maybe she needs(datid?) a boyfriend.
Will thought(tid igen) Marcus is a little strange but Will is a bit curious. So later he knows what’s going on for Marcus and helps him to be popular. (Overvej: But later he lears what's going on for Marcus and he helps him become popular)
He gets a girlfriend and get a friend. Thanks to Will he will not be bullied anymore,. Will sees Marcus as his own son. And Marcus likes him too.
My opinion about the matter:
I think the movie/ book is good because it’s about a boy who gets bullied. Now I’ve seen it from a different angle how it is to be bullied. Will became a good young man. Marcus gets a good life and being popular.
Understregning bør du ændre (der er verbumfejl - mest i tiden)
Fed skrift er hvor jeg har tilføjet eller erstattet
Vær lige opmærksom på at jeg kiggede meget hurtigt på den, så der er nok smuttere - men det er da en start.
Mit tip til dig er at lade være med at bruge disse ' apostrof ord. Det er lettere og ligeså korrekt at skrive what is istedet for for what's, og du er under alle omstændigheder nødt til at vælge om du vil bruge apostrof eller ej, da du ellers vil få fejl for den ene, den anden eller begge skrivemåder (I've been there).
Og husk at være opmærksom på verbernes bøjning.
Svar #3
18. oktober 2009 af Stygotius
"any more" skrives i to ord.
"much " bruges næsten aldrig i positive sætninger (a cool man with much money) , men kun i nægtende (He hasn't got much money). Brug i stedet "a lot of " eller "a great deal of" eller "plenty".
Der skal ALTID komma før "but".
Man kan ikke både "commit suicide" og så komme på hospitalet og "survive". Det er nonsens.
For øvrigt er "at komme på hospitalet" = "to be admitted / taken / rushed to hospital"
"Marcus thinks about why......" går ikke. skriv "Marcus wondes why....."
"I think the movie/ book is good because it’s about a boy who gets bullied" .....Det er nok næppe en (god) begrundelse for at mene at en film er god.
"how it is to be bullied" -Skriv: "What being bullied is like "
Det hedder "i stedet for", -ikke "istedet for".
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