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Rettelse af essay (300 ord)
17. januar 2006 af
MeWannaGoBoom (Slettet)
Someone I admire...
My father is not a professional football player, a rock star or anyone worldwide known, but I am deeply proud of my father. He is such an inspiration to the people in his community. His attitude to help other out is admirable. He is simply and solely the person I most admire. He has so many qualities and things to offer despite of a tough childhood.
My father grew up with 12 brothers and sisters, which could seem nice from distance, but in reality was a struggle on the parent’s attention.
A sad fact was the mother’s drinking problem, which came to existence when the father left the family. It led to unnecessary violence towards the children, when the father was at work.
My father left home and school at the end of 6th grade, as he couldn’t find any reasons to stay. An important note in that context is the possibility of making a decent living, without an education.
So he started working as a carpenter's assistant. Then he met my mother and they moved in together at an apartment in Holbæk.
To avoid boredom I will rush to the part, where my big brother was born, right after the marriage.
He was born at the local hospital. Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived. This took hard on the whole family – especially my mother, but my father did his best in comforting her.
When you speak with my father today, you can tell that he isn’t an outcome of the finest family, as he managed to settle down and stay out of trouble, unlike many of his brothers and sisters, who inherited the mother’s craving for alcohol.
Vil blive glad, hvis en gad og kigge den igennem for fejl.
På forhånd tak
My father is not a professional football player, a rock star or anyone worldwide known, but I am deeply proud of my father. He is such an inspiration to the people in his community. His attitude to help other out is admirable. He is simply and solely the person I most admire. He has so many qualities and things to offer despite of a tough childhood.
My father grew up with 12 brothers and sisters, which could seem nice from distance, but in reality was a struggle on the parent’s attention.
A sad fact was the mother’s drinking problem, which came to existence when the father left the family. It led to unnecessary violence towards the children, when the father was at work.
My father left home and school at the end of 6th grade, as he couldn’t find any reasons to stay. An important note in that context is the possibility of making a decent living, without an education.
So he started working as a carpenter's assistant. Then he met my mother and they moved in together at an apartment in Holbæk.
To avoid boredom I will rush to the part, where my big brother was born, right after the marriage.
He was born at the local hospital. Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived. This took hard on the whole family – especially my mother, but my father did his best in comforting her.
When you speak with my father today, you can tell that he isn’t an outcome of the finest family, as he managed to settle down and stay out of trouble, unlike many of his brothers and sisters, who inherited the mother’s craving for alcohol.
Vil blive glad, hvis en gad og kigge den igennem for fejl.
På forhånd tak
Svar #1
18. januar 2006 af Drogster (Slettet)
My father is not a professional football player, a rock star or anyone known worldwide. But I am deeply proud of my father, he is such an inspiration to the people in his community. His attitude to help other people out is admirable. He is simply and solely the person I admire the most. He has so many qualities and things to offer, despite of having a tough childhood.
My father grew up with 12 brothers and sisters, which could seem nice from distance, but in reality it was a struggle of the parent’s attention.
A sad fact was the mother’s drinking problem, which came to existence when the father left the family. It led to unnecessary violence towards the children, when the father was at work.
My father left home and school at the end of 6th grade, as he couldn’t find any reasons to stay. An important note in that context is the possibility of making a decent living, without an education.
So he started working as a carpenter's assistant. Then he met my mother and they moved in together at an apartment in Holbæk.
To avoid boredom I will rush to the part, where my big brother was born, right after the marriage.
He was born at the local hospital. Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived. This took hard on the whole family – especially my mother, but my father did his best in comforting her.
When you speak to my father today, you can tell that he isn’t an outcome of the finest family, as he managed to settle down and stay out of trouble, unlike many of his brothers and sisters, who inherited the mother’s craving for alcohol.
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Vil du venligst forklare følgende på dansk eftersom jeg højst sandsynligt har misfortået betydningen af dette.
(A sad fact was the mother’s drinking problem, which came to existence when the father left the family. It led to (unnecessary) violence towards the children, when the father was at work)
..father left the family - Dette tolker jeg som om at faderen virkelig forlod familien permanent. Men i det efterfølgende du skriver, kommer jeg i tvivl. Ydermere må alt vold vel betegnes som værende unødvendigt - Med mindre der er tale om selvforsvar. :)
Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived.
Dette begriber jeg heller ikke helt. Which he hardly dealt with.. Betyder, sådan som jeg forstår det, at han ikke
prøvede på at bekæmpe det. Du mener vel i virkeligheden, at han ikke mærkede meget til sygdommen i form af smerterne - Heldigvis.
Jeg syntes at du har skrevet et flot essay, og jeg er dybt imponeret over hvor frit du formår at skrive fra hjertet, set i lyset af hvad der er sket. Det gør mig meget ondt med din storebror, men jeg håber at det går godt for dig og din familie.
My father grew up with 12 brothers and sisters, which could seem nice from distance, but in reality it was a struggle of the parent’s attention.
A sad fact was the mother’s drinking problem, which came to existence when the father left the family. It led to unnecessary violence towards the children, when the father was at work.
My father left home and school at the end of 6th grade, as he couldn’t find any reasons to stay. An important note in that context is the possibility of making a decent living, without an education.
So he started working as a carpenter's assistant. Then he met my mother and they moved in together at an apartment in Holbæk.
To avoid boredom I will rush to the part, where my big brother was born, right after the marriage.
He was born at the local hospital. Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived. This took hard on the whole family – especially my mother, but my father did his best in comforting her.
When you speak to my father today, you can tell that he isn’t an outcome of the finest family, as he managed to settle down and stay out of trouble, unlike many of his brothers and sisters, who inherited the mother’s craving for alcohol.
_____________________________________
Vil du venligst forklare følgende på dansk eftersom jeg højst sandsynligt har misfortået betydningen af dette.
(A sad fact was the mother’s drinking problem, which came to existence when the father left the family. It led to (unnecessary) violence towards the children, when the father was at work)
..father left the family - Dette tolker jeg som om at faderen virkelig forlod familien permanent. Men i det efterfølgende du skriver, kommer jeg i tvivl. Ydermere må alt vold vel betegnes som værende unødvendigt - Med mindre der er tale om selvforsvar. :)
Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived.
Dette begriber jeg heller ikke helt. Which he hardly dealt with.. Betyder, sådan som jeg forstår det, at han ikke
prøvede på at bekæmpe det. Du mener vel i virkeligheden, at han ikke mærkede meget til sygdommen i form af smerterne - Heldigvis.
Jeg syntes at du har skrevet et flot essay, og jeg er dybt imponeret over hvor frit du formår at skrive fra hjertet, set i lyset af hvad der er sket. Det gør mig meget ondt med din storebror, men jeg håber at det går godt for dig og din familie.
Svar #2
18. januar 2006 af MeWannaGoBoom (Slettet)
#1 Hm.. Roder nok lidt rundt mellem min far og min farfar - begge er omtalt som 'father'.
Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived.
^ damn s: sikke en fejlsætning. hardly som i hard, tough.. Som i smertefuld.
tak.
Unfortunately he had heart cancer, which he hardly dealt with in the two years that he lived.
^ damn s: sikke en fejlsætning. hardly som i hard, tough.. Som i smertefuld.
tak.
Svar #3
18. januar 2006 af Drogster (Slettet)
Jeg håber du kunne bruge mit lille input til noget. Herefter vil jeg gerne spørge frækt, om du ikke nok vil poste den færdige udgave af dit essay.
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