Rettelse af engelsk stil

 hvor er stilen??

 Jeg ville lige se om der var nogen der gad at rette den først. Skal jeg bare lægge den ind her??

 Ja tak

Her er den. Tak for hjælpen :) Bare så du ved det, det er en essay, og som sagt er jeg ikke færdig!!!
 

Every year a lot of people die because of war, yet war is never coming to an end. People lose their beloved ones, and sometimes they have to choose who they want to save if it is even possible. War arises because of reasons like: ‘culture’, ‘religion’, ‘race’, ‘politic’, ‘power’, and so on. War always causes problems, and it is also one of the main issues in “A Family Man”.

The story is called “A Family Man” and it is written in third person narrator. The narrator knows a lot, but he does not know everything. On page 1 line 3 to 4 “they are foreigners, like Murphy, and one even looks like Murphy”, the narrator knows that the two men are Irish like Murphy, but he does not know, that the guy looking like Murphy is Murphy’s brother, so his knowledge is limited.

The story is about a man called Murphy, he is the protagonist. Murphy is being threatened to choose side in a war between the Irish people and the English people. He has to choose between his old people, the Catholics, or he can choose his new people, the non-Catholics, either way the lives of his wife and unborn child is in danger.
The story is being told from Murphy’s point of view. The fact that Murphy’s brother is described as a brother indicates that Murphy is the most important person. The narrator also knows what Murphy is thinking and feels. It is very obvious that the narrator is trying to make the reader sympathize with Murphy by making him a victim, and by letting the reader know, how much he is thinking about his wife and unborn child.

The story is written in present tense, and because of that reason, the story seems more realistic. It seems like the event is happening right at the moment, since it is present tense, and because of that, one feels sympathy for Murphy, and wants to help him.
 

 On page 1 line 3 to 4...... - lines 3 to 4

The story is about a man called Murphy, he is the protagonist - enten "Murphy, who is the pro...." eller "...Murphy. He is....."

"The narrator also knows what Murphy is thinking and feels" - mærkeligt ordvalg?? - måske "...is able to read Murphy's mind" eller "...is thinking and feeling" eller "...thinks and feels" Nok mest 3.

Ellers giver det ikke helt mening andre steder?

okay. mange tak^^