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23. februar 2005 af
nadal (Slettet)
Hey alle er rigtig dårlig til eng og ville lige høre om der er nogle der har nogle rettelser til min stil.. er ikke skrevet i en køre, men delt op i nogle emner... så jeg ved godt at en normal stil er lidt mere flydende men det er mere stavefejl jeg har brug for hjælp til.. mvh Nadal..
MARIONETTES, INC.
The themes in this essay is male suppression, and their way to deal with it (is it ethical), and science influence in everyday life.
The author’s intentions with this essay, is to tell us that everything can be overdone. Particularly when we are talking about science, we have to slow down before the technological world will replace the “real world.” However, he also wants to tell us, that we cannot marry a person we do not love, since we have to live with her to the end of our days.
Braling is living in a very unhappy marriage, he does not love his wife, and the reason why Braling has married her, was that she threatened to call the police unless he married her. She would tell the police that he had raped her; if he did not marry her, because of he was afraid for the case would ruin his life, he did not fight for the true. Now his life is ruined, he has no free time, and has to ask his wife if he would like to take a walk. Therefore, it is a relationship with out love and happiness. Therefore, Braling have bought a marionette, which can replace him. When the marionette has replaced him, he wants to travel to Rio as he has dreamed of for the last ten years. Talking of marionettes, Braling have a very strange definition of what there is ethical and what there is not. At one time in a conversation with Smith, Braling find it unethical to put sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee, but later we find out, that he have replaced himself with a marionette. However, he cannot see any thing wrong in that. That is very strange after my opinion since I find it worse that he replace himself, and travel away for a month. Than putting sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee.
Smith is also living in an unhappy marriage, not in a so extreme way as Braling (after his own opinion) but still unhappy. The reason why the marriage is unhappy is not for want of love, but because Smith wife, Nettie overdoes everything:
“I mean, after all, when you’ve been married ten years, you don’t expect a woman to sit on your lap for two hours every evening, call you at work twelve times a day and talk baby talk”
Smith got very interested when he hears about the marionette, because he needs some breathing space. But to his big surprise, he discoverers that his “wife” is a marionette. So his “real” wife isn’t so crazy with him as he thought.
Therefore I must say not everything is like it look too.
MARIONETTES, INC.
The themes in this essay is male suppression, and their way to deal with it (is it ethical), and science influence in everyday life.
The author’s intentions with this essay, is to tell us that everything can be overdone. Particularly when we are talking about science, we have to slow down before the technological world will replace the “real world.” However, he also wants to tell us, that we cannot marry a person we do not love, since we have to live with her to the end of our days.
Braling is living in a very unhappy marriage, he does not love his wife, and the reason why Braling has married her, was that she threatened to call the police unless he married her. She would tell the police that he had raped her; if he did not marry her, because of he was afraid for the case would ruin his life, he did not fight for the true. Now his life is ruined, he has no free time, and has to ask his wife if he would like to take a walk. Therefore, it is a relationship with out love and happiness. Therefore, Braling have bought a marionette, which can replace him. When the marionette has replaced him, he wants to travel to Rio as he has dreamed of for the last ten years. Talking of marionettes, Braling have a very strange definition of what there is ethical and what there is not. At one time in a conversation with Smith, Braling find it unethical to put sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee, but later we find out, that he have replaced himself with a marionette. However, he cannot see any thing wrong in that. That is very strange after my opinion since I find it worse that he replace himself, and travel away for a month. Than putting sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee.
Smith is also living in an unhappy marriage, not in a so extreme way as Braling (after his own opinion) but still unhappy. The reason why the marriage is unhappy is not for want of love, but because Smith wife, Nettie overdoes everything:
“I mean, after all, when you’ve been married ten years, you don’t expect a woman to sit on your lap for two hours every evening, call you at work twelve times a day and talk baby talk”
Smith got very interested when he hears about the marionette, because he needs some breathing space. But to his big surprise, he discoverers that his “wife” is a marionette. So his “real” wife isn’t so crazy with him as he thought.
Therefore I must say not everything is like it look too.
Svar #1
24. februar 2005 af turkishrose (Slettet)
i linje 8 har du komme foran THAT, det må man aldrig :)
Svar #2
24. februar 2005 af Stud. (Slettet)
Hej
Linje 1:
'are' i stedet for 'is', da 'themes' er flertal
Linje 4:
samme situation. 'intentions' er flertal - derfor 'are'
I 3. afsnit:
ikke "because of", bare 'because'. Samme sted: Måske skulle du skrive, 'he was afraid if the case would ruin his life'.
