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17. november 2004 af
Peter L (Slettet)
hej... hvis der er nogen der lige har tid til at rette bare de værste fejl så vil jeg blive meget glad... den er godt skrevet ud fra et oplæg, men har nogen før lavet den vil jeg også gerne have nogen idéer...
på forhånd tak.
hilsen Peter.
Her er den så:
Sunday in the Park
A) Summary of “Sunday in the Park”
The story, written by Bel Kaufmann, takes place somewhere in a public park. The family who is consisting of a mother, a father and their little boy Larry is enjoying a peaceful Sunday afternoon in this park. The little Larry I playing in the sandbox, but suddenly a other boy called Joe starts to throw sand at Larry. The mother who is sitting on a bench in the near shook her finger at this unknown kid Joe and tries to talk him from dying it, but it continues. And when Joe get his fathers approval to keep throwing sand at Larry, Morton the father of Larry get angry. Morton confront the father and thy where starting a smaller argument. The situation almost develops in to a fight. But because the father to Joe was a big man Morton decides to leave the park with his family. Afterward Morton talk about how good it was that there wasn’t any fighting in park. Because Larry is crying Morton wants to discipline him, but he didn’t do it because the mother stops him.
B)
The family is a middle-class maybe upper-class family. We only know that Morton is a teacher on a university so it’s in that end of the society.
Then Morton decided to confront the man in the park he thought he handle it like “grown-ups normally do”. The big man probably doesn’t has a rich vocabulary, and he knows that he can’t win an argument with Morton without using his body as a weapon. Now when I have said that Morton is a teacher on a university it can’t come as a surprise that his is clever and do exactly the same as I think a lot of other people would have done. His let the big man win and leave the park instead of get beaten up.
Larry’s mother have some sought of conflict with her self. On the one hand she understand her mans decision in leaving the park because she hate violence. But on the other hand she can’t accept Morton’s weakness.
In the end of the story we see haw angry the mother get because her husband where going to punch Larry as a punishment for crying. I think the reason why the mother stop him in dying it, is because she can’t stand beside a see a coward punching her own son. And because she think Morton is a coward is because he is not man enough to stand up fight for his right but when he is the big there is noting wrong using violence.
I think the theme is about dignity. Can you have your dignity when you are a “coward” like Morton? Is it okay just to run away when someone have provoke you? If we are talking about punching children, I don’t think it is okay. But in some way it’s okay to run form your troubles. Sometimes I will even go so fare than to say that some people are stupid, if they just for there dignity, will be beaten up. Other times it’s necessary standing up in front of your problem, see it in your eyes, and show you are a man. Because if you always is running away, people think the can threat you like they wont and you have made your own hell.
I think there is too much violence in this world. The only way I can see how we can solve this problem is to learn children how to solve problems without using violence.
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på forhånd tak.
hilsen Peter.
Her er den så:
Sunday in the Park
A) Summary of “Sunday in the Park”
The story, written by Bel Kaufmann, takes place somewhere in a public park. The family who is consisting of a mother, a father and their little boy Larry is enjoying a peaceful Sunday afternoon in this park. The little Larry I playing in the sandbox, but suddenly a other boy called Joe starts to throw sand at Larry. The mother who is sitting on a bench in the near shook her finger at this unknown kid Joe and tries to talk him from dying it, but it continues. And when Joe get his fathers approval to keep throwing sand at Larry, Morton the father of Larry get angry. Morton confront the father and thy where starting a smaller argument. The situation almost develops in to a fight. But because the father to Joe was a big man Morton decides to leave the park with his family. Afterward Morton talk about how good it was that there wasn’t any fighting in park. Because Larry is crying Morton wants to discipline him, but he didn’t do it because the mother stops him.
B)
The family is a middle-class maybe upper-class family. We only know that Morton is a teacher on a university so it’s in that end of the society.
Then Morton decided to confront the man in the park he thought he handle it like “grown-ups normally do”. The big man probably doesn’t has a rich vocabulary, and he knows that he can’t win an argument with Morton without using his body as a weapon. Now when I have said that Morton is a teacher on a university it can’t come as a surprise that his is clever and do exactly the same as I think a lot of other people would have done. His let the big man win and leave the park instead of get beaten up.
Larry’s mother have some sought of conflict with her self. On the one hand she understand her mans decision in leaving the park because she hate violence. But on the other hand she can’t accept Morton’s weakness.
In the end of the story we see haw angry the mother get because her husband where going to punch Larry as a punishment for crying. I think the reason why the mother stop him in dying it, is because she can’t stand beside a see a coward punching her own son. And because she think Morton is a coward is because he is not man enough to stand up fight for his right but when he is the big there is noting wrong using violence.
