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HJÆLP til rettelse af Engelsk

21. juni 2010 af Darianoo (Slettet) - Niveau: 9. klasse

Det her er teksten jeg vil øve til min fremlæggelse til 9 klasses engelsk afgangs eksamen. Jeg har emnet Homeless people in USA. Jeg vil blive meget taknemlig hvis der var en der lige vil kigge den igennem for fejl og grammatiske fejl, og input til hvad der måske vil lyde bedre. På forhånd tak :-)

1) I have chosen Homeless people in USA, because i think it’s a big problem, and the number of homeless people rise and rise. And it’s not a problem only in USA or Denmark, but over whole the world. And it’s you see a homeless very often when you are in the big cities. </o:p>

2) Some people believe that the reason people become homeless is because they are lazy. This is a myth. Many people who become homeless are working or had been working for a long time until something caused them to lose their employment. Sometimes people have injuries that prevent them for doing the kind of work they’re trained to do. </o:p>

But then 4 out of 10 homeless Americans are children 12 years and younger.</o:p>

Some people try to forget about their poverty and troubles by using alcohol or drugs. If they become addicted to them, they will spend a lot of money on their habit--money that should go towards rent or house payments. 62 % homeless have alcohol problems, and 58 % has drug problems. </o:p>

3) Housing first is groups to help the homeless get re-integrated into society, and out of homeless shelters. They talk with all the states, and find out how they can best help the homeless people.</o:p>

In Denmark there are several independent organizations that help homeless people, that operating shelters or hot rooms.</o:p>

4) Give them a place to sleep. Help them to get a job, and get them to rehab so they can, get rid of drug or alcohol problems. It is easier said than done but somehow they must come to realize the world can be a better place if they are willing to change. But then no one hires people with no phone number or address. A lot of homeless were living good lives, until they lost their jobs through no fault of their own. </o:p>

5) Especially store I never have had a hate on homeless people, they are human just like me and you. They just had a couple of problems that has made them lose their house and money. Just the other day I passed a homeless man on the street and of course we always think of giving them money. However, money can go many places. But, I remembered I had a bag of chips in my backpack. That just made my day and his because I knew he was very hungry, and I could feel how grateful he was. Sometimes I also buy the homeless newspaper ‘’house passed’’.</o:p>

And I also think that homeless people are very lonely, that’s maybe why most of them have a dog. I think that most of the problems in our own lives will be solved by helping others. The whole concept of being successful is based around giving and helping. So I think that we need to give them hope and encouragement, so they can believe that there still can have a great life.</o:p>

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Svar #1
21. juni 2010 af Juuler (Slettet)

Hej Darianoo

Personligt ville jeg ændre "rise and rise" til "keep rising". Til afsnit 2 kunne det være værd at bemærke, at nogle personer faktisk vælger at være hjemløse uden at have nogle økonomiske problemer. Jeg kunne godt tænke mig at vide, hvad du vil sige på dansk i den første sætning i afsnit 5, fordi det giver da ikke nogen mening. I sidste linje skal du ændre "there" til "they" og bytte om på "still" og "can".

Held og lykke :)

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Svar #2
21. juni 2010 af exatb

1) I have chosen Homeless people in USA, because i think it’s a big problem, and the number of homeless people is increasing, rise and rise and it’s not a problem only in USA or Denmark, but all over whole the world, and it’s you see a homeless very often when you are in the big cities.

2) Some people believe that the reason why people become homeless is that because they are lazy. This is a myth. Many people who become homeless are working or had have been working for a long time until something caused them to lose their employment. Sometimes people have injuries that prevent them from for doing the kind of work they’re trained to do.

But then 4 out of 10 homeless Americans are children 12 years or and younger.

Some people try to forget about their poverty and troubles by using alcohol or drugs. If they become addicted to them, they will spend a lot of money on their dependence habit--money that should be spent on go towards rent or house payments. 62 % homeless have alcohol problems, and 58 % has drug problems.

3) Housing first is groups to help the homeless to get re-integrated into society, and out of homeless shelters. They talk with all the states, and find out how they can best help the homeless people.

In Denmark there are several independent organizations that help homeless people, that operating shelters or hot rooms.

4) Give them a place to sleep. Help them to get a job, and get them to rehab so they can, get rid of drug or alcohol problems. It is easier said than done but somehow they must come to realize the world can be a better place if they are willing to change. But then no-one hires people with no phone number or address. A lot of homeless were living good lives, until they lost their jobs through no fault of their own.

5) Especially store I never have had a hate on homeless people, they are human just like me and you. They just had a couple of problems that has made them lose their house and money. Just the other day I passed a homeless man on the street and of course we always think of giving them money. However, money can go many places. But, I remembered I had a bag of chips in my backpack. That just made my day and his too because I knew he was very hungry, and I could feel how grateful he was. Sometimes I also buy the homeless newspaper ‘’house passed’’.

And I also think that homeless people are very lonely, that’s maybe why most of them have a dog. I think that most of the problems in our own lives will be solved by helping others. The whole concept of being successful is based on around giving and helping. So I think that we need to give them hope and encouragement, so they can believe that they can there still can have a great life.

Svar #3
21. juni 2010 af Darianoo (Slettet)

Tusind tak for hjælpen! Men er der en der kan hjælpe mig, med kort at skrive hvad han selv synes om hjemløse på engelsk, det ville ville være en stor hjælp!.. ups jeg var lige for hurtig til at sætte den ind i afsnit 5, så afsnit 5 er sådan her

: <span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:14.0pt;line-height: 115%;font-family:"Calibri","sans-serif";mso-ascii-theme-font:minor-latin; mso-fareast-font-family:Calibri;mso-fareast-theme-font:minor-latin;mso-hansi-theme-font: minor-latin;mso-bidi-font-family:"Times New Roman";mso-bidi-theme-font:minor-bidi; mso-ansi-language:EN-US;mso-fareast-language:EN-US;mso-bidi-language:AR-SA">I think especially shop owners doesn’t like homeless people, because they sleep in front of the shop. I never have had a hate on homeless people, they are human just like me and you. They just had a couple of problems that has made them lose their house and money. Just the other day I passed a homeless man on the street and of course we always think of giving them money. However, money can go many places...

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Svar #4
21. juni 2010 af Juuler (Slettet)

Linje2: I have never had

Linje3: They just had a couple of problems that had made them... Du skal huske at beholde datids-formen.

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Svar #5
16. februar 2011 af buldoog (Slettet)

4) linie 3 But no-one hires people with any no phone number or address

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