'fight for the truth' i stedet for 'true'
Jeg forstår ikke 'he has to ask his wife if he would like to take a walk', men hvis du mener, at han bliver nødt til at spørge hende om lov, så skal du nok skrive '...if he could go for a walk'.
Jeg tror du skal skrive: 'Talking about marionettes, Braling has a very strange definition of what is ethical and what isn't.'
Jeg kan ikke rigtig nå mere, men kig lige din stil igennem igen og se, om du har brugt de rigtige endelser, når du fx skriver: 'He have'. Husk at det hedder 'he has' - ligesom det hedder 'he finds' - med s på til sidst. Og det samme hvis du taler om flere personer.. Hvis du skriver 'they', så skal endelsen være i flertal også. Du ved godt de her ting, for du laver det også rigtigt mange gange, men hold lige øje, for det smutter vist også for dig.
Håber du ku bruge lidt af det.
Linje 1:
'are' i stedet for 'is', da 'themes' er flertal
Linje 4:
samme situation. 'intentions' er flertal - derfor 'are'
I 3. afsnit:
ikke "because of", bare 'because'. Samme sted: Måske skulle du skrive, 'he was afraid if the case would ruin his life'.
'fight for the truth' i stedet for 'true'
Jeg forstår ikke 'he has to ask his wife if he would like to take a walk', men hvis du mener, at han bliver nødt til at spørge hende om lov, så skal du nok skrive '...if he could go for a walk'.
Jeg tror du skal skrive: 'Talking about marionettes, Braling has a very strange definition of what is ethical and what isn't.'
Jeg kan ikke rigtig nå mere, men kig lige din stil igennem igen og se, om du har brugt de rigtige endelser, når du fx skriver: 'He have'. Husk at det hedder 'he has' - ligesom det hedder 'he finds' - med s på til sidst. Og det samme hvis du taler om flere personer.. Hvis du skriver 'they', så skal endelsen være i flertal også. Du ved godt de her ting, for du laver det også rigtigt mange gange, men hold lige øje, for det smutter vist også for dig.
Håber du ku bruge lidt af det.
Svar #3
24. februar 2005 af nadal (Slettet)
Hey mange tak for hjælpen.. har lavet lidt rettelser, så vil lige høre om i vil tjekke den igen.. det vil være super!!
Ray Bradbury: MARIONETTES, INC.
Marionettes, Inc is a story wrote in 1951, it deals with science influence at the world,
The themes in this story are male suppression, and their way to deal with it (is it ethical), and science influence in everyday life. In the story, we are following to men, Smith and Braling.
Braling is living in a very unhappy marriage, he does not love his wife, and the reason why Braling has married her, was that she threatened to call the police unless he married her. She would tell the police that he had raped her; if he did not marry her, because he was afraid if the case would ruin his life, he did not fight for the truth. Now his life is ruined, he has no free time, and has to ask his wife if he could go for a walk. Therefore, it is a relationship with out love and happiness. Because of that fact, Braling have bought a marionette, which can replace him. When the marionette has replaced him, he wants to travel to Rio as he has dreamed of for the last ten years. Talking about marionettes, Braling has a very strange definition of what is ethical and what is not. At one time in a conversation with Smith, Braling finds it unethical to put sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee, but later we find out, that he has replaced himself with a marionette. However, he cannot see any thing wrong in that. Which is very strange after my opinion, since I find it worse that he replaces himself. Than putting sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee.
Smith is also living in an unhappy marriage, not in a so extreme way as Braling (after his own opinion) but still unhappy. The reason why his marriage is unhappy is not for want of love, but because Smith wife, Nettie overdoes everything:
“I mean, after all, when you’ve been married ten years, you don’t expect a woman to sit on your lap for two hours every evening, call you at work twelve times a day and talk baby talk”
Smith gets very interested when he hears about the marionette, because he needs some breathing space. To his big surprise, he discoverer that his “wife” is a marionette, so his “real” wife is not so crazy with him as he thought.
In the end of the essay it gets worse, Braling discover to his big surprise that Braling two(the marionette) has fallen in love with his wife, and therefore he will lock Braling up for forever and replace him. Braling gets extremely frightened, cause he had never imagined that the marionette wouldn’t follow his instructions. Braling two locks Braling into the box, and throwaway the key. Afterwards Braling go upstairs kiss Braling’s wife goodnight, and that will be the beginning of his new life.
Therefore I must say, not everything is like it look too.
