Digt - Respons søges

Jeg har skrevet et digt, jeg skal fremvise for min klasse. Det ville være prima med noget respons, samt hvis nogle ville rette sproglige fejl. Nogle vers/strofer, der er uklare, mindre gode, søgte, platte eller lign?

I’m sitting in my metal jail
Looking at the solid and firm sign
Although it clearly tells me
I don’t know which way to find

Try to get a picture of the surroundings
But it gets too blurred, they move so fast
Can’t even take a picture of my self
When present already is past

I turn my head carefully backwards
Much is behind me, that’s one of my lies
Despite the ride haven’t last long
I’m at border of closing my eyes

Of course my car is new, it looks good
Raindrops hit the metal, elegant they slide
From the outside everything looks fine
They should know what paint can hide

Behind bright-looking appearance
I more than ever feel the cold
Unfortunately I experience it’s true
Everything that glitters ain’t gold


I press down the accelerator, make my turn
It may rain, it might even snow
But now it does not matter
I know exactly where to go

I’m sitting in my car, flying
The other cars may give me a dash
But I’ve learnt if I trust the road
I will never on my way crash