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Rettelse/gennemgang af stil :)
24. februar 2007 af
JonasMeldgaard (Slettet)
Hej allesammen !
Jeg er just blevet færdig med min engelske stil, så jeg tænkte om nogen evt. ville gennemlæse eller rette den :) Forventer intet stort, men det ville være dejligt med lidt kritik.
Det er et Essay kaldet 'Behind the screen' :)
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I have crossed the four oceans and seven seas – seen The Seven Wonders of the Ancient World – been in paradise – climbed the highest mountain – dived the coral reef with dolphins – done the Dakar-rally in just 1 second – been to a tea party in the White House with Bush, Clinton, Gandhi, Mao & Donald Duck; All at once! – Seen the bright colors and shapes at a fashion show in Milan – and then the girls! Holy god – Pamela – Carmen – Aguilara – Britney – Julia. And I’m only 16!
The world is beneath your feet, son – That was the words of wisdom, that dad gave his son years ago. I believe its time to paraphrase this figure of speech;
The world is beneath your forefinger!
Once upon a time; when the race Homo sapiens was based on primitiveness, life circled around two primary objects: Reproduction and survival. Those two things where both essential factors for the tribe. New warriors and workers had to be born, so that the solidarity could get food and skin.
In the time subsequently, life is no longer founded on these things. Because it’s not hard to reproduce and feed your family no more. We are searching for new challenges in our life, and ‘hey’… Why not create a new then?
Because nowadays it is a possibility, with just one single click on a mouse, to explore the whole wide world – while sitting at home, in your spongy swivel chair. Just as if it was an adventure “TDC, because you worth it!”
As it turns out, this Second Life is one of the so-called massively multiplayer online games that are booming in popularity these days. Because thousands of people can play at once, they're fundamentally different from traditional computer games in which one or two people play on one PC. In these games, typified by the current No. 1 seller, World of Warcraft, players are actors such as warriors, miners, or hunters in an endless medieval-style quest for virtual gold and power.
All told, at least 10 million people pay $15 and up a month to play these games, and maybe 20 million more log in once in a while. Some players call World of Warcraft "the new golf," as young colleagues and business partners gather online to slay orcs instead of gathering on the green to hack away at little white balls. They create a life that differs from ‘the real world’, a new isolated identity. Like an escape from reality. Yesterday I happened to overhear a conversation, between two guys who plays this game. As always I did not understand their special ‘gaming language’, but then I heard something about a fishing expedition which they were planning. It seemed pretty wired to me, considered the cold and breezy weather, so I asked them; Why fishing? The answer came as a surprise for me; their fishing trip was a part of the game. They should meet at a predetermined spot inside the virtual world, and fish? So they had made a choice. They had favored to sit in their stuffy teenage room, instead off sitting by the sea in fresh air.
We are living in ONE sick world… Humanity has been infected by a computer virus – a virus which has paralyzed the adventure lust – the lust that makes humans try to reach their limit, without a safety net. The lust to just spread the wings and fly away.
The computer is starting to be a definite part of Mr. & Mrs. Denmark’s everyday life. This has been a pure simplification of life, which has opened a door to a whole new scale of scientific knowledge – now that’s the way is seems. But if you look closer, you will realize that the fine bottle isn’t pure gold, but merely paint, which will peel off after some time – and that the contents inside isn’t a magic potion, but a mixture brewed off cloves, nutmeg and pee.
And no – I haven’t crossed the seven oceans, and I haven’t felt the fresh breeze embrace my face, while seeing the beautiful dolphins scampering about in the azure saltwater – I have at the very most crossed the living room, in my restless trudge from my PC and to the empty fridge. I haven’t seen The Seven Wonders of the Ancient World unless the internet is one of them? I haven’t climbed the highest mountain, or been on the roof of the world, enveloped in small white clouds, enjoying the majestically view over the wide mountain scenery – the only thing I have climbed is my swivel chair, and what I got was a unsentimental view at my new 19” Dell screen, enveloped in blinkers around my head. Impressive! I got to disappoint you one more time because, I haven’t been to a tea party at the White House neither… Actually, I don’t even know if they host such occasions. Just fancy me spilling on the carpet. I believe that would cause some disturbance. BUT – I have been drinking tea a vast numbers of times, at my grand mom. Here it’s no shame to spill, it’s actually anticipated. I haven’t been a visitor to a fashion show in Milan, but I have been looking at the dark quadratic lines, which frames the grey and pale interface of Windows.
The internet is like a prison, keeping the real fantastic experiences as captives in a solitary confinement cell. And it’s made for our sake, so that we can explore the world as if we were looking in an advertising circular.
Try to imagine how easy life would be, if you just had to turn on your PC and play it, find cheats and scripts that would make you the happiest man on earth!
But – there is always a but. Life is not that easy, and it can’t be lived through a 19” computer screen. The ‘diary of life’ shall not be written in Word, and the big philosophical questions are not answered as if they were a 7 cabala. The life itself can’t be planned and timetabled like in Lectio®. So saying these things you probably think that I’m against technology and development in our society – but that’s not the way I’m thinking. I’m just trying to say: “Don’t waste life exploring others life on the internet, because it will kill your lust of living. And you differently won’t be resuscitated if you die, like in your favorite computer game.”