I think the author’s intentions with this essay are to tell us that everything can be overdone. Particularly when we are talking about science, we have to slow down before the technological world will replace the “real world.” However, he also wants to tell us that we cannot marry a person we do not love, since we have to live with her to the end of our days.
Ray Bradbury: MARIONETTES, INC.
Marionettes, Inc is a story wrote in 1951, it deals with science influence at the world,
The themes in this story are male suppression, and their way to deal with it (is it ethical), and science influence in everyday life. In the story, we are following to men, Smith and Braling.
Braling is living in a very unhappy marriage, he does not love his wife, and the reason why Braling has married her, was that she threatened to call the police unless he married her. She would tell the police that he had raped her; if he did not marry her, because he was afraid if the case would ruin his life, he did not fight for the truth. Now his life is ruined, he has no free time, and has to ask his wife if he could go for a walk. Therefore, it is a relationship with out love and happiness. Because of that fact, Braling have bought a marionette, which can replace him. When the marionette has replaced him, he wants to travel to Rio as he has dreamed of for the last ten years. Talking about marionettes, Braling has a very strange definition of what is ethical and what is not. At one time in a conversation with Smith, Braling finds it unethical to put sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee, but later we find out, that he has replaced himself with a marionette. However, he cannot see any thing wrong in that. Which is very strange after my opinion, since I find it worse that he replaces himself. Than putting sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee.
Smith is also living in an unhappy marriage, not in a so extreme way as Braling (after his own opinion) but still unhappy. The reason why his marriage is unhappy is not for want of love, but because Smith wife, Nettie overdoes everything:
“I mean, after all, when you’ve been married ten years, you don’t expect a woman to sit on your lap for two hours every evening, call you at work twelve times a day and talk baby talk”
Smith gets very interested when he hears about the marionette, because he needs some breathing space. To his big surprise, he discoverer that his “wife” is a marionette, so his “real” wife is not so crazy with him as he thought.
In the end of the essay it gets worse, Braling discover to his big surprise that Braling two(the marionette) has fallen in love with his wife, and therefore he will lock Braling up for forever and replace him. Braling gets extremely frightened, cause he had never imagined that the marionette wouldn’t follow his instructions. Braling two locks Braling into the box, and throwaway the key. Afterwards Braling go upstairs kiss Braling’s wife goodnight, and that will be the beginning of his new life.
Therefore I must say, not everything is like it look too.
I think the author’s intentions with this essay are to tell us that everything can be overdone. Particularly when we are talking about science, we have to slow down before the technological world will replace the “real world.” However, he also wants to tell us that we cannot marry a person we do not love, since we have to live with her to the end of our days.
Svar #4
24. februar 2005 af Helenef (Slettet)
Hej!!
Du har skrevet "to men" - tror du mener "two men", ik?? :-)
Knus
Du har skrevet "to men" - tror du mener "two men", ik?? :-)
Knus
Svar #5
24. februar 2005 af Stud. (Slettet)
Det ser klart bedre ud nu...
Men tjek lige en gang til med det der s på udsagnordene i ental - den smutter stadig et par gange.
Desuden skal du lige kigge lidt på 'too'... hvis du mener 'også' i nogle af de sætninger du skriver, så skal det skrives 'too', og altså ikke 'two' eller 'to'
I dit første afsnit skal du bruge den korte tillægsform af 'write'- det hedder ikke 'wrote' der.
Men tjek lige en gang til med det der s på udsagnordene i ental - den smutter stadig et par gange.
Desuden skal du lige kigge lidt på 'too'... hvis du mener 'også' i nogle af de sætninger du skriver, så skal det skrives 'too', og altså ikke 'two' eller 'to'
I dit første afsnit skal du bruge den korte tillægsform af 'write'- det hedder ikke 'wrote' der.
Svar #6
25. februar 2005 af Fingersen (Slettet)
Her er lige en ret hurtig gennemgang
Marionettes Inc is a story written in 1951.
It deals with male suppression, men's way to handle with and science's influence on everyday life.
We follow two men in the story, Smith and Braling.
Braling lives in a very unhappy marriage. He does not love his wife and is only married because she has threatened to tell the police he raped her if he did not marry her.
Being afraid of having his life ruined, he does not fight back. However, his life is runined anyway.
He now has no free time, and has to ask his wife if he can go for a walk.
Therefore, it is a relationship with no love and happiness.
That is why, Braling have bought a marionette that can replace him.
When the marionette has replaced him, he wants to travel to Rio as he has dreamed about for the last ten years.
Talking about marionettes, Braling has a very strange definition of what is ethical and what is not.
