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My holiday (to) in Scotland
I am in the capital of Scotland now. (i)It is a beautiful city with lovely buildings(,). I saw the palace of (holy rood) Holirood house and in the Edinburgh castle I saw a fantastic show with military band, bagpipe dances. I was in Scotland’s largest and most exciting animal collection the Edinburgh (z)Zoo, and all my family favorites (was) were there, tiger(’)s gorillas and giraffes. .
I saw (the l)Lock (n)Ness. (it is one of these lochs it is twenty-three miles long and about one mile wide, it is up to 300 meters deep. Lock Ness. (i)It is the ideal hiding place for a prehistoric colony of monsters because it is so deep and dark and I saw the (l)Lock (n)Ness monster, (I didn’t have) which I hadn't seen it before. (i)It was scary to look at. I and my family (meet) met a man (they) who  told us (tomorrow) he (will) would show us the Lauriston Castle the next day.

.....Bestemt ikke dårligt !!

Tusinde tak men hvad er de markerede inde i parenteserne og de markerede udefor parenteserne?

Er den rettede nu?

My holiday to Scotland
I am in the capital of Scotland now. It is a beautiful city with lovely buildings, I saw the palace of holy rood house and in the Edinburgh castle I saw a fantastic show with military band, bagpipe dances. I was in Scotland’s largest and most exciting animal collection the Edinburgh Zoo, and all my family favorites was there, tiger’s gorillas and giraffes. .
I saw the lock ness. it is one of these lochs it is twenty-three miles long and about one mile wide, it is up to 300 meters deep. Lock Ness. It is the ideal hiding place for a prehistoric colony of monsters because it is so deep and dark and I saw the lock ness monster, I didn’t have seen it before. i was scary to look at. I and my family meet a man they told us tomorrow he (will) show us the Lauriston Castle the next day.
 

 Kan du ikke regne ud at det der står i parenteser, skal fjernes, og det der står med fede typer udenfor, skal bruges i stedet ?

Så er den jeg har rettet er det forkert?

Hmm, ja,  -du har jo mildest talt heller ikke rettet alt.

vil du hjælpe mig med hvad jeg mangler at rette?

 My holiday in Scotland
I am in the capital of Scotland now.It is a beautiful city with lovely buildings. I saw the palace of  Holirood house and in the Edinburgh castle I saw a fantastic show with military band, bagpipe dances. I was in Scotland’s largest and most exciting animal collection the Edinburgh Zoo, and all my family favorites were there, tigers gorillas and giraffes. .
I saw Lock Ness. (it is one of these lochs it is twenty-three miles long and about one mile wide, it is up to 300 meters deep. Lock Ness. It is the ideal hiding place for a prehistoric colony of monsters because it is so deep and dark and I saw the Lock Ness monster,  which I hadn't seen it before. It was scary to look at. I and my family met a man  who told us he  would show us the Lauriston Castle the next day.

Er den helt rettede nu? er der ikke nogle der vil hjælpe det til imorgen....

  My holiday in Scotland 
I am in the capital of Scotland now.It is a beautiful city with lovely buildings. I saw the palace of  Holirood house and in the Edinburgh castle I saw a fantastic show with a military band(,) and bagpipe dances. I was in Scotland’s largest and most exciting animal collection, the Edinburgh Zoo, and all my family favorites were there, tigers, gorillas and giraffes. . 
I saw Lock Ness. (it is one of these lochs???? it is twenty-three miles long and about one mile wide, it is up to 300 (meters) metres deep. (Lock Ness). It is the ideal hiding place for a prehistoric colony of monsters because it is so deep and dark and I actually saw the Lock Ness monster,  which I hadn't seen it before. It was scary to look at. I and my family met a man  who told us he  would show us the Lauriston Castle the next day.

Nu er den ret god.

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 Ooops, -jeg har overset at du har skrevet Lock Ness. Det hedde Loch Ness.

Tusinde tak for rettelsen :-)

 selv tak.