Nogle som gider se efter fejl i mit apartheid manuskript?

Er der en, som vil være sød at se om der er nogle fejl i mit manuskript som er det jeg skal sige til min mundtlig 9.klasses eksamen i engelsk? Eller har nogle kommentarer til den, noget som burde slettes eller noget som mangler?

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What were Apartheid laws?:
Apartheid laws was a big system, where a lot of laws should be respected - and it was a basis for racial segregation in the country. From 1909 to 1980 successive governments adopted a number of different laws that went beyond the black population.

And I have two examples: In 1949 came a law, where it was illegal to get married, between people of different races.
Or another law, in 1953 it was decided to, that the various groups should be segregated in public places like buses, parks, toilets, and they may not sit on the same bench. It was two examples but there are a lot of other rules.

But apartheid laws only began first in 1948, after the National Party came to power.

Some of the impotant Apartheid laws:

South Africa Act 1909: It was South Africa's first constitution, as determined that the country, must be governed by a parliament in which only whites could be elected.

Mines & Works Act 1911 & 1926: Determined that work is reserved for the whites, and that the whites should have higher salary, than not-whites.

Native Laws Amendment Act 1937: And the last, was a law, where not-whites should have passports, so they could move outside the areas where the law stipulated that they could living.
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I ''Some of the imptant Apartheid laws'' skal jeg have lidt mere med, som forklare lidt om de love - men har jeg ikke fundet endnu.

Håber VIRKELIG på hjælp :-) På forhånd tak

Laura