At one time in a conversation with Smith, Braling finds it unethical to put sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee, however, we later we out that he has replaced himself with a marionette.
However, he cannot see the wrong thing in doing that. This is very strange in my opinion. I find it worse to replace oneself with a marionette than to put sleeping powder in his/the wife’s coffee.
Smith is also part of an unhappy marriage, not in a so extreme way as Braling (after his own opinion) but still unhappy.
The reason why his marriage is unhappy is not due to lack of love, but simply because Smith wife, Nettie, overdoes everything:
“I mean, after all, when you’ve been married ten years, you don’t expect a woman to sit on your lap for two hours every evening, call you at work twelve times a day and talk baby talk”
Smith is very interested when he hears about the marionette. That is because he needs some breathing space.
To his big surprise, he discoverer that his “wife” is a marionette.
So his “real” wife is not so crazy about him as he thought.
In the end of the essay, things get worse. Braling discovers to his big surprise that Braling Two, the marionette, has fallen in love with his wife.
That is why he wants to lock Braling up forever and take his place.
Braling gets extremely frightened, since he had never imagined that the marionette would not follow his instructions.
Braling Two locks Braling into the box, and throws away the key.
Afterwards Braling goes upstairs to kiss Braling’s wife goodnight. This is the start of a new era of his life.
Therefore I must say that not everything is not what is should be.
I think the author in this essay tries to tell us that everything can be overdone.
Particularly when talking about science, we have to slow down if the technological world is not to replace the “real world.”
However, he also wants to tell us that you cannot marry a person, whom you do not love.
Marionettes Inc is a story written in 1951.
It deals with male suppression, men's way to handle with and science's influence on everyday life.
We follow two men in the story, Smith and Braling.
Braling lives in a very unhappy marriage. He does not love his wife and is only married because she has threatened to tell the police he raped her if he did not marry her.
Being afraid of having his life ruined, he does not fight back. However, his life is runined anyway.
He now has no free time, and has to ask his wife if he can go for a walk.
Therefore, it is a relationship with no love and happiness.
That is why, Braling have bought a marionette that can replace him.
When the marionette has replaced him, he wants to travel to Rio as he has dreamed about for the last ten years.
Talking about marionettes, Braling has a very strange definition of what is ethical and what is not.
At one time in a conversation with Smith, Braling finds it unethical to put sleeping powder in his wife’s coffee, however, we later we out that he has replaced himself with a marionette.
However, he cannot see the wrong thing in doing that. This is very strange in my opinion. I find it worse to replace oneself with a marionette than to put sleeping powder in his/the wife’s coffee.
Smith is also part of an unhappy marriage, not in a so extreme way as Braling (after his own opinion) but still unhappy.
The reason why his marriage is unhappy is not due to lack of love, but simply because Smith wife, Nettie, overdoes everything:
“I mean, after all, when you’ve been married ten years, you don’t expect a woman to sit on your lap for two hours every evening, call you at work twelve times a day and talk baby talk”
Smith is very interested when he hears about the marionette. That is because he needs some breathing space.
To his big surprise, he discoverer that his “wife” is a marionette.
So his “real” wife is not so crazy about him as he thought.
In the end of the essay, things get worse. Braling discovers to his big surprise that Braling Two, the marionette, has fallen in love with his wife.
That is why he wants to lock Braling up forever and take his place.
Braling gets extremely frightened, since he had never imagined that the marionette would not follow his instructions.
Braling Two locks Braling into the box, and throws away the key.
Afterwards Braling goes upstairs to kiss Braling’s wife goodnight. This is the start of a new era of his life.
Therefore I must say that not everything is not what is should be.
I think the author in this essay tries to tell us that everything can be overdone.
Particularly when talking about science, we have to slow down if the technological world is not to replace the “real world.”
However, he also wants to tell us that you cannot marry a person, whom you do not love.
Svar #7
25. februar 2005 af Fingersen (Slettet)
handle with this suppression/handle being suppressed
Braling have = Braling has
we later we = later we find
the wrong thing in doing that = el. the wrong in doing so etc.
due to lack of love = due to the lack of love
discoverer = discovers
era of = el era in
that not everything = that everything is not what it ought/should/is supposed to be etc.
in this essay = slet det
technological world = el bare technology
Braling have = Braling has
we later we = later we find
the wrong thing in doing that = el. the wrong in doing so etc.
due to lack of love = due to the lack of love
discoverer = discovers
era of = el era in
that not everything = that everything is not what it ought/should/is supposed to be etc.
in this essay = slet det
technological world = el bare technology
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