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Jeg er ikk så forfærdelig god til engelsk, men har dog prøvet mig frem..
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English Fairytale

A man called Chris who a big Engineer is trying to find his dream girl. He lives with his mother Jane who is a hard working old lady. She works all day long and has only one boy - Chris. Chris is working in a big IT workshop, so he has a lot of money in his pocket. But he doesn't have a girl. He misses to be with a girl, to kiss her, to hug her and to feel her love. As a 22 year old man he still doesn’t got a girlfriend and he can’t wait any longer. Even he is 22 years old he still get big respect for his mother and do not do things she doesn’t like. But now he is a big guy and needs a girl to be with. He travels to another city to find a girl who is his type. A young, sexy and a respectable girl is all he needs, but it is not easy to find a girl like he wants. Chris wears expensive clothes, has some nice sunglasses and has a trained body too.

One day he walks down the street and see such a beauty he never has seen before! One look and he falls down! - maybe his dream girl. He falls in love with her at the first moment! With short jeans, sunglasses and a wonderful skin, he lost his mind. He was completely off! Her light brown skin, dark brown hair and the brown wonderful eyes describes such a amazing beauty. He has never felt like this before so he starts to follow her for a while, but she doesn't notice him.
One day she is going right home and then starts to follow her on the way. When she is finally home, her father comes and gives her a hug. It looks so sweet. Chris looks at her father and thinks that he's quiet big. He starts to button up his shirt and walks over to them. Her father looks at him and asks about who he is. Chris tells him a few words; I like your daughter. The father gets angry and walks over to him, and looks at him straight in the eyes and says; “You have no rights to even touch Mary” (the daughter).

Chris is really trying to make improvement. He goes to Mary and tells her that he can't imagine an another girl together with him and a life without her would even suck. Mary does actually like Chris; his style, clothes and personality. He has a good education and she thinks that he is a good guy. Chris is a respectable guy because he has much money to do with, he has all the things he needs except a sweet girl.

The father doesn't like the first impressions of Chris - because he seems to be too smart and doesn't take the life as a serious thing and just play around. The father thinks that he is together with to many girls but Chris is not a boy like he thinks; he works a lot and earn good money, he loves his family and specially his mum, but all he needs right now is a girl he can live with rest of his life. He tries to explain him that he is not a player who sleeps with many girls.

It is hard to choose a good decision, because the father loves Mary so much and don’t want to spoil her life. And he wants to be sure that she marry a good boy who can be in trust and can develop happiness 24 hours a day.

To be sure that Chris is a good boy, he will do 3 tests for Chris, that he must "pass" to marry his daughter.

Test 1. Chris is sitting in a restaurant and has booked some tasty food. A young beautiful girl who is sitting next to Chris, looks at him. The girl is one of Mary's friends. Mary's father has told her friend that he will test Chris, to be 100% sure that he doesn't talk and flirts with other girls, except his daughter.

Chris thinks that Mary's friend is sweet, but not his type. Then he takes his food and goes to another place to eat.
- He has proven that he is not interested in other girls except Mary, but the father doesn't believe him yet.

But even Chris has "passed" this test, he has to do the other tests too.

Test 2. Now the father decides to take a talk with him face to face, man and man. He takes this talk with him to know him better about his personality, money usage, alcohol, family etc.
- The Father does actually like Chris's answers - he seems to be a nice and a clever boy. But he wants to be 100 % sure, and to be that, Chris has to "pass" one more challenge.

Test 3. The father wants to make sure that Chris will do anything for Mary. So he hires a guy, who has to act like he will shoot Mary and then Chris has to prevent it.

Mary walks down the street and Chris is there too. Sudden there comes a boy and tries to shoot Mary. When Chris sees it, he runs in front of Mary so the man can’t shoot Mary and saves her life.
- When the father sees that, he is so happy - because he is now sure that Mary gets a wonderful life with Chris, if she marries him.

After few days Chris and Marry gets married to each other and they live happy until the end of their time.