I think the theme is about dignity. Can you have your dignity when you are a “coward” like Morton? Is it okay just to run away when someone have provoke you? If we are talking about punching children, I don’t think it is okay. But in some way it’s okay to run form your troubles. Sometimes I will even go so fare than to say that some people are stupid, if they just for there dignity, will be beaten up. Other times it’s necessary standing up in front of your problem, see it in your eyes, and show you are a man. Because if you always is running away, people think the can threat you like they wont and you have made your own hell.
I think there is too much violence in this world. The only way I can see how we can solve this problem is to learn children how to solve problems without using violence.
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Svar #1
17. november 2004 af Epsilon (Slettet)
Hej,
Jeg hjælper dig med A) så må du selv klare B). Jeg skriver kun rettelser (angivet med stort), hvis jeg er ret sikker på, at der er fejl. Jeg kan naturligvis tage fejl, da jeg ikke har den foreliggende tekst.
"Summary of “Sunday in the Park”
The story, written by Bel Kaufmann, takes place somewhere in a public park. The family ['who is' udeladt] consisting of a mother, a father, and their little boy Larry is enjoying a peaceful Sunday afternoon in this park. The little Larry IS [?] playing in the sandbox, but suddenly ANOTHER boy called Joe starts to throw sand at Larry. The mother who is sitting on a bench NEARBY shakes her finger at this unknown kid Joe and tries to talk him from DOING it, but HE continues. And when Joe GETS [3.person singularis!!] his fathers approval to keep throwing sand at Larry, LARRY'S FATHER MORTON [genitiv konstruktion] GETS [3.person singularis!!] angry. Morton CONFRONTS the father and THEY ARE starting a smaller argument. The situation almost develops INTO [i ét ord] a fight. But because JOE'S FATHER [genitiv igen] was a big man, Morton decides to leave the park with his family. AFTERWARDS Morton TALKS about how good it was that there wasn’t any fighting in THE park. Because Larry is crying, Morton wants to [TEACH HIM SOME MANNERS, da jeg formoder, at du mener: 'opdrage på ham'], but he DOESN'T do it because LARRY'S [det er jo ikke en hvilken som helst mor :)] mother stops him."
Jeg har to væsentlige kritikpunkter;
1) Du må IKKE glemme 3.persons s - kongruensfejl koster dyrt i vurderingen hos en engelsklærer.
2) Genitiv konstruktion med apostrof ('s) SKAL du lave, når der er tale om navne og familiemedlemmer.
Derudover skal du være opmærksom på tempus (tid). Et referat/resume skal i reglen skrives i nutid. Under alle omstændigheder må du ikke lige pludselig lave umotiverede tempusskift (fx nutid -> datid) inde i sætning.
Ellers ok.
//Singularity
Jeg hjælper dig med A) så må du selv klare B). Jeg skriver kun rettelser (angivet med stort), hvis jeg er ret sikker på, at der er fejl. Jeg kan naturligvis tage fejl, da jeg ikke har den foreliggende tekst.
"Summary of “Sunday in the Park”
The story, written by Bel Kaufmann, takes place somewhere in a public park. The family ['who is' udeladt] consisting of a mother, a father, and their little boy Larry is enjoying a peaceful Sunday afternoon in this park. The little Larry IS [?] playing in the sandbox, but suddenly ANOTHER boy called Joe starts to throw sand at Larry. The mother who is sitting on a bench NEARBY shakes her finger at this unknown kid Joe and tries to talk him from DOING it, but HE continues. And when Joe GETS [3.person singularis!!] his fathers approval to keep throwing sand at Larry, LARRY'S FATHER MORTON [genitiv konstruktion] GETS [3.person singularis!!] angry. Morton CONFRONTS the father and THEY ARE starting a smaller argument. The situation almost develops INTO [i ét ord] a fight. But because JOE'S FATHER [genitiv igen] was a big man, Morton decides to leave the park with his family. AFTERWARDS Morton TALKS about how good it was that there wasn’t any fighting in THE park. Because Larry is crying, Morton wants to [TEACH HIM SOME MANNERS, da jeg formoder, at du mener: 'opdrage på ham'], but he DOESN'T do it because LARRY'S [det er jo ikke en hvilken som helst mor :)] mother stops him."
Jeg har to væsentlige kritikpunkter;
1) Du må IKKE glemme 3.persons s - kongruensfejl koster dyrt i vurderingen hos en engelsklærer.
