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Rettelse og kritik af stil
Here it goes:
Titlen er "Music you must listen to", hvor vi skal beskrive Bruce Springsteens sang 41 shots og samtidig skrive noget om selve artiklen, der var vedhæftet til opgaven.
Al konstruktiv kritik og evt. grammatiske rettelser er velkomne.
Jeg har vedlagt en fil (word 2003):
I øvrigt kom jeg op på ca. 470 ord og grænsen var mellem 350-450, så hvis der er nogle der har noget til det, er det også velkommen ;)
Svar #1
02. oktober 2010 af BabseBritta (Slettet)
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Generally, music means a lot to many people around the globe. Music is a culture, a tradition and even plenty more things. Personally, music means a lot to me as well. I use to hear some rock – not too fancy or hard, but softly good rock like “The Beatles” for instance. I like music because it sounds good and the lyrics are also an important thing to mention. The text can either include a message or a protest to the society, which also makes music to some special. You can kinda express yourself on that way. </o:p>
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I saw a man get killed. It was late at the evening and all of a sudden 41 shots went through the air. A thought went trough my minds: “Is this only because his black? – what if his skin was by the purest white American kind?” Racism was the word… Earlier that morning Lena</st1:place> was getting her son ready to school. She told him anything he shouldn’t do if he ran into the police. Lena</st1:place> was worried about her son and just a few minutes later her son got killed. </o:p>
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The song is about a black kid who gets killed by a white police-officer. The police might have been racists due to the 41 shots, because 2 or even 1 shot would have been sufficient. They were obviously scared when the black man had his hands in his trousers. They might have thought that he had a gun, a knife or basically any weapon he would scare them with. </o:p>
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Springsteen was inspired by the real incidence in 1999 and would create a debate in the country about race-difference. </o:p>
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The police reacted rather dramatically. The president in the PBA, New York</st1:state></st1:place> Patrick Lynch posted a comment in a letter where he accused and blamed Bruce’ song. - Even though he hadn’t heard the song! Patrick said that Bruce only intended to reopen the tragic case and therefore made the song. </o:p>
However, it was not only bad things to be said about the song. Al Sharpton actually praised the song and said: “We were all born in America</st1:place></st1:country-region> – everybody has their rights”. </o:p>
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Springsteen had a lot of comments to the police reactions in the case, including: “The big purpose with this song was obviously to ask: Who we are? And that’s why I made this song, in order to bring up the issue in the US</st1:place></st1:country-region>, because it is so important. </o:p>
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I agree with Bruce in this case, and I also think that race-issues have become a major question in the US</st1:country-region></st1:place> and we got to handle that now ‘cause elsewhere there will be plenty of racism moreover and that would simply be a disaster. </o:p>
Well, I don’t thing Elvis’ song was about racism but more about a black child’s life. So it’s pretty difficult to compare…</o:p>
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