HJÆLP - engelsk stil!!!!

Hej!

Er der nogen der lige vil kigge dette stykke igennem? Der skal primært kigges efter "fordanskede" fejl, så det kommer til at lyde "korrekt".

Håber i vil hjælpe! :)

A bird flew high on the grey sky. It spread its wing and flowed over the big city. It flew over old houses with lopsided roof tiles. In the distances a bright smoke raised out a chimney and the bright smoke light shone up on the dark sky. The bird flew low and stopped outside the city on a tree. The tree had no leaves and the earth was dark and burned. There were no plants, just a dark earth with giant stones as far your eyes could see.

A little black shadow flew over the bird and the bird turned its little grey head against the sound of the shadow. The bird stopped for a second. The black shadow came to sight on the grey sky again, it had shape like a ink spot and had a pair of creepy grey eyes. The bird turned its head again and then there came a “shasch”. The shadow flew over the little bird and took it into its dangerous claws.
The shadow flew against the burned ground and turned into a massive shape. It began to make legs, arms and a head. The bird was now disappeared into the massive dark shadow, as it gain digest in the stomach of the shadow and then could feed the shadow with food. 

Cathrine had seen it all. She shived when she thought of what was happened with the little bird. It was turned into a meal for the hungry shadow. Cathrine hide herself behind a giant rock and if she got busted would it maybe be her who ended in the stomach on the hungry shadow.
Why had she gone out to collet rocks now? She blamed herself.