2) Genitiv konstruktion med apostrof ('s) SKAL du lave, når der er tale om navne og familiemedlemmer.
Derudover skal du være opmærksom på tempus (tid). Et referat/resume skal i reglen skrives i nutid. Under alle omstændigheder må du ikke lige pludselig lave umotiverede tempusskift (fx nutid -> datid) inde i sætning.
Ellers ok.
//Singularity
Svar #2
17. november 2004 af Epsilon (Slettet)
#1: Jeg har lige spottet et par fejl mere, så her kommer en ny version:
"Summary of “Sunday in the Park”
The story, written by Bel Kaufmann, takes place somewhere in a public park. The family ['who is' udeladt] consisting of a mother, a father, and their little boy Larry is enjoying a peaceful Sunday afternoon in this park. The little Larry IS [?] playing in the sandbox, but suddenly ANOTHER boy called Joe starts to throw sand at Larry. The mother who is sitting on a bench NEARBY shakes her finger at this unknown kid Joe and tries to talk him from DOING it, but HE continues. And when Joe GETS [3.person singularis!!] his FATHER'S approval to keep throwing sand at Larry, LARRY'S FATHER MORTON [genitiv konstruktion] GETS [3.person singularis!!] angry. Morton CONFRONTS the father and THEY ARE starting a smaller [mon ikke du mener et skænderi her? 'Quarrel' kan bruges i stedet for 'argument'] argument. The situation almost develops INTO [i ét ord] a fight. But because JOE'S FATHER [genitiv igen] IS a big man, Morton decides to leave the park with his family. AFTERWARDS Morton TALKS about how good it was [her må du nemlig godt skifte tid, for det er et tilbageblik] that there wasn’t any fighting in THE park. Because Larry is crying, Morton wants to TEACH HIM SOME MANNERS [da jeg formoder, at du mener: 'opdrage på ham'], but he DOESN'T do it because LARRY'S [det er jo ikke en hvilken som helst mor :)] mother stops him."
Jeg har to væsentlige kritikpunkter;
1) Du må IKKE glemme 3.persons s - kongruensfejl koster dyrt i vurderingen hos en engelsklærer.
2) Genitiv konstruktion med apostrof ('s) SKAL du lave, når der er tale om navne og familiemedlemmer.
Derudover skal du være opmærksom på tempus (tid). Et referat/resume skal i reglen skrives i nutid. Under alle omstændigheder må du ikke lige pludselig lave umotiverede tempusskift (fx nutid -> datid) inde i sætning.
Ellers ok. Jeg håber, at kommentarerne kan bruges.
//Singularity
"Summary of “Sunday in the Park”
The story, written by Bel Kaufmann, takes place somewhere in a public park. The family ['who is' udeladt] consisting of a mother, a father, and their little boy Larry is enjoying a peaceful Sunday afternoon in this park. The little Larry IS [?] playing in the sandbox, but suddenly ANOTHER boy called Joe starts to throw sand at Larry. The mother who is sitting on a bench NEARBY shakes her finger at this unknown kid Joe and tries to talk him from DOING it, but HE continues. And when Joe GETS [3.person singularis!!] his FATHER'S approval to keep throwing sand at Larry, LARRY'S FATHER MORTON [genitiv konstruktion] GETS [3.person singularis!!] angry. Morton CONFRONTS the father and THEY ARE starting a smaller [mon ikke du mener et skænderi her? 'Quarrel' kan bruges i stedet for 'argument'] argument. The situation almost develops INTO [i ét ord] a fight. But because JOE'S FATHER [genitiv igen] IS a big man, Morton decides to leave the park with his family. AFTERWARDS Morton TALKS about how good it was [her må du nemlig godt skifte tid, for det er et tilbageblik] that there wasn’t any fighting in THE park. Because Larry is crying, Morton wants to TEACH HIM SOME MANNERS [da jeg formoder, at du mener: 'opdrage på ham'], but he DOESN'T do it because LARRY'S [det er jo ikke en hvilken som helst mor :)] mother stops him."
Jeg har to væsentlige kritikpunkter;
1) Du må IKKE glemme 3.persons s - kongruensfejl koster dyrt i vurderingen hos en engelsklærer.
2) Genitiv konstruktion med apostrof ('s) SKAL du lave, når der er tale om navne og familiemedlemmer.
Derudover skal du være opmærksom på tempus (tid). Et referat/resume skal i reglen skrives i nutid. Under alle omstændigheder må du ikke lige pludselig lave umotiverede tempusskift (fx nutid -> datid) inde i sætning.
Ellers ok. Jeg håber, at kommentarerne kan bruges.
//Singularity
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