Hurtig hjælp til engelsk (til imorgen)

Hej, skal skrive en stil til i morgen. håber der er nogen der vil læse dette afsnit i gennem og rette/kommentere eventuelle fejl:

I think Simon Jenkins has a good solution to the problem about smoke. The local authorities should make the smoking ban, so it will be the local community that decides whether you are allowed to smoke at public places or not. In that way it seems more “down-to-earth”, and not as strength as a total ban all over the country coming from the government. When the local authorities make the rules there’s a bigger chance that they make the right decision. They may know the local people, and their needs, better than the government, and they are probably more open for inputs and opinions. That being said, I also see a lot of trouble coming with this proposal. A lot of people would most likely be dissatisfied if they can’t smoke in their area, but the town next to them is allowed. And maybe the outcome will depend on how many members of the local community who smoke.
All in this entire subject is very difficult because there’s no question that smoking is harmful, but on the other hand it’s your own business whether you want to smoke or not (and where).
 

på forhånd tak:)