Nogle der gider at kigge mit engelsk eventyr i gennem på små 666 ord?

hej med dig

jeg har lige skimmet dit eventyr, og synes det hele lød godt.. tror ikke der er noget der burde ændres.:).. 

skulle lige ud med det :)

Du kan ikke sige:
"The reason was because".

Hvor ser du "The reason was because" henne?

"tilfældigvis kunne kigge"  ???????

“Do you remember your story Sara? It’s a long time ago, almost 40 years, your life has been like a fairytale sweetheart. I wish I could give you one thing in life, if I could give you that then I would give you the ability to see yourself through my eyes, only then would you realize how special you are to me”

Once upon a time there was a beautiful young girl named Sara. She was a special girl although a different and mysterious girl. Nevertheless she had friends. Sara lived with her evil stepmother in a big house, with her two stepsisters. Sara always thought that she one day would be a princess. She loved to build and “make” something and she didn’t mind getting dirt on her hands. At one time her stepsisters passed Sara and said “You are a girl and you are not supposed to dig a hole freak” Sara ran away crying. The only reason why Sara dug a hole was because she wanted to plant an apple tree.

It was a beautiful summer day in May. Sara enjoyed the weather alone on a bench in a park near where she lives. After some time, she strolled home. Right before she came home, she saw her stepsisters again. This time they told her that she’s a disgrace to the family. Sara felt that she was alone, and that it would be best for her if she left this world.

She thought that “suicide” would be a solution. She decided to leave a letter on her stepmother’s bed
“Dear Stepmother, I can’t live with you and your two daughters anymore. You treat me like shit! I've decided that life isn’t worth living for. My solution is to leave this planet. I’m sorry, Sara.”

She was depressed, sad and so helpless; she thought that “death” would be best for her right now. She decided to take her own life. She didn’t want to tell anyone about her problems. On her way to the place where she would kill herself, she saw a guy, who studied in her class. She fell in love with him. Sara thought that it was “love at first sight”. She decided to go over to him and start a conversation. “Hello” she whispered. He didn’t hear her, so he left. She thought that he hated her, and didn’t care about her, but the truth is that he was also in love with her. 

She decided to take her life in an accident. “The suicide” would take place in a seven meter tall building, where she would jump out. She took the first step to “death” when she entered the roof of the building. Right before she jumped, a guy caught her. It was her lover, her prince. He told her that it was an eternal solution to a temporary problem. She smiled cheerfully “You saved my life” she said, and hugged him. “Why are you trying to kill yourself?” the guy asked. “Everybody hates me, I don’t belong in this world”, he then answered “Sweetheart I love you more than everything, you are nice, not like other girls – you are special”.

She found her prince. A guy who treats her like the princess she is. When she came home, she shouted “Stepmother..? Hallo?” She got no answer. Sara was afraid that her stepmother had read the letter which she left to her. She went into the kitchen where she saw her stepmother crying “Stepmother?” she said. “Sara, thank god nothing happened to you. Are you okay?” the stepmother asked. “Now you are asking me if I’m okay? You are an evil woman with no heart, and so are your two daughters. You should really have a bad taste in your mouth. I’m leaving, and I’m never coming back. I’ve found my prince, and I’m happy now”.

She married her prince, and they were/ still are the happiest lovers on earth. She could officially call herself a “princess”

And they lived happily ever after.

Du siger bare til hvis du ikke er enig i mine rettelser :-)
Fint arbejde ellers :-)

"The only reason why Sara dug a hole was because she wanted to plant an apple tree."
Sætningen er stadig ikke blevet rettet.

Der er også nogle forstyrrede danskere som siger f.eks.: "Grunden til at hun ikke kom, var fordi hun var syg"

-Længe leve chimpansesproget.

"Chimpansesproget"
Ha-ha, den kan jeg godt lide :-)

Mange tusind tak AmranH
- Nu når i kritiserer mit sprog så højlydt, vil jeg gerne høre hvad rettelsen er på dette? 

"The only reason why Sara dug a hole was because she wanted to plant an apple tree."

Den kan også rettes til; "The reason why Sara digged a hole, were because she would plant an apple tree", men så er problemet så om dette er grammatisk rigtigt. 

Sætningen på dansk skal lyde således: "Grunden til at Sara gravede et hul, var fordi hun ville plante et æble træ" 

 

Den danske sætning som  "skal lyde således"  i # 9, er håbløs og forvrøvlet.

Den ønsker man ikke at "oversætte".

Det er vrøvl at skrive  "grunden skyldes"......