engelsk stil som skal rettes!!

Hvorfor fortsætter du ikke i den anden tråd https://www.studieportalen.dk/Forums/Thread.aspx?id=1103298 , hvor teksten allerede er blevet diskuteret, og så det fremgår mere klart, at du har benyttet de mange rettelser, der blev foreslået i den tråd.

Family travel
After the holiday im going to a new school. Thats why that day was the last time I was going to see my classmates. Before I left the room, my teacher gave me a postcard:
Dear Rebecca.
You have been a very good person for all of us. We all have so many memories with you. We hope you will like your new school, and going to have a great future.
Love from your classmates and teacher who are going to miss you

I was very grateful for what they had written to me; it was a good way to start the holiday

It was a beautiful day, especially because we had summer holidays (lyder ikke rigtigt), the birds were singing, the sun was shining, and peoples  (people er flertal og ental) were happy. I have been waiting for this day for many months. My family and I had decided to, go to Miami in (skal i afsted om tre uger eller skal i være der i tre uger? det hedder for 3 weeks hvis i skal være der i tre uger) 3 weeks, and I think it will be a very good (brug et lidt mere beskrivende tillægsord) trip.
Just as I came home, we packed our suitcases and drove to the airport. My brother had not been interested for the holiday, but my parents say that he must to come. He is seventeen, almost eighteen, and 5 years older than me.
We arrived in the city after so many hours later to the city many hours later. Miami is a very beautiful and warm city.  We took a taxi to the hotel, where we were going to staying. The hotel was at a wonderful location located at a wonderful place; there was a beach, and the view from the rooms was beautiful, we could see across the city, and  at the sea.
Two weeks were spent on shopping, basking in the sun, and spending time on the beach, yet it wasn´t enough for me. Since I had already gotten to know the place, (der mangler noget her, lidt mere info) I was allowed to go out and shop in a little boutique behind the hotel. I took all my money with me, because I had spotted the most beautiful thing.
I was on my way to the boutique, with a bag in my hand that contained 500 pounds. When all of a sudden: a man pushed me down on the floor, took my bag, and ran away with all my money. I was very depressed, and began to cry. We reported him immediately to the police, but they could not find him.
It was time to go home though. I experienced something very sad, but besides that, I had the most perfect holiday with my family.

Har rettet nogle få fejl, tror stadig der er flere... men det virker meget fint :) nu ved jeg ikke hvad opgaven går ud på og hvordan din lærer nu er, men jeg synes du har sikret dig et 7-10 tal :) Du bestemmer selv om du vil bruge mine rættelser, nogle af dem er ikke så nødvendige som andre. f.eks. siger du 'the' istedet for 'my' og det tror jeg kan sænke en hel karakter, fordi det burde du kunne. Du blander lidt i tidene, selv efter jeg har rettet den, det må du selv finde ud af :)

Super! :D held og lykke

Tusind tak for hjælpen! :D Men der hvor du har sat streger under, er det de steder som jeg skal kigge mere på, og overveje at skrive noget andet i stedet? :-) ellers tusind tak!

Har fundet ud af det nu! :D

hilal1

Hvorfor er du begyndt at fjerne alle grundleddene når du skriver dansk ??

"any more" skrives i to ord !

hilal1,

Den tekst har jeg jo allerede rettet for dig én gang. Hvad vil du nu ?????

#6

Det var netop det, jeg gjorde opmærksom på i #1.

Ja, tak, det så jeg nu.

#3

dem med streg under det er hvad jeg ville skrive i stedet. det med streg under og tyk skrift er nogle ting du skal overveje, og det med streg hen over skal bare væk :)

Det var så lidt og super skrevet alligevel! :D

#)

Nåå, -super og super  det vil jeg nu ikke ligefrem kalde det.

Ikke vær så hård ved dig selv! :)

ved mig selv ?????

Pigen har jo, som sagt, allerede fået denne stil rettet  én gang i tråden "engelsk stil om sommerferie".

Man forstår ikke hvad hun vil med den her !