You have one life and one chance to live it!
The world is beneath your feet…
Jeg er just blevet færdig med min engelske stil, så jeg tænkte om nogen evt. ville gennemlæse eller rette den :) Forventer intet stort, men det ville være dejligt med lidt kritik.
Det er et Essay kaldet 'Behind the screen' :)
----
----
I have crossed the four oceans and seven seas – seen The Seven Wonders of the Ancient World – been in paradise – climbed the highest mountain – dived the coral reef with dolphins – done the Dakar-rally in just 1 second – been to a tea party in the White House with Bush, Clinton, Gandhi, Mao & Donald Duck; All at once! – Seen the bright colors and shapes at a fashion show in Milan – and then the girls! Holy god – Pamela – Carmen – Aguilara – Britney – Julia. And I’m only 16!
The world is beneath your feet, son – That was the words of wisdom, that dad gave his son years ago. I believe its time to paraphrase this figure of speech;
The world is beneath your forefinger!
Once upon a time; when the race Homo sapiens was based on primitiveness, life circled around two primary objects: Reproduction and survival. Those two things where both essential factors for the tribe. New warriors and workers had to be born, so that the solidarity could get food and skin.
In the time subsequently, life is no longer founded on these things. Because it’s not hard to reproduce and feed your family no more. We are searching for new challenges in our life, and ‘hey’… Why not create a new then?
Because nowadays it is a possibility, with just one single click on a mouse, to explore the whole wide world – while sitting at home, in your spongy swivel chair. Just as if it was an adventure “TDC, because you worth it!”
As it turns out, this Second Life is one of the so-called massively multiplayer online games that are booming in popularity these days. Because thousands of people can play at once, they're fundamentally different from traditional computer games in which one or two people play on one PC. In these games, typified by the current No. 1 seller, World of Warcraft, players are actors such as warriors, miners, or hunters in an endless medieval-style quest for virtual gold and power.
All told, at least 10 million people pay $15 and up a month to play these games, and maybe 20 million more log in once in a while. Some players call World of Warcraft "the new golf," as young colleagues and business partners gather online to slay orcs instead of gathering on the green to hack away at little white balls. They create a life that differs from ‘the real world’, a new isolated identity. Like an escape from reality. Yesterday I happened to overhear a conversation, between two guys who plays this game. As always I did not understand their special ‘gaming language’, but then I heard something about a fishing expedition which they were planning. It seemed pretty wired to me, considered the cold and breezy weather, so I asked them; Why fishing? The answer came as a surprise for me; their fishing trip was a part of the game. They should meet at a predetermined spot inside the virtual world, and fish? So they had made a choice. They had favored to sit in their stuffy teenage room, instead off sitting by the sea in fresh air.
We are living in ONE sick world… Humanity has been infected by a computer virus – a virus which has paralyzed the adventure lust – the lust that makes humans try to reach their limit, without a safety net. The lust to just spread the wings and fly away.
The computer is starting to be a definite part of Mr. & Mrs. Denmark’s everyday life. This has been a pure simplification of life, which has opened a door to a whole new scale of scientific knowledge – now that’s the way is seems. But if you look closer, you will realize that the fine bottle isn’t pure gold, but merely paint, which will peel off after some time – and that the contents inside isn’t a magic potion, but a mixture brewed off cloves, nutmeg and pee.
And no – I haven’t crossed the seven oceans, and I haven’t felt the fresh breeze embrace my face, while seeing the beautiful dolphins scampering about in the azure saltwater – I have at the very most crossed the living room, in my restless trudge from my PC and to the empty fridge. I haven’t seen The Seven Wonders of the Ancient World unless the internet is one of them? I haven’t climbed the highest mountain, or been on the roof of the world, enveloped in small white clouds, enjoying the majestically view over the wide mountain scenery – the only thing I have climbed is my swivel chair, and what I got was a unsentimental view at my new 19” Dell screen, enveloped in blinkers around my head. Impressive! I got to disappoint you one more time because, I haven’t been to a tea party at the White House neither… Actually, I don’t even know if they host such occasions. Just fancy me spilling on the carpet. I believe that would cause some disturbance. BUT – I have been drinking tea a vast numbers of times, at my grand mom. Here it’s no shame to spill, it’s actually anticipated. I haven’t been a visitor to a fashion show in Milan, but I have been looking at the dark quadratic lines, which frames the grey and pale interface of Windows.
The internet is like a prison, keeping the real fantastic experiences as captives in a solitary confinement cell. And it’s made for our sake, so that we can explore the world as if we were looking in an advertising circular.
Try to imagine how easy life would be, if you just had to turn on your PC and play it, find cheats and scripts that would make you the happiest man on earth!
But – there is always a but. Life is not that easy, and it can’t be lived through a 19” computer screen. The ‘diary of life’ shall not be written in Word, and the big philosophical questions are not answered as if they were a 7 cabala. The life itself can’t be planned and timetabled like in Lectio®. So saying these things you probably think that I’m against technology and development in our society – but that’s not the way I’m thinking. I’m just trying to say: “Don’t waste life exploring others life on the internet, because it will kill your lust of living. And you differently won’t be resuscitated if you die, like in your favorite computer game.”
You have one life and one chance to live it!
The world is beneath your feet…
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